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#1045006 - 04/10/14 02:40 PM The Glory Ride (Updated)  
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Hello all,

My 28th anniversary is creeping up on me so I figured my wife and I deserved a song. All feedback is greatly appreciated.

By the way, I already found out the "28 long years" in the chorus, may need a re-write. As I was half asleep this morning, my wife listened to the tune and all I heard was "28 LONG years, you're friggin' right it's been LONG." I guess there may have been a better way to see we have been together for a long time. smile All that being said, she enjoyed the song.

Updated version. The first verse lyrics and the chorus have been revised because of my poor use of words in the original lyric. I also redid the entire vocal and added a subtle B3 in the Bridge. Tweaked the mix a bit too.

Thx for listening.

The new version is here:

https://soundcloud.com/gocartmoz/the-glory-ride

The Glory Ride
Music & Lyrics by David S. Becker
2014 David S. Becker Music

http://soundcloud.com/gocartmoz/the-glory-ride

INTRO
VERSE 1
I'm
I'm half way there
I've got this load strapped on to my back
I've had the ride of my life beside you
But I just don't care
But there's more to share
Will you
So lets go
Will you meet me there
And pay the fare
Cause there's a light at the end of the tunnel
Will own the road as the wind
That we both should share
Blows back our hair

CHORUS
It's been 28 long years
28 great years flew by
I won't give them back
Another 28 with you
Is all I lack

INTERLUDE
VERSE 2
Do you recall
The night we met
You made me change my shirt as I stammered
Drenched in sweat
Well I'm still
Just a bit tongue tied
With every look that you send my way
On the Glory Ride

CHORUS
INTERLUDE 2
BRIDGE
So baby hop on in
Our Glory Ride begins again

VERSE 3
Well I
I have an E-Street roll
It's smooth jazz for you by the pool
And a moonlight stroll
For you
A glass of wine and a book
I'll take a diet coke and give Die Hard
Another look

CHORUS
OUTRO

Last edited by GocartMoz; 04/25/14 12:35 AM.
#1045007 - 04/10/14 02:45 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: GocartMoz]  
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This is really good, well performed, retro feel .....almost an allman brothers meets brit invasion feel. My first thought was the guitars were a bit hot, but once the vocals came on, everything gelled........nice work.

#1045020 - 04/10/14 08:02 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: maccharles]  
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Great playing and melody, Dave. How about changing "long" to "great" smile And I wonder about the "load strapped to my back" in V1 also, lol. I'd love to see the title in the chorus. But a great listen, regardless

Bill


#1045022 - 04/10/14 08:44 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: Bill Osofsky]  
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NICE
TRIBUTE

and a very good performance too


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#1045024 - 04/10/14 09:14 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: Calvin]  
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David,

HA! funny story! Nice job on the song. I thought the same as Bill when I read the lyric (after your wife's comment) - change "long" to "great"...

Love that 3rd verse! it is STRONG!

Enjoyable. You're doing great on the productions, too...

floyd

#1045026 - 04/10/14 10:00 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: floyd jane]  
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Love it Dave! Great job. How's about. 28 short years. Any way. Your getting it down with the Logic.
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#1045052 - 04/11/14 10:53 AM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: Doug Healey]  
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Hey Mac, Calvin, Bill, Floyd and Doug,

Thx much for the comments and thx for the suggestions. Bill, while I accept all fault for not realizing how the "long 28" line would be taken, the "load on my back" line was not a reference to my far better half. smile Thankfully she knew what I meant by that line, though I realize others would not. That is way too funny. I May have to leave as is for the comedic nature of it.

Dave

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#1045073 - 04/11/14 02:33 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: GocartMoz]  
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Damn it man,the loving that soloing and vocal harmonies.
It's a smoker my friend.

You have to do a video, with old video clips and pictures from the past 28 years, to share with family and friends.

Love the song's energy.




#1045075 - 04/11/14 02:41 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: Nelson]  
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Hi Dave,

I love it -- it has this bohemian feel to it that really captures the love!

I laughed at your wife's comment...how about you let HER decide word should replace "long." I thought the same thing about the load upon your back, but as long as your wife gets it -- LOL!

Lisa

#1045095 - 04/11/14 05:06 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: Lisa Gundling]  
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Hey Mr. Nelson ... Thx much for the comments, they are very much appreciated. I love putting video diaries to songs I have written. Unfortunately, based upon family and friends reactions to previous ones I have made, I may be the only one who loves them.:) My movie making talents are not very accomplished. smile

Hey Lisa ... Thx as well for listening. It is always appreciated. I was a bit on eggshells with the load line but felt confident it would be understood by her. The "28 long years" I didn't even see coming. That whole venus/mars thing I guess. smile

Thx again for chiming in.

Dave

#1045096 - 04/11/14 05:20 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: GocartMoz]  
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yeah that is funny how your wife took it Dave but other than that this is really a nice anniversary song.28 long years,longing for another 28!Mike

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Hey Michael,

Thx much for giving this a spin. Much appreciated!

Dave

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What a great tune! I could hear this playing in my car on a hot summer day while driving to the beach with the windows down. It has that type of vibe. By the way, I've been married for 28 years and I don't really have an issue with the verbiage. Then again, I didn't ask my wife what she thought! Really nice write. Thanks for sharing!

Tom W.

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Nice wide open feel to this tune..... definitely road trip material.... For me hints of Tom Petty and Eagles. Well done!

#1045169 - 04/12/14 09:17 AM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: iggyiggy]  
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Thanks Tom and Iggy for the comments. They are much appreciated. I am a huge Petty fan Iggy, so your comment means more than you know to me. Thx again for giving this a spin.

Dave

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A sound that never dates for me reminiscent of a couple of American bands I know but a timeless sound if that makes any sense lol
Thanks for the listen Dave I enjoyed it
Travis


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#1045194 - 04/12/14 01:36 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: Travis david]  
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That's a "great" tune and, it's been said, just throw "great" in for "long" and go with it. I agree with floyd that the third verse is outstanding -- it's all good but, wow, that last one caps it! Excellent production all the way around.


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Originally Posted by GocartMoz
Hey Mr. Nelson ... Thx much for the comments, they are very much appreciated. I love putting video diaries to songs I have written. Unfortunately, based upon family and friends reactions to previous ones I have made, I may be the only one who loves them.:) My movie making talents are not very accomplished. smile

Thx again for chiming in.

Dave


Sounds like the same response from my family and friends regarding my music.
"I may be the only one who loves it". laugh

#1045239 - 04/12/14 07:49 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: Nelson]  
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Thx Travis and Janice and Bud for giving this a spin. Much appreciated. Mr. elson, I can assure you that you are not the only one who enjoys your music.

Dave

#1045252 - 04/12/14 10:58 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: GocartMoz]  
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Nice playing and vocals with a great feeling tune. Congrats on 28 years smile Keep doing what your doing, it must be working smile


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#1045284 - 04/13/14 10:48 AM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: Fred Choate]  
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Thx for listening Fred. Much appreciated.

Dave

#1045438 - 04/15/14 11:04 AM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: GocartMoz]  
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Hi Dave.

I like this song's melody/production etc. I'm also a little in the mindset of rather, implying 28 years have gone by in a flash--"long" always seems to imply more drudgery. I might also keep the back-up lines toward the ending only--just me, thinking "build."

You have another good write here, some may say make the song more universal and less personal with your story--but that was your purpose, so I get that and have done the same myself.

steady-eddie.

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Thx for the listen Ed. Always appreciated. I am quite aware of the drudgery perception brought on by the use of the word "long." My wife has already made that very clear. smile That will be changed and rather quickly, if I know what is good for me!

I will think about the backup vocals, but I did want to make this a more personal song, rather than a universal one. Always appreciated your thoughts and attention to detail.

Dave

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Dave, Since other listeners have gently pointed out a couple spots where the wording could have been a little more sensitive and diplomatic, I'll just say it's a great sounding song and performance. It's full of energy. It pops! And I got a kick out of your wife's response to a "a long 28 years." She's right on the ball.


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#1045639 - 04/17/14 09:59 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: Dan Sullivan]  
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Thx for giving this a spin Dan. It is always appreciated. I am constantly learning to choose my words more carefully. smile

Dave

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Updated revised version is linked in initial post. I made some much needed lyrical revisions .:) Also redid the vocal as I thought the initial one was pitchy. Not sure this is better but I tried. Also added a subtle B3 in the bridge. Thanks for giving it a spin if you have the time.

https://soundcloud.com/gocartmoz/the-glory-ride-revised

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Hey Dave,

Great lyric changes for promoting marital harmony!

I saw an old episode of "Everyone Loves Raymond" last night. Ray and his wife got in a big fight and to prove his love for her, he said he wouldn't go to the Super Bowl game. He'd spend the day with her instead.

He got his Super Bowl ticket out, ripped it into shreds, and threw it over the hotel balcony! Two pieces were left on the floor. He picked those up and ate them!

This is your version of eating your Super Bowl tickets!! laugh

Hey -- I've tried a couple of times to listen, and Sound Cloud says they're experiencing some problems, so the link is not working. Just letting you know!

Lisa


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Hey Lisa,

Thx for checking it out again. Marital harmony is a very important thing smile The link should be working now.

https://soundcloud.com/gocartmoz/the-glory-ride-revised

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Hi Again, Dave,

Marital harmony issues aside, your changes are perfect for the song! The link was working and I listened -- and loved it yet again! It has this really great spirit to it!

Lisa

#1045811 - 04/20/14 02:57 PM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: Lisa Gundling]  
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yea, it probably aint easy as it seems to write a song for your sweet one after many years, you may choose the wrong words for example LOL. But you choose great ones when you say I'm still - Just a bit tongue tied, and it's a sweet and very 'real' song, no super romantic heroes here, but real lifelong lovers! so bravissimo, truly great one!

#1045851 - 04/21/14 11:17 AM Re: The Glory Ride [Re: MaxG]  
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Thx again Lisa and thx for stopping by Max. It is much appreciated.

Dave

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