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Seen the lyrics in the lyrics forum and a melody just grabbed me, Mike allowed me to join him on the song. I planned on doing a better recording of this, but I have been sick for the last month... So til I get a better sound, here is what I came up with. I am no recording engineer by any stretch... http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12644799I just Might Die Tonight Gaines/Leblanc © 2014 This roads a killer winding through the night This storms a chiller with no end in sight I think I'd better pull over Or I just might die tonight Her loves a killer spinning all her lies Like a Friday night thriller I can't escape her bite I gotta try and leave her Or I just might die tonight No way out if I don't play it right I just might die tonight This drugs a killer with death in its sights Just wanted a little filler for this emptiness inside I hope Gods a forgiver Or I just might die tonight No way out if I don't play it right I just might die tonight No way out if I don't play it right I just might die tonight I just might die tonight I just might die tonight Cheers Paul
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Cool lyric, Mike. And you sure did justice to it, Paul.
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Engaging performance and an entertaining lyric. Nice one guys
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Alright Paul,fantastic man!Thanx for taking this lyric on!Get well!Mike
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Hi Paul.
You did this song perfectly.
I enjoyed listening to it. And the lyrics are really good as well
God Bless Roy and Helen
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We sue appreciate that Bill!Mike
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hey Nelson,thanx for the listen!Yeah Paul caught the feel of this perfectly i think.Mike
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thank for spinnin' this Roy!Paul surprised me when i first heard it,i still get the chills when i listen to it.Mike
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The lyrics are a good read, well done going from to the storm to the lover to the drugs -- and it's all tied together with the hook line. Very fine performance from Paul, nice playing and singing. My only suggestion would be to treat "No way out if I don't play it right..." as a bridge (I think you are already are) and change the music and/or the delivery even more during that part. Pretty good stuff, for sure.
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Hey Bill Thanks for the thumbs up. The lyrics Mike posted sang the melody to me as I read, so wasn't much of a creative task for me to sing it out loud. Just wish I was better with the digital recording and mixing thing Cheers Paul
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Hey Paul,
I really enjoyed your song, good melody/lyrical concepts/ with a genuine feeling in your performance.
I agree with Kevin a bit, as I felt a "bridge" type effect with your especially 1st short chorus which I think for we songwriters will get that vibe more than a common listener.
I like what you have and appreciate short choruses as I feel I see many more that are too long. What "might" be worth exploring, is to have an additional 2nd line inserted in between the chorus lines, at least for the first two choruses--I "feel" the next line coming after the 1st, but it doesn't happen and suddenly summarizes. If it were me, I'd add a one more line there to "give it a "middle ground." I can hear it in my mind. It isn't imperative, just how I'm hearing it. No real nits here, just a sug for thought.
I really enjoyed your song and dig your vocal tone!
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Hi guys, Seems like I remember reading these cool lyrics ?? I totally enjoyed your performance, the guitar was keeping me in a trance, thanks Calvin http://www.soundclikc.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Hey Paul and Mike,
Listened to this one earlier but didn't have time to comment. Just great all around. I love the lyric and Paul, you did wonders with it. Music and lyric mesh perfectly. Loved the performance, as well. Great job guys.
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Hi Paul and Michael,
I remember this! It's gripping -- super cool, all the way around! Lisa
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thanx for the spin and sug Kevin,we really appreciate ya!Mike
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hey thanx Eddie!Nice sugs too.Yeah Paul got the right vocal delivery on this one.Mike
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thanx a bunch Calvin.yeah it was posted before.Mike
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much Appreciated Dave!Mike
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Alright,thank ya Lisa!Mike
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Paul...I liked your vocals on this. Very laid back feel, and I think the music and vocal married well together.
I kept wanting to hear a little harmonica for some reason in there every now and again.
Nice job!
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Engaging performance and an entertaining lyric. Nice one guys Hey Nelson How you doing sir? Hope all is well in your camp. Thanks for the thumbs up on this tune. When I read the lyrics Mike had written, I had to put some music to them, I just loved the way he had it laid out. Cheers Paul
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Hi Paul.
You did this song perfectly.
I enjoyed listening to it. And the lyrics are really good as well
God Bless Roy and Helen Hi Roy How are you my friend? Hope you and Helen are doing good. Happy you enjoyed this tune, appreciate you taking the time to listen and comment, always good to hear from you. I think Mike is a very good songwriter and feel lucky to be involved with one of his tunes. Thanks Again. Cheers Paul
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Nice job guys. The story flows very nicely. Paul you did a very good job, no need for excuses.
I do agree with Kevin and Eddie. The shortness of the chorus caught me off guard, seemed like it needed another two lines. I think if you just added the no way out lines to the end of all chorus’s it would sound better.
Bridges! I love bridges because they can take the song in another direction and really hit home what’s going on. Unfortunately I find them hard to write. Ha but that’s just me. I do the song could use a bridge.
Very nice though.
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Paul/Mike,
This is good! I like it the way it is. A gripping performance, Paul.
If you make any changes, my vote would be add the two lines after the 1st verse, too. Just make it 3 short-ish verses that all end in the same way..
A solid write!
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Paul...I liked your vocals on this. Very laid back feel, and I think the music and vocal married well together.
I kept wanting to hear a little harmonica for some reason in there every now and again.
Nice job! Howdy Fred Hey thanks for giving this tune your time and attention, much appreciated. I agree with the harmonica needing to be in the mix, when I redo all the tracks I intend to have harp in the mix as well as harmonies. Cheers Paul
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Really nice song this has just the right amount of laid back feel to it, like the lyrics Mike and Paul vocals really makes the words sound real if you know what i mean.
Yeah nice one.
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Nice job guys. The story flows very nicely. Paul you did a very good job, no need for excuses.
I do agree with Kevin and Eddie. The shortness of the chorus caught me off guard, seemed like it needed another two lines. I think if you just added the no way out lines to the end of all chorus’s it would sound better.
Bridges! I love bridges because they can take the song in another direction and really hit home what’s going on. Unfortunately I find them hard to write. Ha but that’s just me. I do the song could use a bridge.
Very nice though. Hi Iggy Thanks for investing your time and energy in our song, appreciated. As far as adding a bridge, I did give it strong consideration, but concluded a bridge wasnt going to add more than it would take from the simple raw emotion in the song, but since seeing a couple folks suggest one, I will give it more thought... maybe I have overlooked something. I will get with Mike and hear his thoughts on the possibility of a bridge. Thanks for the words of encouragement regarding the recording and mixing, I am very green in that area... But I love to learn, so learn I shall. Cheers Paul
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Paul/Mike,
This is good! I like it the way it is. A gripping performance, Paul.
If you make any changes, my vote would be add the two lines after the 1st verse, too. Just make it 3 short-ish verses that all end in the same way..
A solid write!
floyd Howdy Floyd Thanks for the thumbs up. Really appreciate the suggestions, seems me and Mike will need to pow wow before I get to deep into redoing all these tracks, and see if we are on the mark with this tune. Cheers Paul
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the foreboding really comes through. Nice job guys.
John
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Paul,
Really nice write! Loved the that you kept this just the guitar and your vocal. It allowed your lyrics and your vocal (witch was spot on btw) to really shine! I wouldn't change a thing!
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We appreciate the spin Fred!Mike
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hey Iggy,thanx for droppin' in and your thoughts on this!I myself like the shortness of the chorus,it says all it needs to say in this guys situation for me.Thanx.Mike
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thanx for spinnin' it Pat!Mike
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much appreciated for your ears John!Mike
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thanx a bunch Tom!I'm with you Tom,i can't see where it needs anything that would really improve it,it's dark,haunting and the guys mind set doesn't need to change.Thanx.Mike
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Nice write, the music is a great match for the lyric, love the vocal!
I also felt ready for a little bridge in there to bring the melody up at a spot, just a change up, but other than that, this is sounding great from two great songwriters!
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we thank ya droppin' in on this Tammy!Mike
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Hey Tammy
Thanks for your time and suggestion, I have been working on a bridge, gotta pitch it at Mike soon as I have it worked out.
Cheers Paul
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Gonna be tossing this tune around a bit with a good friend to come up with an arrangement then rcord in his studio... any suggestions insturment-wise
Cheers Paul
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wow,i didn't realize it hit the 3000 mark Paul!Maybe acoustic bass,cello?Oh and a telecaster?Mike
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and how about some tremolo on that tele!
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Good one guys. Good lyrics and melody. Glad they came together. Dave
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I noticed the original posting date and nearly decided to pass on listening... and that would have been a terrible mistake. Mike, I love it's elegant simplicity and Paul did the song's melody and vocal about as good as I can imagine.
Paul, you asked for suggestions regarding an arrangement for the song... and I suppose I would advise not complicating it too much. I would experiment with a flat-top/dobro in parts and possibly have backup singers around the edges here and there... but in all honesty... it needs nothing. It is one of the best I've heard here at JPF. Kudos and Chapeau! ---Dave
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we appreciate ya Donna!Mike
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hey,thank ya Dave R.,Paul really put this song in its place i think.I also like the rawness of it and wouldn't want to dress it up to pretty.Mike
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Yeah! Don't pretty it up too much. Glad this came around again. Well done.
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