As a stand alone song, I would say huh ? But as a piece incorporated into what you are doing, it all works.
As I see the plot thus far..... what your play is, to me, is an observational piece on life, and with that in mind, I find the observation both insightful, mentally challenging, and relevant to the overall theme.
Simplicity and attention to detail is sometimes hard to achieve, but it works well here.
There are, however, a number of songs like this, in the work, which are "slow". Perhaps this one could be taken way out there and given ( pehaps ) a camp knock off of...... name any musical.... just to keep things going ?
Great ideas, but how about a change in tempo ( without altering the underlying feeling ) ?
PS - I love Sienfield for observational humour, and I really enjoy what you guys are going for musical observational humour....... or rather, insight.
Thanks a bunch for taking enough interest in what we're doing to give such nice suggestions. I tend to be "slow" musically, not sure if ANYBODY wants me speeding into their ears, but I'll certainly consider what you're saying.
It's so nice to get your thoughtful take on this, in relation to the musical! You've given us another dimension here to think about and play around with. (I just put in a request to Calvin to do all the songs in slow, medium and fast, and also, short, longer and longest, in triplicate- LOL!)
I love your "observational humor" assessment! The Chinese half of me believes, like the ancient Chinese did, that it's very important to accurately and specifically name things. If you can name something with pinpoint precision, then it helps you to advance what you're doing. For that reason, I guess, their language is much more specific than the English language. We might say we have a "nephew" but the Chinese have a different name for each nephew in the family, I believe. So, if you hear the word, you know, "that's his sister's third son."
So, thanks for helping us to name this -- it will help us to advance it!