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#1039517 - 02/14/14 04:11 AM That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE)  
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Okay Folks....we have our lyric (we have edited since I recorded this worktape, so there are a few words sightly different on the new lyric) but I really would like feedback on form and arrangement of song.

I don't want to list the concerns here, cause I wanted to hear opinions that weren't brought out specifically from a question posed (if that makes sense)


https://soundcloud.com/fredchoatemusic/that-would-be-me-worktape


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#1039521 - 02/14/14 06:51 AM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Fred Choate]  
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Fred,
that piano sounds perfectly appropriate. The 1st few lines make me wonder if they have have a surprise to announce. Sunrise seems a little early for all this. It is a fun one though and sounds contemporary.

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#1039535 - 02/14/14 11:46 AM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: John Hoffman]  
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Thanks John,

Thanks for the listen and comment. Not sure the actual demo will have that much piano in it, but I do like the sound of it. Of course if we can get some good harmonica going in that rhythm section, the piano can back out a little and change up musical fills.



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#1039538 - 02/14/14 12:28 PM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Fred Choate]  
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Moves along, Fred with some colourful lyrics.
Maybe to my ears the "It would be me" needs to lengthen a tad like "meeeee".
It'll be interesting to hear the harmonica.
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#1039857 - 02/17/14 01:24 PM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Vicarn]  
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Vic, I did take your idea and try it...we still may do that a little in the final demo, but for now, we have the harmonica thing going there.

Thanks!



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#1039906 - 02/17/14 10:23 PM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Fred Choate]  
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Fred,

A fun song. The piano and harmonica work well. A little chicken-pickin' guitar to go with it would top it off...

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#1039912 - 02/17/14 10:44 PM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Fred Choate]  
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You'all have a steppin' out movin' one here--WE COULD DO A REBEL STRUT TO IT--

A great song from such a cold place this year--Some fine pickin' on the work tape!

Mackie

#1039922 - 02/17/14 11:27 PM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Mackie H.]  
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Okay smile Thanks everyone. We were thinking that maybe we would try to squeeze a bridge in there, but that would mean sacrificing a couple of things to keep it in the time frame we are looking for....so, I think it works as is with no bridge really needed. The story is getting across, the toes are a tappin', and all that....

Thanks again for the comments.


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#1039924 - 02/17/14 11:32 PM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Fred Choate]  
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Mackie.....I can't take credit for any pickin on that worktape...except to say I programed it all into Band In A Box..the live harmonica was sent to me from Dewey Dorough and I mixed that in. I am excited to hear what the real musicians will do with it in the studio smile


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#1039925 - 02/18/14 12:26 AM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Fred Choate]  
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hey Fred,a cool rockin' number!For sure keep that harp and i do like that piani ticklin' around.Ya have some good sugs also with the drawn out MEEEEEE and the chicken pickin',who don't like chickin' pickin'?Mike

#1039928 - 02/18/14 12:37 AM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Michael LeBlanc]  
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Hi Fred,
This sure is a fun, cool, rockin' number, and I sure enjoyed it!
Lisa

#1039942 - 02/18/14 01:26 AM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Lisa Gundling]  
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Thanks Mike and Lisa...chikin pikin is a sure thing on this one smile


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#1040137 - 02/20/14 06:57 PM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Fred Choate]  
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Sorta reminds me of Mr Berry's Maybelline.

Bring that piano up in the mix, a little, and pat the player on the back for me.
I like the arrangement just fine.


#1040138 - 02/20/14 08:19 PM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Nelson]  
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I like everything about and agree about not adding the bridge.


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#1040158 - 02/20/14 09:29 PM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Janice_and_Bud]  
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Fred, You got yourself a dance number here. The music all sounds good to me. It's got a good hook. Some of the lyrics could be strengthened. I'm thinking about the clay pigeons verse in particular. I don't have the lyrics in front of me so it's hard to say much more than that. Anyway, you're on the right track. Keep up the good work!


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#1040201 - 02/21/14 11:40 AM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Dan Sullivan]  
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Thanks everyone....I will post an updated worktape later today. We trimmed the lyric slightly, and polished it up. No bridge, and we were able to cut about 15 seconds off the song. All the comments here are SOOOO appreciated. Thanks again smile


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#1040278 - 02/21/14 11:50 PM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: Fred Choate]  
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I'd slow it down a tad, make the backbeat more comfortable in it's pocket....maybe back the piano up a bit and bring the guitar forward....

other than that, nice chuggin' little number.

#1040289 - 02/22/14 01:52 AM Re: That Would Be Me (WORKTAPE) [Re: maccharles]  
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Thanks Mac. Just got done with the final rewrite of this tune. Next stop for the worktape will be a a studio demo.


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