Mackie, That's one sad story. There's too many of them out there. It can drive you crazy if it's all you hear. Make sure you read some uplifting stuff and happy movies too. You sure can sing a sad tune when you have one to sing.
Write from your heart, not what you think others want to hear.
You know....this is a sad tune, but I enjoyed the emotion and the honesty of it. From a commercial point of view, I would say I could hear this in tv/movie situation.....you know with the images of a sad drama scene with the emotion of several faces being shown in slow motion as this song is playing.....I am sure the image is more vivid in my mind than it is in my typed out message.....
Murder ballads date back at least 300 years (Pretty Polly) and, yep, it's a grim tradition but they are part of our musical fiber. This one is very effective with the guitar and your vocal -- the mood is set and the imagery is very vivid. Needs movie credits rolling.
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I wrote this song, after watching two Tom Selleck movies on Netflix--I moved the setting to the Bayou, and changed the story to keep it as shallow as possible in detail, keeping in mind some aspects of the movies!
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This is really good! Cool lyrics that hit you hard. Nice melody and performance. I like the "bright" guitar against the soft vocals, but would compromise a tad and bring it back a hair just so not to have it compete with these poignant vocals.
With this sad one, I 'm still learning a lot, trying different guitars and amps--The jazz master guitar is brighter with p-90 pickups-- I didn't have the tone set just right--Though the Kustom '36 duece is a tube amp, I haven't used it enough to get a handle on the settings--I appreciate your feedback!
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this is very good. Sad story, told with subtlety. A sense of danger from the setting, screams and a pair of shoes: emotion comes both from what is said and what is not, that's great art You sing it just like it should. I agree the guitar may be a tad too much on the bright side. Thought it was an acoustic at first, and maybe it should be. I can hear some Townes Van Zandt in that recording, which is not too bad, lol! Congrats on this one!
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Yeah, just eerily quite right. You have the right balance between not saying too much, and conveying the story through reading between the lines. Solid hooks and quite almost flippant statements really make it work.
I'd like to hear it without all the hiss and buzz, but as a song writers piece, it's great anyway.