Okay Folks....we have our lyric (we have edited since I recorded this worktape, so there are a few words sightly different on the new lyric) but I really would like feedback on form and arrangement of song.
I don't want to list the concerns here, cause I wanted to hear opinions that weren't brought out specifically from a question posed (if that makes sense)
Fred, that piano sounds perfectly appropriate. The 1st few lines make me wonder if they have have a surprise to announce. Sunrise seems a little early for all this. It is a fun one though and sounds contemporary.
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Thanks for the listen and comment. Not sure the actual demo will have that much piano in it, but I do like the sound of it. Of course if we can get some good harmonica going in that rhythm section, the piano can back out a little and change up musical fills.
Okay Thanks everyone. We were thinking that maybe we would try to squeeze a bridge in there, but that would mean sacrificing a couple of things to keep it in the time frame we are looking for....so, I think it works as is with no bridge really needed. The story is getting across, the toes are a tappin', and all that....
Mackie.....I can't take credit for any pickin on that worktape...except to say I programed it all into Band In A Box..the live harmonica was sent to me from Dewey Dorough and I mixed that in. I am excited to hear what the real musicians will do with it in the studio
hey Fred,a cool rockin' number!For sure keep that harp and i do like that piani ticklin' around.Ya have some good sugs also with the drawn out MEEEEEE and the chicken pickin',who don't like chickin' pickin'?Mike
Fred, You got yourself a dance number here. The music all sounds good to me. It's got a good hook. Some of the lyrics could be strengthened. I'm thinking about the clay pigeons verse in particular. I don't have the lyrics in front of me so it's hard to say much more than that. Anyway, you're on the right track. Keep up the good work!
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Thanks everyone....I will post an updated worktape later today. We trimmed the lyric slightly, and polished it up. No bridge, and we were able to cut about 15 seconds off the song. All the comments here are SOOOO appreciated. Thanks again