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Here is the link to the "worktape" thread on this song:
http://www.jpfolks.com/forum/ubbthreads.php/ubb/showflat/Number/1036929/page/1#Post1036929


Folks,

Here is my latest song in final demo form.....performed by Greg Shields.

I did slightly speed it up, and I also did a few lyrical changes (posted below)...I hope you all enjoy this one.

https://soundcloud.com/fredchoatemusic/some-things-daddy-cant-fix

Some Things (Daddy Can’t Fix)
Fred Choate 2014 ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
VERSE 1:
A two wheeler’s kickstand
A broken wood plane with a rubber band
I can make it right when he brings ‘em to me
A little glue, the turn of a wrench
Guarantees a smile that’s a sure bet
But what about his needs not easy to see

CHORUS:
Like his aching heart down deep inside
The sadness found in those dark brown eyes
His dreams …they ain’t made of wood or brick
The hardest truth when its realized
That mommy’s gone and the reasons why
I guess theres some things even Daddy can’t fix

VERSE 2:
I tell him “Son, it’s OK”
Other than that I’m not sure what to say
She was always there to wipe away his tears
I always thought that she’d pull through
But the doctors said they did all they could do
And I ain’t sure I can take away his fears

CHORUS:
Like his aching heart down deep inside
The sadness found in those dark brown eyes
His dreams …they ain’t made of wood or brick
The hardest truth when its realized
That mommy’s gone and the reasons why
I guess theres some things even Daddy can’t fix

BRIDGE:
I can work magic with my hands
But how can I help him understand

CHORUS/TAG:
That aching heart down deep inside
The sadness found in those dark brown eyes
His dreams …they ain’t made of wood or brick
The hardest truth when its realized
That mommy’s gone and the reasons why
I guess there’s some things even Daddy can’t fix

Now I know there’s some things even Daddy

Fine demo, Fred. Greg does terrific productions and is a great writer in his own right. Good luck with it

Bill

First time I used him Bill....very impressed by his professionalism and quality! Thanks.

Fred,

Is that a coincidence or what-- that I checked out your original version and commented just before you brought in the final version on board? LOL.

Hey, this slightly faster tempo works better for me, as I just thought it was slightly dragging--this is perfect! I didn't even mind the wood and brick in this order with the slightly different delivery. The prosody areas have also now been addressed--great job! I immensely enjoyed this song with the production/performance. The piano works with this tempo better as well, but I still think an acoustic guitar version would be interesting to here for comparison.

Super job Fred!

steadie-eddie.

I thought that too Eddie, about the coincidence Anyway, thanks for the listen and the comment. I think it turned out pretty good, and it is always fun to see how a song progresses.

Production wise, I could here several things with this tune, but demo wise, I think the piano played as nicely as Greg did for this works wonderful.

We'll send 'er out into the world and see what happens

Hi Fred,

Wow -- this is just lovely! Very touching and poignantly done!

I really loved watching the progression of this, too!

Lisa

Wonderful lyrics. And I really like the vocal, too.
So, THIS is what a "pro" demo is supposed to sound like?
Looks like I'll never have one.
Nice work, Fred.

Thanks Lisa and Todd.... I appreciate the comments and the kind words

Glad you liked

This turned out great Fred, really enjoyed it!!

Tammy

Fred,

A beautiful song start to finish. Solid writing. Like Lisa said.."touching and poignant..." And a melody that keeps you listening.

The demo shows it off perfectly.

floyd

This song just keeps getting better & better.
I personally like the piano.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Thanks Floyd and Calvin and Tammy Glad you all took a listen and enjoyed.

A beautiful piece and a brilliant performance.
Bravo to all involved.

Thank you Nelson....I am pretty happy with it. Hope it finds a home on someones album some day