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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Killing Me With Kindness
(c) 2013 Geneva Griffin
Verse 1
I've never been a man to cry,
Til you knocked me to my knees..
I'm not the beggin' kind,
To say, please baby please..
If you threw sticks'n stones,
My bones would heal in time..
But you use words'n wisdom,
So composed and well-defined....
Chorus
To kill me with kindness,
Tell me I'm not your guy,
The truth really cut through me,
I feel the twist of that knife,
When you walk out the door,
It'll be the death of me.......
I'm dyin' from your honesty..
You're killin' me with kindness....
Verse 2
How I loved to make you laugh,
And the ways you made me smile..
I caught you on the rebound,
Now he wants back in your life..
You know I'll be understanding,
You want to stay best friends..
Well they say love grows or dies,
I'da been there til the end....
Chorus
You kill me with kindness,
Tell me I'm not your guy,
The truth really cut through me,
I feel the twist of that knife,
When you walk out the door,
It'll be the death of me.......
I'm dyin' from your honesty..
You're killin' me with kindness....
Bridge
One day when you finally find him for the man he is..
I honestly won't be here.. to take you back again....
Chorus
Let you kill me with kindness,
Tell me I'm not your guy,
The truth really cut through me,
I feel the twist of that knife,
When you walk out the door,
It'll be the death of me.......
I'm dyin' from your honesty..
You're killin' me with kindness....
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Excellent write Geneva one of your best.
Verse 1
I've never been a man to cry,
Til you knocked me to my knees..
I'm not the beggin' kind,
To say, please baby please..
If you threw sticks'n stones,
My bones would heal in time.
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Truth is like a poisoned arrow
so well chosen and sublime(finds it's target everytime)
Just played around with a couple of lines.
Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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This is good as usual Geneva. I do have a question though
To kill me with kindness,
Tell me I'm not your guy,
The truth really cut through me,
I feel the twist of that knife,
This part of the chorus seems to have two different Tenses
The first two lines seem to say "If" while the second two lines say "are" (If that makes sense) It could be that I just got up and the coffee hasn't hit yet and that I'm missing something in my sleepiness. In that case disregard the comment while I say "duh"
But I enjoyed the read. Nice work
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This one flowed into me with ease. I agree that it's one of your best. Verse 1 is perfect.
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Geneva,
I think this is well done. I agree that it is one of the best I have seen from you.
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Thank You Travis for the awesome suggestions!
I love that poison arrow line.
Probably play around with this again tomorrow!
Geneva
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Thanks James for bringing that up!
Always great to have a few more sets of eyes on it!
I'm going to make a few changes soon!
Geneva
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Thank you Jim for the thumbs up on this one!
Geneva
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Thanks Colin,
I appreciate your opinion on this!
Geneva
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Hi Geneva,
I agree with the rest -- really nice, great write!
One thing -- I had the same issue as James, except I felt it in the last chorus. I thought that maybe it should be:
Chorus
Let you kill me with kindness,
Tell me I'm not your guy,
The truth really cut through me,
I FELT the twist of that knife,
When you walkED out the door,
But then I couldn't figure out how to make the rest of it past tense. But maybe it doesn't need to be!?!
Lisa
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Hey Geneva
An excellent write. Nice job.
Peace
Joe
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Thanks Lisa,
I'm going to love at that, finially getting back to some rewrites.
Geneva
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Very strong NG. Well laid out from start to finish. No "nits" from the frozen north.
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I agree with everyone else. Really Good! I was playing around with the past tense?
Let you kill me with kindness,
Tell me I'm not your guy,
How can the truth be deadly,
it cut's just like a knife
When you walk out the door,
It'll be the death of me.......
Oh You're killin' me with kindness....
Yes its death by honesty..
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Hi Geneva You know I'm not very good at this criticing others lyrics here,  but I did read through and like what you've written. You have a lot of great advice, which I'm pleased you have. The Hook, Killing me with Kindness,  I thought was unique, stood out for me, so well done, and keep tweaking it, goodluck. Hugs Michele
Last edited by Michele Howlett; 01/21/14 06:51 AM.
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