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song a week #34...of 52.

let the drinking begin.

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<stupor man>



make his problems tiny,
make the world soft and shiny,
yeah,that's easy-

he could've saved the day,
if not for timing,
he got tangled in his cape-

wouldn't it be lovely,
wouldn't it be grand,
wouldn't it be lovely,
if nothing's broken when he lands-

he's always fine until,
the floor comes up,
and hits him in the light switch-

warm and fuzzy, lovey dovey,
life is sunny there behind those shades-

wouldn't it be lovely,
wouldn't it be grand,
if he didn't spill my wine when he's flying like stupor man-

don't try that at home,
when you're alone,
cause he can tell you're not an hero-

leave it to an ameteur,
to do it when there's no one else around-

wouldn't it be lovely,
wouldn't it be grand,
if he didn't spill my wine when he's flying like stupor man-

stupor man, has no plan, to leave his chair-
stupor man, has no plans,.....and doesn't care-

(solo)

he's always fine until,
the floor comes up,
and hits him in the light switch-

warm and fuzzy, lovey dovey,
life is sunny there behind those shades-


wouldn't it be lovely,
wouldn't it be grand,
if he didn't spill my wine when he's flying like stupor man-

Somebody's Channellin' Steely Dan Tonight...heh!!!

LOVED It...Wish Ida Thought of that GREAT Title!!! And Everything Else!!! Well-Done, & Good Luck with it, Amigo!

Best Wishes & a Big Guy-Hug,
Stan

stan,

I hear the steely dan comparison a lot.....I don't hear it, but they have been a musical staple of mine forever. I wonder sometimes, is it the grooves and chord changes?....don't know.

thank you for the review, sir.

cool tune Mac!yep,pretty cool!Mike

Hey Mac,

Yeah, that's got a cool groove. Can't actually believe you're DOING IT and keep on going mate, you're doing good stuff and putting the rest of us to shame.

The song itself ? Loved it up until the middle 8. I think that it just went somewhere it didn't need to go. Kind of like a Beatles mid 8 got spliced into a blues tune.

It's a nice clean sound ( are you using BIAB? ) and good for concepts, and I think if this song was replaced by real players, and given some arrangement, I could happily sit in any dingy smokey bar anywhere, and let the world drift by. ( apart from the bridge )

cheers, niteshift

Michael,

thank you for the kudos.

Nite,

BIAB?....I take it, after googling...that it's a backing track software?.....ha ha......no, it's real.....it's all me, right down to "playing" the drums by hand on a keyboard. regarding the middle eight, I had something totally different at first pass and din't like it....so I changed it at the last minute.....oh well.

thanks for the review.

Nice groove! Reminded me of The Beatles' "Taxman" there for a second.

Jim

Jim,

taxman?.....didn't see/hear that coming.

thanks for the spin.

Mac,

Another winner imo. The only thing I thought might be cool is a little tremelo in the electric guitar in spots.

Really like your upbeat musical grooves.

Ricky

Mac,

Wonderful tune! I was really getting into the song and enjoying it--great performance, arrangement, and production.

My only nit, I agree parcially with Niteshift, about your "bridge?" -- Stupor Man, before the solo, (if indeed that is what Niteshift was referring to) If not, well my thought there is you have such a clean crisp sound going with the song, but it gets a little "muddy" on those lines at that point for me. I'm thinking it just needs some adjustment with your effects--volume/eq/compression etc. Since it does reflect your song title, it is a crucial part of your song especially with the music digression--I like the idea of harmony, but I would experiment there a bit, maybe pull it back in the mix to reflect more like a bridge, rather than jump out at you like a chorus "hook." JMO--for what it is worth.

Very cool indeed, I also wouldn't mind hearing a few center hits on the cymbal crown for some accents here and there--would be easy to insert on a separate track.

Great write man! I really like this a lot Mac--a couple of ideas for you from me to "use or lose."

steady-eddie.

Eddie,

there is a little delay over the bridge vocals, I added them as an after thought....originally I was going to start the solo there, but being pressed for time, I left it and moved on.....all good points.

thanks for the review.