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OK, I have redone the whole thing, getting rid of the mechanical drums to new rhythm guitar and vocals. I hope this got rid of the timing issues. Sounds better to me but you be the judge. Thanks to everyone for their valuable feedback!!!

Jesus Christ Is Coming Back Again
©2013 Steven M. Biederman
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[Spoken]
Jesus said, "If you give, you will get! Your gift will return
to you in full and overflowing measure,
pressed down, shaken together to make room for more,
and running over. Whatever measure you use to give --
large or small -- will be used to measure what is
given back to you." (Luke 6:38)

We've been throwing good seed out
Throwing it out by both hands
As time itself unfolds towards it's end
Give a rock foundation to
Those who built their house on sand
The day of salvation's around the bend

[Chorus]
Get the good news story out to them, my friend
Tell the good news story till the end
Spread the good news story in these hard times
Jesus Christ is coming back again


[Spoken]
16 For God so loved the world that he gave his one
and only Son, that whoever believes in him shall not perish
but have eternal life. 17 For God did not send his Son into
the world to condemn the world,
but to save the world through him. (John 3:16-17)


Tell the story to some young girl
Tell it to some young man
That they can be forgiven of their sins
Tell the story to everyone
No matter where they stand
Tell them it's not too late to be born again

[Chorus]
Get the good news story out to them, my friend
Tell the good news story till the end
Spread the good news story in these hard times
Jesus Christ is coming back again

[Spoken]
Put on the full armour of God so that you
can take your stand against the devil's schemes. For our
struggle is not against flesh and blood, but against
the rulers, against the authorities, against the powers
of this dark world and against the spiritual forces of
evil in the heavenly realms. (Ephesians 6:11-17)

Tell the story throughout the world
Every nation, every land
Put on the armor of God and stand
The breastplate of righteousness
The helmet of salvation
Let every knee bow down in adoration

[Chorus]
Get the good news story out to them, my friend
Tell the good news story till the end
Spread the good news story in these hard times
Jesus Christ is coming back again

Jesus Christ is Coming back again
Jesus Christ is Coming back again

STEVIE--

A FINE SONG HERE BRO'--

MAY REACH SOME NON-BELIEVERS TOO!

IT'S ONE OF YOUR BEST MY FRIEND--

THE CH MELODY COULD STAN D OUT A LITTLE MORE FOR ME!

WRITE ON--

Mackie

Good Day Steven,

Saw your song when I was posting mine so I gave it a listen. The intro reminded me of “Get Back”, pretty cool. The spoken word threw me off at first, sounding like you had lyrics out of sync with the music. Maybe just a matter of re-doing to get a better feel for timing. The second and third set of spoken words were fine.

Nice message, clear vocals. Keep on keepin on!

Little Stevie, "Let every knee bow down in adulation." I think you meant "adoration." Keep spreading the Gospel.

Hey there L_stevie.........I love the current event appropriateness of this song.....great write!! The lyric is terrific.
The music, at times, seems out of rhythm with the beat and vocals, however.
And as always....love that dry delivery style of your vocals!!
Good stuff! -Tom

Thanks Brother Mackie. Hopefully my music will get some who don't believe or aren't sure what to believe to at least explore the matter. I appreciate it.

Stevie

Thanks for the audition, Iggy. Yeah, it's just a rough sketch at this point so about everything needs to be redone. Thanks for taking the time.

Stevie

It's past time to get ready, the heavenly flight is booked to planet earth, time is running out for many, the return flight will gather all who truly believe, that Jesus Christ is coming back again...Hallelujah--loved it Stevie.....

Hi Stevie.

Nice song, a little long. I like the spoken lyrics & the chorus the best--was thinking if you shortened the verses, they could act like pre-choruses--just a thought for experimentation. Good luck with it!

steady-eddie.

Thanks Dan. Adulation is the word I wanted although I see how it could be confused with adoration. Here is the definition of adulation from Dictionary.com.

ad·u·la·tion/ˌædʒəˈleɪʃən/ Show Spelled [aj-uh-ley-shuhn]
noun
excessive devotion to someone; servile flattery

I appreciate the heads up though as well as you taking the time to listen and bring that to the forefront.

Stevie.

Stevie, if you have separate tracks, I would like to offer to put them in time to the drums. Shame to have such a cool song feel too jumpy and being off beat with all tracks doing that. Do you have the vocals, the music, and the drums on separate tracks that you could send me via Dropbox? I can do it quick-like today.

Thanks Tom. Yeah, I posted this knowing I was going to redo all the guitars I was experimenting with, timing being an issue. Probably should have waited but I thought I might get some feedback on it first to see if the song was worthwhile.

Stevie

Thanks Matt. I appreciate it.

Stevie

Thanks for the listen and critique, Shayne.

Stevie

Thanks Johnny. I appreciate the offer but I'm going to redo the whole thing anyway as I mentioned above. It's pilot error on the playing of the rhythm guitars and bass that caused it. Don't know why my timing was off so much as this is the first time that's happened to me. I only posted it as is with the caveat mentioned at the top of my post that I was going to redo the guitars to tighten it up. I wanted to see if the song had merit enough to pursue doing that. So it's not a matter of tracks not lining up but being played sloppily. I think one reason is I injured the thumb on my left hand and can't put any pressure on the neck of my guitar to play the barre chords so I got thrown off. I even tried laying down another rhythm track opposite the first one and it didn't help. I might try eliminating the one track and even redoing the bass but I might as well just start again from scratch. Thanks for the generous offer though.

Stevie

Thanks for the listen, Carl. I explained to Johnny what the problem is above so I won't bore you with the reasons why. The only thing canned is the drums which were going to be replaced with real drums when I have the chance. I suppose in afterthought that I should have waited to post it until I redid everything but I wanted to get some feedback on the lyrical content and the melody before I started over. Thanks again.

Stevie

I really enjoyed this Steve. The alternating between spoken and sung is awesome. I also love the passages you brought up. Ephesians in particulair, just soooo much meat in that book. I am taking an in depth look at chapter 5 right now as a matter of fact. All the pieces are there, just needs a little fine tuning.

Todd

A much different approach but oh how i like it!Great job!Ya got a few good sugs so i'll leave it at that.Mike

Thanks Todd. Glad it spoke to you. I've redone the whole song and (I hope)gotten rid of the timing issues.

Stevie

Hey Stevie,

I really like the melody alot. I love the twangy guitar throughout. Are you using a Rickenbacker in this? I also like the spoken lyrics. Nice contrast with the chorus. Nice work.

Dave

Mr. Biederman


That rock & Roll Rocks

Rock & Roll rock on !!!

Im rock & Roll diggin it !


Cheers
Paul

Thanks for the listen and comments, Mike. Glad you like it.

Stevie

Thanks Dave. No, it's not my Rickenbacker in this one. It was a Strat. I appreciate the listen and comments.

Stevie

Stevie, how's it going?

I came back to hear your new mix. I listened a couple of times, and think I know IMHO what would help with the drum track. First I don't know if you are using separate tracks for kicks/snare/toms/hi-hats/cymbals--but even if you aren't and are using loops--here is my idea:

Lose the snare completely with the spoken verses--this is where it's almost impossible to snyc what you are speaking to the drum tempo. I would only use a quiet "tat-tat-tat-tat" (double-time hits_ on a "closed" hi-hat during the spoken verses. I think you will get a "less disconcerting" effect and a more focused spoken verse. You can make a separate drum track loop for those areas if your using loops.

I'm not 100% sure, but feel pretty confident that this would be an improvement--keep or sweep.

steady-eddie.

Thanks Eddie. I'm still not through messing with this one so I may take your advice. It would break it up a bit. I'm not happy with a couple of the drum fills so I'm going to revisit them. The first version I posted, the drums were a simple loop from my keyboard, mainly to keep time apart from a metronome. My timing was off on the rhythm guitar part so I played a new one and panned it opposite. Still came through off sync. I removed that one and recorded a new rhythm track to solve the problem and put new drum tracks down. The snare, kick, ride and hi-hat, crash and fills are on separate tracks. I'll try your suggestion and see how it turns out. At any rate, I'll be doing a new instrumental backing track for performance purposes from scratch.

Thanks,

Stevie

Hey Steve- Lovely lyrics here, paints a picture I love more and more. One of my favorite subjects to write on, your work is beautifully done. Eddie had some good advice on it musically. Wishing you well-Bobby

Stevie.
Good writing here. Only two nits.
I noticed a couple of rushed moments in these lines:
"As time itself unfolds towards it's end"
and
"Tell them it's not too late to be born again"
Vic

Thanks Rock'n'Roll Paul. Glad you Rock'n'Roll like it.

Rock'n'Roll Stevie

Stevie, You're getting there. You've made a lot of progress since I first listened. I think you're close to what you want. Keep at it.

That makes all the difference! Now all the pieces fit. Good job Stevie!

Todd

Thanks Bobby. I appreciate the listen and comments.

Stevie

Hi Vic,

Sorry I missed this and the following replies. I thought this had died out and gone on to page two or three. I just revisited it and saw your post. Thanks a bunch for the listen and suggestions.

Stevie

Thanks for checking back in, Dan. I've recorded the first spoken part over to try to make it flow better.

Stevie

Thanks again, Todd!!!

Stevie

Hey Steve, I'm bumping up an oldie on the charts but a good one in our hearts, Jesus and this song are coming back around again.~~Matt

Hi Stevie.

I like the drums ok with the chorus, but really think you may have a better effect with just tambourine through the spoken verse. I would also go for an easy crash cymbal that sustains a bit longer than the little splash cymbal hits.

It could just be me, and I may just feel this song differently than you do, but I just don't think a conventional drum track works well with your arrangement. Think about if you were giving a speech and someone was playing a snare drum--we listen differently to someone talking than we do someone singing--so it may be just psychological, but that is hard to "turn off."

I really like the concept, performance and the melody with the song.

steady-eddie.

Thanks Matt. Glad you liked it that much. I thought this had died out long ago.

Stevie

Thanks Eddie. Those are some helpful suggestions. I might mess around with the drums a bit and see how it sounds. Good feedback my friend.

Stevie