Originally Posted by Gavin Sinclair
Good idea for a catchy pop song. I think it works well. I might remove the "baby" from Chorus 1 and "babe" from verse 2, because at that stage she hasn't even noticed him. "Girl" might work better. Or even better would be to give her a name. Songs where the girl has a name are more memorable imo...


Thanks, Gavin. I appreciate your thoughts. Interesting concept about using a specific name. I'm not sure if the singer would actually know her name early on in the story, but I agree it would give the song more individualism for sure. Thanks for listening and commenting!

Rob


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