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A1CWatton Serious Contributor Posts: 489 From: Ellsworth Air Force Base, South Dakota, USA Registered: May 2002	posted 07-30-2004 22:44 "Underneath My Skin" lyric by Gregory Watton (V1) You unclothe me with your eyes You break me with your words You tease me with your smile Hitting me with everything that hurts (Where did you come from) You're an angel fallen from the sky (Where did you come from) Since you've lived a thousand lives You hide (In shadows) You try (to bring me down) With your lies (Build) My eyes are clouded Is there nowhere I can go To get away To get away To get away from you (Chorus) I can't run I can't hide You're crawling underneath my skin You won't stop You won't quit You're crawling underneath my skin You're crawling underneath my skin I'm gonna lose my mind Before this day ends You're crawling underneath my skin (V2) You enlightened me with your pain You took away my liberty I nearly went insane Living in a prison you made for me (Where did you come from) You're the devil hiding in disguise (Where did you come from) Since the sun began to rise The night (is coming) My fear (is rising) And I don't know why- (Build) My eyes are clouded Is there nowhere I can go To get away To get away To get away from you (Chorus) I can't run I can't hide You're crawling underneath my skin You won't stop You won't quit You're crawling underneath my skin You're crawling underneath my skin I'm gonna lose my mind Before this day ends You're crawling underneath my skin (Bridge) I wanna run away I wanna run away I wanna find a place to hide A place to hide from you You're crawling underneath my skin (Chorus) I can't run I can't hide You're crawling underneath my skin You won't stop You won't quit You're crawling underneath my skin You're crawling underneath my skin I'm gonna lose my mind Before this day ends You're crawling underneath my skin (tag) You're crawling You're crawling You're crawling You're crawling underneath You're crawling underneath my skin (fade) [This message has been edited by A1CWatton (edited 08-04-2004).] IP: Logged
Emily Sanders Serious Contributor Posts: 1246 From: Santa Monica, CA Registered: Aug 2002	posted 08-03-2004 23:52 Hi, Greg! This is a very strong lyric...it rocks! But I don't think you need the word "rape" in it.. That word bothers me a lot...just my opinion. I think you get a wonderfully "raw" effect without having to use that word. Good luck with the song... Emily IP: Logged
DAC Casual Observer Posts: 38 From: Registered: Aug 2004	posted 08-04-2004 10:19 Greg, I agree with Emily. Although in the context of the song you want to make a strong point, using the word "rape" will pobably cost you a portion of your target/listening audience. Good luck. Dave IP: Logged
A1CWatton Serious Contributor Posts: 489 From: Ellsworth Air Force Base, South Dakota, USA Registered: May 2002	posted 08-04-2004 12:39 Thank you both for your compliments and advice. I have changed the word rape to break. I think it essentially means the same thing, rhymes the same way, and has one syllable, so its no skin off my back to change it. I'll post an mp3 of it as soon as it is recorded and mixed. If you want to know who's doing the song, check out www.stereocell.com Peace and love Greg IP: Logged
JL Serious Contributor Posts: 442 From: St. Louis, MO Registered: Dec 2003	posted 08-04-2004 12:52 That was a really good change, Greg. The word "rape" stood out for me, too, made it hard to notice the rest of the song--for some women, at least, an extremely emotionally-charged and threatening word. Break was an excellent substitution. This is a very powerful, energized lyric. Talk about toxic relationship, though...run away, run away! --Jean IP: Logged

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