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Down on my Luck. V1 They say you can get used to living without who in hell put that kind of rumour about? Season of goodwill? Well buddy not for me when the money dried up, my woman soon left me
Chorus Down on my luck? 'Bout most of the time! my Lady had expectations of sushi and fine wine Just 'bout had a budget for Perrie and lime Down on my luck! 'Bout most of the time!
V2 Looked around city stores, made me more depressed stocked full of the of things you buy to impress Could hardly afford a coffee at their bar a greedy man, could be tempted to break the law
Bridge Easy to get bitter, it could eat your heart away hooch helps heal the pain, gets me through the day Now she's gone keep telling myself, better off without a wife least I had the best years of her life
V3 lost a good job when the brewery closed down now rely on hand outs,live in a ghost town Ain't it ironic, the brewery couldn't sell beer? now there's no work, drinkings popular 'round here
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We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Hey Travis,
Oh man, this is depressing! Nice write, though!
I really like the line that he had the best years of her life -- lol!
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Its an old one I did a rewrite on.yep its depressing Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Depressing for sure. My kind of song!
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Hi Travis,
Yes, depressing, but well written--it's got details that make it feel personal, and that's what elevates this. I can't find a thing to nit. Great job!
Mike
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon) from the song "Songs of Love" from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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Travis--
Another well written sad one--I dig sad too!
Write on--
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with an mid tempo treatment it might come off as self-reflection and not hopeless.
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Looking in stores, makes me depressed Can't afford things I'd buy to impress Could hardly afford coffee at their bar Feeling low tempts me to break the law
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Cheers jim, I need cheering up Travis
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Thanks mike appreciate your comments
Hi Mackie thanks to you too Travis
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Thanks for helping out Neil, it could have worked-there will be others! Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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This'll have them dancing Calvin Travis
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