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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Constructive comments, suggestions, crits and collaborators are welcome and appreciated.
Sweet Lovin' Copyright 2015 by Wes Tibbets
VERSE ONE
Come here pretty baby Hop in and let's go for a ride Climb up here in my 4x4 And you can sit by my side Put your feet on the dash, let the stereo blast Sing along to a country song And we'll go find a special place Where we can make love all night long
CHORUS
(Sweet lovin') Sweet lovin's what I need (Sweet lovin') Satisfaction guaranteed When your sweet lips give me a kiss My heart skips a beat I love the way you make me feal Sweet lovin's what I need
VERSE TWO
Your tattoo plays peak-a-boo Right above your daisy dukes You look so cute honey From your hat down to your boots With your long blonde hair and want me stare From behind those eyes so blue Everything about you turns me on I wanna make love to you
CHORUS
(Sweet lovin') Sweet lovin's what I need (Sweet lovin') Satisfaction guaranteed When your sweet lips give me a kiss My heart skips a beat I love the way you make me feal Sweet lovin's what I need
BRIDGE
You got me in a fever baby I'm all worked up inside I know a place where we can go It's just a few more miles
CHORUS
(Sweet lovin') Sweet lovin's what I need (Sweet lovin') Satisfaction guaranteed When your sweet lips give me a kiss My heart skips a beat I love the way you make me feal Sweet lovin's what I need
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(Sweet lovin') Sweet lovin's what I need
Last edited by Wesley Ryan; 05/10/15 11:41 PM.
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Perfect pitch to Luke Bryan, Jake Owen or Jason Aldean.
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Hi Wesley,
Seems pretty solid, nice development into more details in V2, bridge seems alright this time..maybe my only nit is that this is such a common country song idea that maybe there needs to be a thing or two unique to this song alone..maybe take the "skips a beat" cliche and tweak it into something brand new..maybe it skips a certain kind of beat..or instead of "skipping" insert a different "ing" verb --maybe something more Country-manly than "skipping" ..just some thoughts as I read through..
Best, Mike
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon) from the song "Songs of Love" from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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Thanks Jim and Michael,
Sorry it took me so long to reply. I haven't been on much lately. I've kinda run out of things to write about. I hope both of you and your families are doing well. Best wishes as always and thanks a lot for the kind words and suggestions.
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Hi Wes, This is a good ol' piece of Wes country! I get Mike's "skip" concern. That's something you can play around with at your leisure. Good one. Dave
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Thanks Dave,
I appreciate the kind words. I hope life is treating you well. Best wishes!
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It's an old idea Wes as Mike commented but it does keep churning out different takes on it and there's plenty of room for another! Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Thanks Travis,
I appreciate the kind words. I hope life is treating you and yours well. Best wishes!
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