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I've Got My Price Copyright 01/17/2014 Peggy L. Smart-Barnes
----- I 1 ----- Up and making breakfast Breakfast for one Played the town Tagged a home run
I'm having breakfast Breakfast for one Home with the sun Breakfast for one
----- V 1 ------ Last night you took the last shot Thought you had the upper hand I chased it with tequila And I found a cheaper man
------- C 1 ------ Cause I've got my price And it covers for two But you're not worth the cost Of me loving you
I had a night of fun Now it's breakfast for one
------ V 2 ------ I'm heatin' up the oven Going to warm this frigid air Frying eggs and bacon There's no fruit and nuts anywhere
------- C 1 ------ Cause I've got my price And it covers for two But you're not worth the cost Of me loving you
Not serving Honey Bun And it's breakfast for one
------ B 1 ------ Got my pride still in my pocket A number I don't have to call A name that will go missing Nothing left to pay at all
----- C 2 ------ Cause I've got my price And it covers for two But you're not worth the cost Of me loving you
It's warming up in here Serving breakfast and beer
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Not sure what honey bun is, colloquial for sex maybe? Good story Peggy seems you had some fun! Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Hi Travis, it's a sugary breakfast pastry but also a term of endearment Like Sweetie Pie .... might be a regional thing Thanks for the read! Peggy
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Great idea, great title! And it comes across as a true story.
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Hi Jim, Thanks for the very nice comments! It's possible that somewhere in the world it's true. Peggy
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Peggy, Here are a couple of alternate wordings you might consider ... or not. Played the town Home with the sunAlternately, maybe "Tagged a home run". It plays off your "Played the town" line and is slang for "going all the way". I had a night of fun And it's breakfast for oneAlternately, "Now it's breakfast for one". It lines up the tenses better. IMO No fruit and nuts anywhereAlternately, "No fruits or nuts anywhere" Fruits and nuts being California's population. Additionally, I really like your bridge very much. Good lyrics. Dave
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a really good lyric Peggy.
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Hi Dave, Thanks for the read and the comments! I love "Tagged a home run"! and have used it... (that's ok?) Fixed the tense to "Now .." That is a great addition to all the twists I was going for with "..fruit and nuts" and still thinking on adding the plural. Appreciate the help and the kind words Peggy
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Hi Mike,
It was a fun one. Thanks!!
Peggy
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Hi Peggy,
Nice write -- I can see it all unfolding!
I had a couple of thoughts ... when you say "cheaper man" -- I wonder if that could be taken too negatively? "Cheap" can have a lot of different meanings! I was thinking...
Last night you took A CHEAP shot Thought you had the upper hand I chased it with tequila And I found a BETTER man
Also, in the chorus, I kept tripping mentally over the second line, about it covering for two. I'm thinking ... it does NOT cover for two ... but then I know what you're saying, but I don't know ... it just kept tripping up my mind -- lol!
I kept thinking...
Cause I've got my price NOW IT WON’T COVER TWO
But then...I guess it does cover two for the other guy ... anyway, just tossing out my thoughts!
Lisa
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Hey Peggy I really liked this, a very well written piece.
Peace Joe
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Hi Joe, Thanks for the read and very nice comments! Peggy
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