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#8908 - 03/12/01 09:39 AM Shooting Stars  
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Tony was a promising actor
The critics all said he'd go far
Now he's 42, a drunk, broke and screwed
Just another has-been shooting star

Bobby was a gritty musician
Producers all said he'd go far
But he o.d.'d at a ripe 23
And became another shooting star

Warhol had his fifteen minutes
George Burns had some 80 years
There's something irresistable
About public-eye careers
Well, money's like a good whiskey
And fame is an open bar
But life is such that fate's the crutch
That cripples a shooting star

Lila was a beautiful model
Photographers all said she'd go far
But they cut her down when she put on 5 pounds
And made her another shooting star

Michael was a playground legend
The coaches all said he'd go far
But busted again, and back in the pen
Another "could have been" shooting star

Warhol had his fifteen minutes
George Burns had some 80 years
There's something irresistable
About public-eye careers
Well, money's like a good whiskey
And fame is an open bar
But life is such that fate's the crutch
That cripples a shooting star

[This message has been edited by Doc (edited 03-12-2001).]

[This message has been edited by Doc (edited 03-12-2001).]

#8909 - 03/12/01 11:32 AM Re: Shooting Stars  
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Hi Doc....some real truth in these verses. This is a good song...it flows well. The only problem I had was the use of the word "like" twice in the chorus. I'm sure you could change one of those with no problem....George Burns had 'bout 80 years...or some such thing. Keep writing and posting! [Linked Image]

#8910 - 03/12/01 12:44 PM Re: Shooting Stars  
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I like it. Not good enough yet myself yet to crituque it, but I'd say you have a winner here. Keep it up


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#8911 - 03/12/01 02:57 PM Re: Shooting Stars  
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Doc,
This is one of the best songs I've seen.
Keep tweaking it, but don't change anything major. I love it, I just wish I had written it. Awesome stuff, man.

Matthew

#8912 - 03/12/01 03:19 PM Re: Shooting Stars  
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Thanks Sunny, PL, and Matthew. I appreciate the input. You're right, Sunny. I changed one of the "like"s in the chorus. I wrote this one in about 45 minutes early this morning while in bed, so I didn't catch that. Thanks again, folks.

#8913 - 03/12/01 08:27 PM Re: Shooting Stars  
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Hi Doc, gee this is different and really flows nicely, great writing, hope we see more. Love "Well, money's like a good whiskey And fame is an open bar". Judy

#8914 - 03/12/01 08:46 PM Re: Shooting Stars  
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Good stuff! I second that "open bar" line...brilliant. I'm not sure about having the second line of each verse virtually identical. Sometimes this kind of device can tie things together nicely, but sometimes it can become annoying and I feel like you're right on the line here with this one. I guess it would depend on the music whether this works for you or against you in this piece. Anyway, I like your concept and I like the little vignettes and the references to Warhol and George Burns. Nice work!

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#8915 - 03/12/01 11:35 PM Re: Shooting Stars  
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Hi...Doc

This was really great...chimin in late...
but well written and wanted to tell you.

Welcome

Kaley

#8916 - 03/13/01 12:57 AM Re: Shooting Stars  
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Doc,

the last two lines of your chorus are one of the best damn couplets I've read in a while.

Fine job.

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#8917 - 03/13/01 03:01 AM Re: Shooting Stars  
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What dawg said. [Linked Image]


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#8918 - 03/13/01 03:19 AM Re: Shooting Stars  
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Oh Yea, Good words here. Those last four lines do it all for me. Why didn't I think of that. Fate gave them to you, now run with them. Should be a hit. Idamarie

#8919 - 03/13/01 11:54 AM Re: Shooting Stars  
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Hi Doc,
Really nice writing here! Love that chorus!

#8920 - 03/13/01 10:17 PM Re: Shooting Stars  
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Thank you everyone for the kind words. Tom--yeah, I'm still not too sure about the second line in each of the verses. I guess I'll see how its sounds when I put music to it.

#1122553 - 01/15/17 06:34 PM Re: Shooting Stars [Re: Doc]  
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George Burns and Bob Hope made it to 100.

Kirk Douglas and Olivia de Haviland are 100 and still kicking as I type.

#1122981 - 01/21/17 06:16 PM Re: Shooting Stars [Re: Doc]  
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nice write,
all the best,john


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#1137088 - 02/14/18 01:17 AM Re: Shooting Stars [Re: Doc]  
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What's up Doc?


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#1137099 - 02/14/18 06:37 AM Re: Shooting Stars [Re: Doc]  
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Too many gone the way of the rapid downward spiral, some self inflicted some driven by influences beyond their control your story touches on the ills of the rising and quickly falling stars that fill the media with endless tales of woe to feed an endless demand for tales of the celebrity.


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#1137100 - 02/14/18 06:37 AM Re: Shooting Stars [Re: Doc]  
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Too many gone the way of the rapid downward spiral, some self inflicted some driven by influences beyond their control your story touches on the ills of the rising and quickly falling stars that fill the media with endless tales of woe to feed an endless demand for tales of the celebrity.


Just a writer of words
#1137441 - 02/19/18 08:41 AM Re: Shooting Stars [Re: Doc]  
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Good structure - solid rhyme
Bad Company did a tune called "Shooting Star" and it was a similar story
I like how you incorporated all different "celebrity" categories.

Good luck, thanks for sharing


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