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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/05/24 01:49 PM
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Give yourself to the Lord Mcfortunato ©2019
V1 Are you troubled, loaded down with pain? Is the pressure so great, your tears burst like rain? Do you give life your all, but your problems increase? Jesus invites you to come, and lay down at His feet
Chorus And Give yourself to the Lord (He will help you through) Give yourself the Lord (He will give you rest too) Let your worries go (Leave it up to Him) Give yourself to the Lord
V2 Are you afraid; fighting an inner war? Does peace look as far away, as some distant shore? Do you long for strength, in times of need? Jesus invites you to come, and lay down at His feet
Chorus Give yourself to the Lord (He will heal you) Give yourself the Lord (He will give you rest too) Let your worries go (Put your trust in Him) Give yourself to the Lord
Bridge God sees your heart, and He hears your prayers He can change your heart, carry these burdens you bear
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Mcfortunato,
I really like this. I don't think the word but is needed in the last line of the verses.
One line that bothered me was the wounds sting and heat. I don't think heat works. Maybe, you're burdened with defeat, or metaphorically speaking something about Gods mercy seat.
Just my few thoughts, Good song
Geneva
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Just some thoughts....
Are you in trouble, burdened with pain? Is the pressure so great, your tears burst like rain? Do you give life your all, yet fail the test? Jesus says "Come, I will give you rest"
Give yourself to the Lord (He will see you through) Give yourself the Lord (He will reward you) Give yourself to the Lord (Cast your treasures to heaven) Give yourself to the Lord (All is forgiven)
Don't be afraid, of losing the fight Darkness can’t be, where there is light Let go of rage, don't seal your own tomb Jesus says "Come, I will heal your wounds"
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Thanks, Ive incorporated some of the suggestions. There are so many ways I could go here.
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The one thing I’ve learned about writing is that you can always rewrite! Lol.... Can you sing it?
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