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#1132402 - 11/13/1704:46 PMWhen I become a monster
This song has something special for me, maybe it's because of its lyrics that portray with rawness and sincere words the obscurity of myself when I think about the abstract of life and the freedom to decide what to be.
The song is "rare" but strong.
"When I become a monster I observe myself from that distance that gives the foreign
and I plunge in the sensations of the obscure of myself when I open the door, in my thought, of the perverse, of the abstract of the free will."
Thanks for watching
Last edited by Mora_Amaro_La_Loba; 11/13/1706:16 PM.
Hey Mara, I'm not sure how open you are to changing the lyrics, but here are a few suggestions.
"When I become a monster I observe myself from that distance that yields the foreign (or reveals the foreign or unveils the foreign, if this matches what you are trying to express)
and I plunge into the sensations of my obscure self (I'm not sure that this is an improvement. It's more natural English, but "the obscure of myself" has a nice rhythm and feel and, given the sentiments of the song, maybe it's good to be a little disoriented by an unusual turn of phrase) when I open the door, into my thought, of the perverse, of the abstract of the free will."
"Sometimes reaching a goal earlier than planned is a great achievement. It shows you have worked hard, pushed ahead and made it happen. However, sometimes reaching a goal far past your original deadline, long after you wanted to complete it, and after the accolades you might once have gotten for the achievement are over, it is an even greater achievement. This shows you never gave up, due to adversity, deficit, criticism and those little life detours that end many dreams and goals. In many ways, this is a reason for even more pride!" -Brian Austin Whitney