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#1130525 - 09/08/17 07:36 PM Lovers in the Rain  
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Lovers in the Rain

https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13625996

I wrote this song many years ago, and I'm just publishing it now. I wanted to write a sophisticated pop song and this is what came out. I still like the song and I wanted to get some feedback on it. Here it is! What do you think?
I sang this and played the electric guitar fills and lead, the rest of the music is vintage Band in the Box MIDI from the 1980's , the electric guitar was worked in just a few years ago, and this mix was put together on Digital Performer and iZotope mastering software. The vocal was part of the original recording in the mid/late 80's.


Lovers in the Rain

We were walking on the hillside you were talking about the past
I was dreaming about our future but that dream faded so fast
All the love we knew
was overcome by feelings that are changing what seemed true
Yesterday in sunshine I lay close by your side
Was there a look I missed that said your love had died
How quick the weather can change
It's much colder and the sky is welling up, feels so strange

chorus

Lovers in the Rain, the scene that ends the play
Only tears remain, come rolling down our cheeks
They won't be seen again, it's just a memory of
Lovers in the Rain, a thousand heartaches later
The lessons and the blame, that's just the lonely baggage
Waiting to be claimed, then bon voyage to Lovers in the Rain


Souvenirs and presents, what to do with all this stuff
When it came to photographs , we took more than enough
Such a lovely day,
I'll just put it on a shelf out of the way
Now I have the time to experiment and explore
My love life's so much broader now than just the girl who lived nextdoor
What a fool was I
So bourgeois and so naive, over silly things I'd cry, like

repeat chorus

guitar solo

repeat chorus


copyright - Pete Gallatin 2017

#1130528 - 09/08/17 08:47 PM Re: Lovers in the Rain [Re: PeteG]  
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damn Pete thats a good song, written well, I like the music, if this had a little harmony, a bit more bass, I can imagine many people singing this tune. the song stands by its self just the way it is. to me thats a good thing. Lane


"Grace always pours from a closing wound"
#1130531 - 09/09/17 12:34 AM Re: Lovers in the Rain [Re: lane1777]  
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Originally Posted by lane1777
damn Pete thats a good song, written well, I like the music, if this had a little harmony, a bit more bass, I can imagine many people singing this tune. the song stands by its self just the way it is. to me thats a good thing. Lane


That's an encouraging comment Lane. I work hard to get the mix right, and I feel I've made a lot of progress, but don't feel like I've mastered (no pun) it yet. I wish I had the vocal on a separate track, but should probably just be happy to have kept the stereo track that I have from say 30 year's ago. But I suppose I could add a vocal harmony track, just as I did the guitar part? My voice has changed enough it would be like a different person singing.(smile) I think with a few minor lyric changes this would work well for a female vocalist. I was hesitant about publishing this , so thanks for making my day. -- Pete

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#1130535 - 09/09/17 03:49 AM Re: Lovers in the Rain [Re: PeteG]  
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Hello Pete,


It's always good to see you again.
Nice job.

this is especially nice......

The lessons and the blame, that's just the lonely baggage
Waiting to be claimed, then bon voyage to Lovers in the Rain


Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

#1130605 - 09/13/17 12:52 PM Re: Lovers in the Rain [Re: PeteG]  
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Hi Pete,

Very sweet song. smile

I love those major seventh chords that give it a late seventies retro sound.

The vocal sounds like you captured a nice performance or composite of performances, but it sounds both distorted and like you are a super faraway distance from the mic and as a result there's not much nuance captured in your vocal. Improvement here would really help showcase this beautiful song. The guitar solo is also mixed too loud in relation to everything else.

But you've got a beautiful song, and that's the most important thing. Your recordings will improve with time.

Mike


Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice

-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)
#1130765 - 09/16/17 10:58 PM Re: Lovers in the Rain [Re: Calvin]  
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Originally Posted by Calvin
Hello Pete,


It's always good to see you again.
Nice job.

this is especially nice.....


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart


I'm one of nicest guys you'll ever meet...NOT! just kidding - Thanks Calvin, much appreciated - I've been moving my music stuff into the basement this past week and haven't been keeping up with posting. Wishing you the best......Pete

#1130789 - Yesterday at 04:37 PM Re: Lovers in the Rain [Re: Michael Zaneski]  
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Thanks for your critique , Mike. The main recording was done mid- to late 80's on a Vestafire 4 track cassette- and I kept it along with many other recordings on cassettes from that time - the machine I recorded it on is toast and you can't find a working Vestafire on ebay,at least I couldn't ,so I bought a tascam 4 track to try to access this and other songs I did back then.
I had little confidence in this or any of the other songs I recorded at the time. Most of the people I knew who were trying to get into songwriting were getting studio demos or backing tracks made to pitch their tunes. Too expensive for me. so I joined NSAI and learned the craft of songwriting from pros - got some positive feedback on material I wrote for the Country market - did make a demo - had it picked up by TAXI who put it on a promo CD - my song and name next to Randy Bachman- signed a license contract with Rex Benson- had a cut on a CD - had a song in a movie. Then at some point soured on the whole thing- mainly because of money. But I kept my wife, kept my house and enjoy my life and retirement just fine. SO - I have shared this old song to get the feedback it never got before - and I'm happy you generally liked it. If a talented artist like yourself would like to do a version of it - I would be thrilled. If you'd like to reconstruct it, modernize it, that is fine also - and I'd be happy to assist. Thanks Mike, and I always appreciate and look forward to your comments..... Pete

#1130790 - Yesterday at 06:02 PM Re: Lovers in the Rain [Re: PeteG]  
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What a lovely song! The distant vocals do add a certain poignancy, but as Mike says, they are kind of distorted. It's a pity you don't have them on a separate track. Do you feel like putting in the effort to recreate the whole song? I think it would be worth it, but that's easy for me to say, since I wouldn't have to do it smile

#1130791 - Yesterday at 09:59 PM Re: Lovers in the Rain [Re: PeteG]  
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Thanks Gavin, I dearly appreciate the kind words. I'm trying to get get Mike Z to recreate it for me. Might have to drop it down a key for me to do it 30 years later from the original. ha ha Saying and doing are definitely two different things, you're right. So I'm saying nothing and keeping my options open, ha ha . thanks Gavin, I'm sure we'll talk more....Pete


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