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The goal of our "Song Challenges" is to write songs/lyrics on demand within set parameters. We don't critique each other's songs in this thread (but you can say you like someone's song if you want to.) Please post your original works. If you have already written a song/lyric that fits within the parameters, please feel free to post it.


For this challenge, you need verses and a chorus/refrain. You must use the hook "You weren't the ....." in the chorus. You may also use the hook in the present tense, "You aren't the ...".

Have fun!

Hi Jean,

Given it's Valentine's Day I thought love was an appropriate theme. This challenge was alittle different but I believe I have completed my assignment teacher.


"You Weren't The Man Mama Wanted"
Country/Female Vocal w/twang (needs melody)
(c)2011 Lynn Orloff

My mama started sayin' at a young age
"Now honey there’s boys and there’s men
You wanta’ find someone respected
Who’ll treat you the best that he can
You‘d do best to fetch you a someone
Whose got him a college degree
Who’ll buy you a house with a yard and a pool
And lots of your pretty girl things"

Lift
Well mama she sure tried to guide me, we all know our mama’s know best
But when I saw you in that pick up, felt my heart leap outside of my chest

You weren’t the man mama wanted
But God seemed to have His own plans
You aren’t the man mama prayed for
But baby you’re my kind of man

Every nite she would pray by her bedside
"Good Lord help her make the right choice
Not some cowboy who ain’t got no future
Drivin' tractor and ridin' some horse
She’s deservin’ of somethin’ much bigger
Then a riggety white picket fence
Round a tiny white house down some dirt road down south
Lord please help her use common sense"

Lift
I listened outside of her bedroom, knew by heart one by one every prayer
But when I saw you in those blue jeans, I just didn’t seem much to care

You weren’t the man mama wanted
But God surely had His own plans
You aren't the man mama prayed for
But baby you're my kind of man

Bridge
Oh it took alittle time to make my mama see
My country boy is just the thing her little darlin' needs

No you weren't the man mama prayed for
But I see how her heart took a turn
Though you aren't the man she expected
Seems she had her a lesson to learn

JEAN,

My first Challenge song--KIND OF A VALENTINE SONG, maybe you could SAY?


YOU AREN’T THE FIRST
©2011 Mackie Humphries

V1
Baby you got me
Breathin’ hard again
Have me beggin’ for
Your sweet lovin’
With one more touch
My heart will sing
Your warm kisses
Feel like a dream.

CH
You aren’t the first - to pull me in
Then spin a web - so... inviting
Work your magic - close to perfect
Then soothe away - all my stress
You aren’t the first - to pull me in

V2
Baby don’t go yet
Take a little rest
Never felt like this
Girl you're the best
Can’t help but smile
Laying in the dark
You are the one
Who owns my heart.

CH
You aren’t the first - to pull me in
Then spin a web - so ...inviting
Work your magic - close to perfect
Then soothe away - all my stress
You aren’t the first - to pull me in

BR
Under your spell still in a trance
Give me a call and another dance.

CH
You aren’t the first - to pull me in
Then spin a web - so... inviting
Work your magic - close to perfect
Then soothe away - all my stress
You aren’t the first - to pull me in.

TAG
You aren’t the first - to pull me in.

Mackie

You weren't the only one who loved me
But you were the only love I need
You weren't the only one to want me
But you were the only one for me

I don't have time to write more at the mo but I like these challenges. I shall revisit.

Dear Lynn, Mackie and James, thanks for posting. Any more takers?

There should be more takers for this every week/month etc. Clearly we all think we're too good to need to do this. I love creative challenges.

How about you take it up a notch and we write some lyrics, decide on our favourite lyrics and then we all write our own melody to it.

Hi, James. I don't know that people think they are too good to need it, although some may feel that way. Perhaps they just aren't interested in the hook. Also some people feel they have to let the "muse" move them and are unaware that challenges like these actually train the "muse" to come when she is called.

We have had some challenges in the past where people have posted lyrics and others wrote music to it. Wouldn't hurt to have another one. The only problem I have with that approach is knowing what to do if the lyricist doesn't like a particular melody and the composer would like to make it an "official" collaboration. Or perhaps the lyricist likes the melody but the composer doesn't want to go further with it. Any ideas to circumvent that?

LOVE YOUR WRITING STYLE.

Dear Jean:

I am new here and read your post with interest. I see no one has answered/addressed this issue...maybe someone will soon, hopefully.

Petra

HiDee Mz Jeanie B!

JUST NOW read of This Challenge...& Yeah, I'm Up For It!

Already got several good hooks in a minute ago:

You Weren't The Sharpest Tool in The Shed

and

You Weren't The Pick of The Litter...

so maybe I'll pen ya a Couple...

Thanks!
Big Hugs,
Stan

Thanks, Petra.

Looking forward to your contribution, Stan.

Hello Jean. Just came across this thread and if it is still open I will contribute. In fact since it is snowing and the satellite is down I will write it now. Here it goes: [7:14 to 7:50]

You Weren't The One (I Thought You Were)
(03.21.11)

(V)
Pulled into Casey’s just past eleven.
Had hit some other bars, some pretty hard.
Grabbed a stool the moment one was empty.
Spotted her in those tight black leotards.
Sauntered over with help from other patrons.
Tapped her lightly preparing my surprise.
But when she turned around I stumbled backwards.
Caught off guard by the death look in her eyes.

(Chorus)
You weren't the one I thought you were.
Now my cheeks are wet with tears.
Think I'll take that keg right there,
goin’ to need a lot more beer.
Believed I had a betting chance,
but now it’s all a blur.
You weren’t the one, there goes my fun.
The one I thought you were.

(V)
Stood around and waited for another.
Another stool arrived surprisingly.
Took my seat, the beer the bar-keep gave me.
Sat back down and waited patiently.
A group of gals over in a corner
were laughing loud and havin’ a great time.
Took my glass and act and tripped on over.
Back at the bar I sucked a sour lime.

(Chorus)
You weren't the one I thought you were.
Now my cheeks are wet with tears.
Think I'll take that keg right there,
goin’ to need a lot more beer.
Believed I had a betting chance,
but now it’s all a blur.
You weren’t the one, there goes my fun.
The one I thought you were.

(Bridge)
Come closing time I had too climb
back up and out the door.
Headed home, all alone,
still don’t know why for?
Caught a glimpse, of this handsome prince,
gave myself a gr-r-r!
“You weren’t the one, there weren’t none.
The one I thought you were.

(Chorus)
You weren't the one I thought you were.
Now my cheeks are wet with tears.
Think I'll take that keg right there,
goin’ to need a lot more beer.
Believed I had a betting chance,
but now it’s all a blur.
You weren’t the one, there goes my fun.
The one I thought you were.


Copyright © 2011 by Douglas Murphy

I'd say you just roll with it. If he, she, they don't like it then oh well. If it's meant to be then it will be. Let fear not hold us back. As Nike say: Just do it.

Thank you kindly Petra.

Thanks, for posting Doug.

My pleasure Jean.