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ON THIS MOONLIT NIGHT (Stuart Braithwaite)

Posted By: Guy E. Trepanier

ON THIS MOONLIT NIGHT (Stuart Braithwaite) - 10/05/20 04:57 PM

I have composed a melody for this lyric by Stuart Braithwaite, in 2018.
Rough demo: my voice + ukelele

https://soundcloud.com/user-380042223/on-this-moonlit-light-uke



ON THIS MOONLIT NIGHT

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© Lyrics: Stuart Braithwaite, 2018.
© Music: Guy E. Trépanier, 2018.

Intro: 4 bars (key of C)

How beautiful you stand
I shall take your hand
Then I shall walk with you
I shall talk with you

Listen to words that you say
See the beauty of your mind
In each motion you display
My love, you are life itself
.... ....

On this moonlit night Under stars so bright
I shall hold you tight Tonight, tonight
On this moonlit night You won’t leave my sight
Let this love ignite On this moonlit night


Such power you command
I now understand
Then I shall worship you
I shall nourish you

Hear the wisdom in your voice
See the power of your soul
Every time you make a choice
My love, you are life itself
.... ....

On this moonlit night Under stars so bright
I shall hold you tight Tonight, tonight
On this moonlit night You won’t leave my sight
Let this love ignite On this moonlit night


You know how to love, to give your heart in sweet surrender
You know how to care, channel a spirit fair and tender

On this moonlit night Under stars so bright
I shall hold you tight Tonight, tonight
On this moonlit night You won’t leave my sight
Let this love ignite On this moonlit night


Let this love ignite On this moonlit night

Guy E. Trépanier (#343)
Melody: june-july 2018. Lyrics: june-july 2018.

Posted By: JAPOV

Re: ON THIS MOONLIT NIGHT (Stuart Braithwaite) - 10/05/20 05:06 PM

Pure n Simple, you always make me smile Guy smile
Posted By: Ian Ferrin

Re: ON THIS MOONLIT NIGHT (Stuart Braithwaite) - 10/12/20 08:49 PM

Hi Guy and Stuart,

IMO this is a simple lyric and a simple melody. IMO one or the other needs to challenge the listener a bit more. It's not bad. But it's not great either.

All the rhymes in the chorus are crying out for something really clever in the arrangement, and I really didn't get that.

Historically, setting the tesitura of the chorus higher than the verses is a classic way of differentiating the C from the V. This doesn't have that.

It's a really good start IMO, but both the lyrics and the music need to challenge the listener a bit more.

Sorry,

Peace,

Ian
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