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Posted By: Vicarn Eternal Triangle. Vic - 08/16/20 10:45 AM
Thankfully, on very rare occasions a collab doesn't work out so what happens to the part you wrote?
Not wanting to scrap my musical arrangement, I wrote a new lyric for this one.

https://soundcloud.com/vic-arnold/eternal-triangle

Eternal Triangle ©2020 Vic Arnold
V1
No one knew what this would bring,
that love could be a fleeting thing
Now there's shame and heads are bowed
Two were lovers. Three's a crowd

Chorus.

In this Eternal Triangle,
what was gambled seems is lost
Ties that bound us now entangled
Innocence has paid the cost

V2
No blame cast. No harsh word spoke.
One more dream gone up in smoke.
Another way of life is through
One heart torn between the two

Chorus.
Posted By: Dave Rice (D) Re: Eternal Triangle. Vic - 08/16/20 12:02 PM
Hi Vic:

Enjoyed my listen. The message is powerful and the melody enforces it quite well. I didn't hear that "Johnny Cash" vocal from you this time... but when I address the "Mic"... I never know what I'll hear come croaking out of my ancient vocal chords... LOL! Nicely done, my friend.

Best of luck with it. ----Dave
Posted By: Vicarn Re: Eternal Triangle. Vic - 08/16/20 07:28 PM
Thanks Dave.
Yes the vocal chords don't improve with age like fine wines.

Vic
Posted By: Travis david Re: Eternal Triangle. Vic - 08/17/20 05:48 AM
Hi Vic
This is very good, I liked the piano this worked well, Nice melody which I could well imagine a female doing a good job on it too.
Two were lovers three's a crowd, is a good line as well.
Good song
John
Posted By: PaulCanuck Re: Eternal Triangle. Vic - 08/17/20 12:34 PM
Hi Vic
Great song - gets better every listen.
I like the piano (I would smile ) and the road-weary vocals emote nicely.
No nits from me - well done!
Paul
Posted By: Vicarn Re: Eternal Triangle. Vic - 08/17/20 03:03 PM
Thanks Travis.
Yes, a female vocal would fit. I did try to fake it but too painful.

Vic
Posted By: Mackie H. Re: Eternal Triangle. Vic - 08/17/20 03:17 PM
VIC

You still Sound Great

Mackie
Posted By: Vicarn Re: Eternal Triangle. Vic - 08/17/20 04:56 PM
Hi Paul and thank you for giving an old guy a little happiness.
I wish my songs sounded great at the first listen but I am thankful for anything. smile

Vic
Posted By: Vicarn Re: Eternal Triangle. Vic - 08/17/20 04:58 PM
Hey Mackie. Thanks.
Where have you been all this time? I tried contacting you on Facebook a while back.
Hope you are well.

Vic
Posted By: TamsNumber4 Re: Eternal Triangle. Vic - 08/17/20 07:29 PM
Love the hook for an interesting subject. Not sure I would want to hear you sing like a woman, the Cash vocal always fits, LOL...piano is such a nice change...Nice...

Tammy
Posted By: Vicarn Re: Eternal Triangle. Vic - 08/17/20 08:37 PM
Thanks Tammy.
Yes, I'll stick to the lower register I think.

Vic
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