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I Want More

Posted By: swestern

I Want More - 11/10/17 08:31 PM


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A Contemporary Christian song about feeling somewhat abandoned and having lost the closeness we once had with Jesus when we first came to believe. But now, are we really living the life He desires for us or just punching in and out on Sundays? Time for some reflection on how it used to be and why.
Skip

“I Want More”
10/30/17

Can you take me fishing as a summer storm brews?
Or light a fire that I could visit with you?
What more to desire seated with Christ, by a charcoal fire?
Mmm, I want more…

Can you place Your finger in the sands, take away my blame?
Look in my heart, redefine my name?
What’s different now, Am I hidden from Your sight?
Mmm, Jesus, I want more…..

LIFT
And He said…

CHORUS:
I want you the way you used to be
When you lived in My love, searching, pondering
You are beloved, come bind yourself to me
Your body, your soul, all your humanity

I’m here praying in the shade of this fig tree,
Won’t you open up the heavens, send angels for me
Deliver me from this …silence - I want more…
mmm - yeah I want more

May Your dewfall make Yourself known to me
Kiss my heart, heal this leprosy
Touch my eyes, touch my ears, mend my brokenness
Jesus, I want more….

LIFT
And He said…

REPEAT CHORUS:


BRIDGE:
The truth about me is Father
The truth about my love is Mother
Walk through your desert as I thirst for you - mmm

REPEAT CHORUS:

TAG:
I thirst for you, Child won’t you thirst for me
Posted By: 9ne

Re: I Want More - 11/10/17 09:01 PM

Liked the music and your singing. The chorus lyric was focused and understandable. The verse lyrics were not. Your preamble was more succinct and should have been the basis for your lyric, as it says what your intentions were.
Best of luck!
-Mike
Posted By: swestern

Re: I Want More - 11/16/17 05:52 PM

Mike,
Thank you for your time and thoughtful comments.
The verses grew out of references to specific biblical stories where people came to believe and became closer to Jesus. The singer is desiring to have these types of experiences again and the chorus is meant to remind the singer what kind of sacrifice is necessary.
Thanks again,
Skip
Posted By: Michael LeBlanc

Re: I Want More - 11/16/17 08:43 PM

i really enjoyed this song.A nice lyric with some really cool music. Mike
Posted By: David Snyder

Re: I Want More - 11/16/17 10:34 PM


I liked this song and the production. The lyrics took risks and were not contrived.

This obviously did not follow a by the book approach to verse chorus structure since the chorus is rather long and not "repetitive."

But I actually liked the stream of consciousness style of experimentation here. I thought it was cool--and, well, spiritual.

smile

Good job.
Posted By: Deej56

Re: I Want More - 11/17/17 06:34 AM

Swestern,

Love this melody, the vocal and overall execution--the rhythm, the sound, the beat. I tend to be a bit more poetic in my approach to writing lyrics, so I'm more than fine with your verses, and enjoyed sitting back and letting the mood wash over me. It's my personal view, but I don't think a lyric needs to be literal if it sets the mood and pulls you in. Your song, in my opinion, pulls me the listener in, and well.

Listen, IMHO, this could easily hit the radio--no different than what I've heard from O.A.R. or other bands with similar focus. I'm pretty sure this isn't the first thing I've heard from you on this board that I really liked. You're very talented and I enjoyed my listen. Looking forward to hearing more.

All the best,

Deej
Posted By: swestern

Re: I Want More - 11/17/17 10:18 PM

Michael, David, Deej,
Lots of great feedback, thank you for your time and effort.
This was a group effort as all my work is, the lyrics were mine but the music and production was by Jay at Bottlerockit Prod.
Thanks again to all of you,
Skip
Posted By: TC Perkins

Re: I Want More - 11/18/17 12:59 AM

Solid Christian song without resorting to being preachy. I liked it.

The vocals are good, and the music bed is well performed/programmed.

The production is decent if not stellar. I thought the instruments were a bit muddy and could use a bit of EQ. The shaker volume could be more dynamic as the song progresses. The lead vocals are way too upfront, and the harmonies could be a bit louder in relation (although bringing the lead vocals back might resolve that issue nicely).

Overall, it sounds good!

Peace,
TC
Posted By: E Swartz

Re: I Want More - 11/20/17 01:57 PM

Skip,

What a sweet song here........I liked just about everything about this song--sounded pretty well balanced from my headphones, and yeah the vocals (for me) were dominant and out front where I think they should be with this song. This IMO is certainly a fine enough production for a demo. I like the lyrics being a little clever and having to listen a few times to get the complete drift. I must confess, I'm not sure however what the bridge is implying exactly.

Liked the claps for percussion but especially liked the vocalist--great vocal tone for sure, and very current sounding! Nice write!

steady-eddie
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