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Posted By: lane1777

Marble - 10/06/17 07:55 PM

Marble


I am left to wander alone
scents sweetened,
sounds crashing ashore.

Swabs We borrow
without thought at times,
beauty, and just living.. "marble
everyone.
...and as I go on..
One more thing..
before this falls to a past.
I must un-bury your heart..to remember mine. Vincent
Posted By: Deej56

Re: Marble - 10/19/17 03:11 AM

Lane,

You are the God of killer last lines. Strong effort here form first to last line. Well done!

Regards,

Deej
Posted By: lane1777

Re: Marble - 10/19/17 06:32 PM

there is a line in this I`m not happy with, just haven`t cleaned it up yet...thanks Dee, I always keep them short, maybe a thought or two in them. Lane
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