This is a pop/r and b dance song! Please comment!
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(C)2001,Elizabeth Ross

He don't want you,
and that's a fact.
I saw him with some other girl
right after you got back.
Yeah,as soon as you go away,
he comes out to play.

(chorus)-Ya see,
I know it's true,
I just ain't tryin' to make you blue.
I see things that you don't.
He wants me to,but I won't.
You should feel lucky you've got a friend,
'cause your relationship
with you boy's about to end.-

This lesson you've gotta learn
before you crash and burn.
He's gonna make you cry
and you're gonna wonder why.
You're gonna see that I didn't lie.

-Chorus-

-Chorus-

Feel lucky you've got a friend,
'cause your relationship's gonna end.

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~Optikal Illusion is comin' at ya~

[This message has been edited by Optikal Illusion (edited 02-20-2001).]

[This message has been edited by Optikal Illusion (edited 02-21-2001).]

You are 14...Optica?...wow...I think this was good Pop? and you written how many songs? 180?...boy...that's great!!!
I think what would help us read your lyrics
easier...would be to space between your chorus and verse.. I haven't been writing
for very long...and I have trouble tryin
to figure where one starts and the other begins... so that would help. Also I see
that you're using a lot of more "simple
rhymes"...well, We all do...but it's nice
to mix them up...somewhere on this Board is
a Rhyming Post...back farther I believe..
In fact...it's on here twice...on Rhyming
and using a bit more stretch..to them..using
imperfect rhymes...etc.. might want to check that out.....too It's under Bobbie Gallup....and I'm trying to think who else..
I think it might have been Sharon..not sure..
but there definitely is one back pages now
listed as Rhyming Helps...or something like
that under Bobbie's name...

Kaley...Good luck with your writing...

Thanks,Kaley! I will check that out...I'll have more songs on here soon,so please look at them,too! Thanks!

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~Optikal Illusion is comin' at ya~

Given the date posted, this must be about Bill Clinton.