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I finished this one today but still not sure of the mix. What do you folks think. Vic http://soundcloud.com/vic-arnold/just-one-more-glass-of-whiskeyJust one more glass of whiskey Copyright Vic Arnold 2013 V1 Today I found myself driving Through familiar places Took a turn off the road And stepped from the car People passing by me With strangers faces But just across the road I could see where you are Ch. So just one more glass of whiskey Ease myself back in that old chair There's no place quite like this or where I'd rather be I keep my eyes closed 'til you can see me Inst. V2 There stands the old house Looking over the garden The one that we planted When we both lived there That front porch holds memories We'd watch the sun setting From two rocking chairs In the warm scented air Ch.
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Hi Vic, You sure know how to make singing sound real easier than it is, good for you. Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Hey Vic...few thoughts...Loved the groove and feel of this. These types of tunes are hard to do. What stood out to me was that steady hihat. I'm hearing half time on that then same half time ride in the chorus. Maybe add a shaker in the chorus to push it.
It's long with no bridge or solo. How about cutting the intro in half and again after chorus 1. It's such a lovely progression there and by cutting it you'll add to the song. In the intro you have some kind of harmony guitar in there--whether by accident or on purpose. I wanted to hear a higher guitar part in there...there was a note or 2 that I heard by not more than that.
I really didn't get what the hook had to do with the song though, and by not tagging it in the chorus, it became more muddled.
Real nice start. I think it need a little break in there, even if just a short slide solo, but with different chording.
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Nice song!
I think it would flow better with a steadier more prominent drum groove. A closed hi-hat on the one, and, two, and, three, and, four, and. Kick drum steady on the 1,2,3,4.
All the instruments are emphasizing the beats (except the steel gtr). I would try adding a synth or organ pad in the background holding long notes or chords to smooth it out.
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Hi Vic, I really like what you have so far. : ) ~Jackie
Jacqueline Richter Mommy, wife, and songwriter
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Hi Cal. Thanks for commenting. If you could see my face when I hit the highs........
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pretty cool sound Vic!Mike
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It is a good sounding song. You've gotten some good suggestions on the percussion work. Pedal steel was a good choice in there. I like the lyrics, too. You're off to a good start in 2013.
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Hi Zeek. Thank you for listening. I didn't want to cut the intro completely but I cut the break in half and also took the vol down on one guitar as per your suggs. Percussion wise I've tried a couple of things but still not sure what is best there. Not uploaded the changes yet until I decide for sure. This is proving to be a tricky one. The hook's meaning is that he has a couple of drinks, sits back, closes his eyes and dreams of a life he had in the past. Vic
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Vic,
I swear, I thought I was hearing Johnny Cash at first. Nice one.
Jim
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VIC--
YOU HAVE ANOTHER HEART FELT JOHNNY BALLAD HERE--SEEMS TO ME IT SHOULD HAVE A GUITAR UP FRONT, AND BACK THE KEYS DOWN WITH THE DRUM TRACK--JMHO--
I LIKE THE SONG LYRICS--THE CH MAY NEED A LITTLE HONING!
WRITE ON--
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Colin, thanks for the help. This one is getting to me. I think you're spot on with the "smooth it out" thing. Trying out a bit of harmonica or "harp as you might say. Never give up eh?" Vic
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Hi Jackie. Thank you. So far so good. A long way still to go. Vic
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Hullo Mike. Thanks for that. Vic
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I've probably listened to this song more than any other on this page because mostly I love your voice on this one. Great tone. I can't help with mixing and all of that stuff, but I do think the vocal on this is a home run.
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Kevin. Thank you. The percussion on this one has got me. I changed it so many times now that it's all I can hear. Pour me another. Vic
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Hi Jim. Thank's. I was trying hard not to sound like him but he's here in spirit I reckon. Vic
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Hi Mackie. Still working on the mix. Thanks for the suggs. Vic
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Hi Vic. Great classic country song Vic. You've got a few good ideas above, and enough to mull over. I don't think you need any major changes, that is for sure--keep it classic sounding, cause that's where it belongs. One question, "How long are your eyes closed "till" she cannot see you?" I'm not sure I understand that statement, if you said "so you can't see me," I would infer that he's daydreaming in privacy--just curious if I'm not getting your point. Please enlighten me!
I really enjoyed this song, your voice is perfect for it.
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Liked this! I'd like to hear the last two lines of the verse build up to the chorus. Speaking of which; I don't think there's a good lead-in from the verse to the chorus. The chorus doesn't relate. Good stuff! -Mike
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Tammy, you're so kind. Thank you. Vic
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Eddie, thanks for the listen and the kind comment. It's all in his head. He has a drink,sits back in the chair and closes his eyes. He sees her in his mind and dreams that(after enough whiskey)she can see him too. Hope that make sense?
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Hullo Mike. Glad you took the time and thanks. About the "lead in from verse to the chorus". Do you mean lyrically, musically or both? Vic
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Hey Vic! I don't think (lyrically) the chorus relates to the verse. As an example: If, (in the verse) you said you bought crisps, the last line might say "and now I'm opening the bag" followed by the chorus which might say: "Damn they taste so good!" This is what I'm trying to say about the relationship between the V and C. Best of luck! -Mike
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I just realized Vic that you "did" say "till you "can" see me, I was thinking you said "can't" see me, and that is what I didn't understand--my mistake, but no biggy.
While I'm here, I see what 9ne is saying, but feel that there are so many ways to express a story within a song--your chorus sort of acts as a "bridge" with its digression. I've seen country songs like this before. If all songs fit the same formula--we'd have "cookie-cutter" songs which could get boring. But there is some merit in what 9ne is saying regardless, and perhaps the verses need a "lead-in" line or a short pre-chorus for a better connection--not sure. I really like the line "So just one more glass of whiskey." I'll let you delve into it, and if you don't it is still a fine song.
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VIC--
MY KIND OF SONG--A GREAT IDEA
I'M WITH ZEEK ON THE TITLE-- OFFER ANOTHER BUT YOU CAN STILL SIP AND DREAM!
I OFFER MY TAKE AS OPTIONS IN CAPS--USE OR LOSE:
I'D CLOSE MY EYES Copyright Vic Arnold 2013 V1 Today I WENT FOR A RIDE Through familiar places I STOPPED AT OUR CROSSroad And stepped from the car LOTS OF FOLKS PASSIN’ BY MOST WITH strangers’ faces THERE just across the road STILL see where WE WERE.
Ch. I’D HAVE ANOTHER glass of whiskey Ease myself back in that old chair THERE'S no place THAT I'd rather be I'D CLOSE my eyes UNtil you can see me
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V2 There stands the old house Over Looking the garden The one that we planted When we both lived there THE OLD porch holds memories We'd watch thOSE sun setS From OUR two rocking chairs In the warm scented air
Ch.
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Mike. Thanks for responding. Yes, I agree with that. Thanks. I'll rethink it. Vic
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Working on it, Eddie. Could be some time though as my hard drive or sound card is refusing to work for me at the moment. Maybe it needs a holiday. Thanks again. Vic
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Mackie, Lots of alternatives and I like the title but maybe for another song. Thank you for the suggs. Vic
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9ne. I got it, thanks and I'm working on it. Vic
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