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Hi folks, Not been on here for some time, but am releasing a new E.P soon so it would be magic to hear your critiques on my tracks! Be as honest as you can, I have thick skin! Heres the first its still awaiting a female harmony/Cymbals and some mixing! I've set it up as a private link on soundcloud as the E.P's not out for a month. http://soundcloud.com/davegerard/sons-daughters/s-3q0pqAlso on a side note if anyones interested in 'liking our facebook page for a couple of free downloads it's http://facebook.com/davegerardmusicLYRICS Sons & Daughters Oh children we're older, and the sky line got colder, And it merged, to a darker grey, And we watched it rising, still we wont go outside 'cause We're waiting, for a lighter day. Stil we're patient we wait, For our lovers scar to show, We are reckless but we'll last, Sons & daughters we'll rise, For the moment our hearts stop, Us living In the past, So Children stop hiding, oh here comes our time, We’ve been waiting, Till the winters through. So come on now daughter, you wish you were stronger, We wish we were as strong as you. My worried voice has dissapeared, Its singing songs to silent ears, I'd tell, but I don't know it anymore,
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Did you pull this tune? I can't find it at soundcloud. even went to your http://soundcloud.com/davegerard/ homepage.
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Dave I like the sound of this a lot but I think you have a different set of lyrics posted. Vic
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Not doing very well here am I?! that should be the updated lyrics thanks for pointing it out Vic much appreciated!
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Hi Dave , first of all loved the song and performance .
Only nit would be the length of the intro . I would ask myself if it add something necessary to the song . It takes 45 sec before the song actually starts .
All the best Jan
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Hello Dave, First and foremost, It is a very nice song in my opinion. The guitar orchestration is superb. You do a wonderful job Dave. I gotta admit that it took me awhile to grasp the lyrics as a total package here and the message is abit elusive IMO. Musically, outstanding. You have a Michael Johnson and Michael Monroe quality to your style being they are both classical/folk type music much like yourself. I love this style of songs... Good luck with your adventure.. Thanks for sharing, BOB
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Wonderful song and performance ... awesome voice .. amazing Dave
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Great vocals and I can hear the harmonies already (ha, ha). (There is at least one extra voice in that first chorus, isn't there?) Recording sounds quite nice -- as usual for you guys. The instruments and voices all sit just right in the mix. Some of the vocals sounded a little mushy early on -- that needs some work in the mix.
Yea, the intro might be a trifle long for a recording, but it would be fine for a video or live performance. The ending faded out weird, but I assuming that is just because it is an early mix.
great stuff -- again!
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Dave,
As a lyricist, I was drawn by the clever title of your post, but after clicking on the thread, it looks like it was a typo. I thought you'd written a song titled 'Songs and daughters' rather than 'Sons.....'.
Having said that, I really like the song. It reminds me of one of my favourite artists, David Gray. The instrumentation is very similar, which is a good thing in my books.
Andy
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i like this,it's really nice.The only thing is it sounds like a fill in the blank here and there.Your words seem to fall off to quick,if i wasn't reading the lyrics i wouldn't have known what was supposed to be sung.Soft is fine but too soft is,well,you can't hear it!
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Hello Dave!!
It feels like old time with you on the boards again!!
The volume on this was way too low in the intro and throughout...could be my speaker I suppose...
Long intro. Beautiful music and vocals as I always expect from you.
Just so happy to see you around, know that you are crazy busy getting famous.
I also liked the typo of songs and daughters...
Tammy
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Hi Dave, GOOD to see ya posting, I'm a big fan. This is a really nice tune, that's got that real soothing sound. I agree the vocal MIGHT need to be slightly louder. I DID NOT have a problem with the lengthy intro. I really enjoyed this part.... Still we're patient we wait, For our lovers scar to show, We are reckless but we'll last, and like everyone else...I want to hear SONGS & DAUGHTERS. maybe I'll have to write it :-) Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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