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Closer © 2011 Cindy Prince
We’ve been enemies We’ve been friends Our relationship’s been good But then again It could be so much better Do more than just smolder If you’d come over here And get closer
No need to be afraid We’re friends after all I won’t let it hurt I won’t let you fall We can be good together Yeah, sparks are gonna fly Come get closer, babe Let’s give this a try
Chorus Closer..closer to you Come let your touch Do what it’ll do Let’s take it up a notch Let’s see this thing through Come on…closer…closer
Bridge Time is moving on so fast Let’s get together, let’s make it last
I can’t wait To see what’s ahead I wanna take you down Lie you on my bed The magic is ours All ours for the taking Come get closer, baby It’s love that we’re making
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Good evening, Cindyrella,
In a word, hot. In another word, sexy.
Just a minor word change to ponder...add another 'so much' to line 6 and omit 'just'...
And line 5, verse 3, 'all' ours, ect...
I'm impressed. Thanks for sharing this tonight...
Clark
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Hey Cindy, Tweaks below, keep or sweep Do more than just smolder <<--seems like a forced rhyme to meWe can be good together Yeah, sparks are gonna fly Come get closer, babe Let’s give this a try (See bridge comment)Chorus Closer..closer to you Come let your touch Do what it’ll do Let’s take it up a notch Let’s see this thing throughCome on…closer…closer Bridge (a bridge is usually a different viewpoint; here you are saying similar lines..why not introduce a couplet featuring the opposite of closer: farther)Time is moving on so fast Let’s get together, let’s make it lastI can’t wait To see what’s ahead I wanna take you down Lie you on my bed The magic is ours All ours for the taking <<--Make the most of each line by making each word count.Come get closer, baby It’s love that we’re making <<--worded to rhyme with taking; more natural phrase with 2 less words: We're making love
“I usually start with a title or maybe a little rhyme or phrase.” - Harlan Howard
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Thanks guys-I like your suggestions and want this to be a sort of passionate song. Cindy
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