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All comments, thoughts, suggestions welcome and appreciated!! Thanks much!! smile


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V1
Oh, All my life
I've been gettin' ready
To soar so high
For all the world to see

V2
Oh, every night
I've been dreamin' steady
My dreams grew stronger
Faster than my wings

Chorus:
But my wings are ready
These dreams will carry me to greater things
This song I sing, I'm gonna spread it
This nest is getting way too small for me
My wings are ready

V3
I've taken flight
It's hard to keep direction
Through hail and rain
On my own strength, you see

V4
Found Truth and Life
Now, it's been my protection
I'll take this faith
To raise my family

Chorus (change)
'Cause my wings are ready
These dreams will carry me to greater things
This song I sing, I'm gonna spread it
This nest needs me to cover smaller wings
My wings are ready

Bridge:
Now, after all these years, I'm glad there's more to lean on
Than this world, Yeah it's my time to expand
This job is done, it's been fun, but now it's over
And I know exactly where I'm going to land

Chorus (changed again)
And my wings are ready
These dreams have carried me to greater things
This song I sing, be sure to spread it
This world is getting small, Heaven calls to me
My wings are ready
Mmm, yeah, my wings are ready
My wings are ready


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Hey Jen,

This is really good. Your voice is beautiful on it. I like the mood it presents to go with the words. Great Job.

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Absolutely wonderful!

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Thanks, Stevie!! I'm glad you like it... thanks for commenting! smile


Michael--- glad you like it, too! I had fun putting the music together!


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Love the instrumentation and the voice mixes with it perfectly. Very nice tune here. Hey, I wasn't even writing songs back in 2004! Good one.


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Good one!


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Hi Jen,

A very pretty piece of work.
Your voice has a sweetness about it.
one small nit....

I love the 1st chorus so much I think it should be the same throughout the song !

Nicely done.


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Kevin!! Thanks much... I'm glad you liked it! I am just so glad to finally have a way to start getting some music put together for some of these songs. Next, I'll have to pick up my guitar and start learning!


R.Shayne-- Thanks for dropping by!! Glad you like it, much appreciated!


Calvin-- So glad you like it, too!! I'll make it my objective to write the next one with a Chorus that doesn't change! smile


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Hey Jen! Very nicely done! Your vocals are so spot on for this tune... Great job!

Peace,

Dave


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JEN--

A pleasant surprise--I really dig this one a lot--JMHO--I'd modulate the BR up than step down to the last CH--The BR would stand out more--

Keep writing and singing--

Good Luck GIRL!--

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Hi Jen

Sounds good and
Sounds like you are on a fast track of learning digital recording. What program are you using ? I think you have good ears for this. jm


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Dave-- Thanks much! Appreciate you dropping in! And glad you like it!

Mackie-- Hey, there! So glad it was pleasant for you... may have to give that a try on the Bridge! Thanks a bunch!

Joice-- Hi, and thanks for taking a listen! I would certainly prefer to use live instrumentation, but even if I could get my brothers here to record everything and everytime, we don't have all the instruments I've used here... especially the drums. These sound more like what I imagine you play from your picture?! We now have that Yamaha digital drum kit, but I'm not sure it would sound as nice as what I found to put in this one. I am learning a lot, but have a long way to go, too! smile I use ProTools, but have also mix and matched some sounds from Magic Music Maker, and in other projects I have used JamStudio, and have started mixing pieces from all of these. It does take a bit of an ear to piece it all together as I imagine it... so thank you very, very much. That is a very nice compliment! smile

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Hi Jen:

I find it amazing that you can put something together that nice without live instruments. It sounded very nice to my ears.

It's a nicely written pop tune. Only nit from me is that this line was a bit rushed:

This world is getting small, Heaven calls to me

Oh yeah, your voice sounded really nice on this. Good work smile

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hi jen,
beautiful melody and very fine arrangement. Just a suggestion to make it really fly - consider adding a second vocal (upper range) on the chorus, to make it shine.

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Jen, this was a lovely thing to listen to this morning.
I really liked the hook with the melody line - memorable and great lines in here.
Keep up the great work!

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Jen, I agree with MaxG. A high harmony would send the chorus flying.
Good piece of work here with a nice sound.
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A really good song, lyrically and musically too.Your vocals are excellent and I agree with a couple of other comments that a high harmony would really lift the chorus.
Best of luck with it
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A really good song, lyrically and musically too.Your vocals are excellent and I agree with a couple of other comments that a high harmony would really lift the chorus.
Best of luck with it
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Cool track Jen! Singing and instrumentation work well. Kind of exotic. Like it a lot!

Not sure about the very end with the percussion ending alone. Maybe if the percussion was a little longer at the end (maybe fading) or a final chord.

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Hey, everyone!! Thanks so much for the wonderful and encouraging comments!! VERY appreciated!

Scott-- you are absolutely right about that Heaven line, maybe I need to try "This world's too small, Heaven's calling me" or something like that!! Thanks so much for that observation, very helpful!

Linda-- I just love those graphics.. very cool! Thank you!

Max & Vic-- Hi, gents! Yes, I think you are right about the higher harmony.. will work on that! smile

Travis-- Thanks for stopping by... I am so glad you like it, every vote of confidence helps!

John-- Thanks for your time and comments, so glad you like it! I haven't figured out how to do any kind of fading yet, so had to do something at the end that didn't just sound completely cut off. I personally loved that percussion by itself ending it, but I agree that it may need to be a tad longer, and I did wonder about that, so thank you. That just firmed up one of my thoughts! smile

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Jen.. Hi and really nice to meet you. I listened to this last week and again tonight and wanted to tell you this has such a nice feel to it.... Lovely melody!

best wishes....
Kaley smile

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Wow Jen.....a very cool sound!!! Darn nice. I love this sound you brought to this.......... -Tom

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bump! great song Jen... still remember it a few days later, that's always a great sign!

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Hey send me the file if you like, I'll see if I can toss a high harmony on there if you want like people are asking for...

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Hi Jen,

I can’t even begin to tell you how beautiful I think this is!! I LOVE it! One thing though, when I got to the bridge it’s a little confusing. I wonder what the more to lean on is? But the biggest thing is; this job is done, it sounds like you’re about to die. I don’t believe that’s what you intended, so I’m not sure what you’re talking about. I’m sure you can clear this up by just changing a few words.

Edit; Looking at it again maybe that is what you meant, I sure hope not it's too pretty of a song to take it there...Of course it's just my opinion. smile

Again it’s a great song, and you sing it beautifully!! smile

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What a pretty voice...nice job all around.

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Jen...

This is fabulous! Love the percussions! Your vocal lilts so warmly over the music...this is a super listen.

Can't think of a thing to add or change...'cept the suggestion for the high harmony. Great job!!!

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Hi, Everybody!!

Thank you all for the wonderful comments! That touches my heart! Yes, I think if Linda is up to it, she is going to work on a higher harmony part, I too feel that would be a nice touch!

Glad you all enjoyed it!!

**Dottie-- a special thank you... and yes, it is about dying in the end, but it isn't supposed to be a sad thing, this is a person who is now fulfilled, and simply knows it's time to go, as we all must do someday, but to be confident and ready would be ideal! smile Thanks again!


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Kaley... wanted to say a special thank you for listening and commenting also... since we hadn't met yet, wanted to say nice to meet you as well!! smile

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Hi Jen,

Okay it makes perfect sense now… I do understand what you mean, my grandfather (the most spiritual man I've ever known) felt this way. He was anxious and excited about crossing over. He spent his entire life getting ready. Wow I miss him. smile

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I liked the tune and it's melody. I found the mix pedestrian but I am hard on myself being a musician. The digital mix lacks the signature lick,run or turnaround that separates digital from live. I would expand my system to include solo's and rhythm changes if you are able. I suppose you could collab w/ a guitarist and or a keyboardist and introduce those things to an otherwise "buildable" cut. This would not be hard to do. I am so close to totally upgrading my entire system myself but I need to upgrade the computer and choose a super program. I have no idea which way I'll go. I've played live for quite a few years so I am partial to live but it is such a hassle. Pretty voice and very well written song. I certainly hope to hear more from you as well.


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