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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Here's one I wrote back in Nov and did my own music and vocals to it, but wanted Heather to do it too,but she was away, so now I have with Heather doing the demo on it..tks glyn The Angels Will Rock You Tonight http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=10925766Each month we waited, so excited Felt you moving, as you grew inside Couldn't wait to meet you Only to have to say Goodbye We were so happy having you counted all your fingers and toes You were so perfect This is not how it's suppose to go Chorus Well I want you to know you'll always be Mom and Daddy's lil' man (girl) We'll see you dancing in the starlight Now you must go to Heaven The Angels Will Rock You Tonite We held you watching you breathe So tiny and innocent I prayed to God, how can this be Trying to cherish every moment We put our wedding rings Around both OF your feet So you'll know we'll remember You with each of our heartbeats Chorus Well I want you to know you'll always be Mom and Daddy's lil' man (girl) We'll see you dancing in the starlight Now you must go to Heaven The Angels Will Rock You Tonite Chorus Well I want you to know you'll always be Mom and Daddy's lil' man (girl) We'll see you dancing in the starlight Now you must go to Heaven The Angels Will Rock You Tonite The Angels Will Rock You Tonite
Last edited by glynda; 04/05/14 02:18 AM.
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Doesn't get much sadder than this  Well written song
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Heather does a nice emotional job with this--I felt that even more emotion in her vocal could have come through to really sell it as a vocal/lyrical tune.
Tough song--no parent wants to go there but sad that many have had to. I like the hook but the song needs some tweaking to really sell it. You're getting better with your lyrics for sure! A few comments....
Zeek The Angels Will Rock You Tonight http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=10925766Each month we waited, so excited Felt you moving, as you grew inside Could'nt wait to meet you Only to have to say Goodbye nice 1st verse...sets up the song and what's coming. No sugarcoating--I like that!We were so happy having you not fond of the first line...maybe another thing you did like counting fingers and toes here. It's almost redundant saying you're happy having you--it's implied.counted all your fingers and toes You were so perfect This is not how it's suppose to go Chorus Well I why the change from we to I here? want you to know you'll always be Mom and Daddy's lil' girl We'll see you dancing in the starlight Now you must go to Heaven The Angels Will Rock You Tonite I like the hook but immediately thought of "rock" as anthem like, as in a rock song. Could you tag it like this:
The Angels Will Rock You to sleep ToniteWe held you watching you breathing So tiny and innocent I prayed to God, how can this be Trying to cherish every moment this verse really says the same things as 1/2. We already got that connection of the baby dying. There needs to be another type of tug on the heart here.We put our wedding rings Around both OF your feet'round your tiny feet (although you would put it on her toes, not her feet but I think it'll still work)So you'll know we'll rememberBaby know we'll remember youYou with our every heartbeat I like this verse but don't like the way the vocal is phrased.Chorus Well I want you to know you'll always be Mom and Daddy's lil' girl We'll see you dancing in the starlight Now you must go to Heaven The Angels Will Rock You Tonite Chorus Well I want you to know you'll always be Mom and Daddy's lil' girl We'll see you dancing in the starlight Now you must go to Heaven The Angels Will Rock You Tonite The Angels Will Rock You Tonite [/quote]
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Zeek, thanks so much, I appreciate you very much and yes, I see the changes DO make this a better song...I'll work on it..glyn
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Hey Glyn. A real tear jerker of a song that a lot of folks will be able to relate to from experience and others from pure empathy. I notice you change from we to I in the chorus I think. Keep it we.
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Thanks Stevie, happy you like it, and it was hard to even write, and I also have a couple of tracks I did myself on my soundclick with my music and my vocals...just testing the water...one has a nursery rhyme at the beginning but those do need alot of work on them, this is when I got sick again and didn't feel like doing anything...but i'm back now..
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I have known that pain that never seems to fade, no matter how old we or they get...so heres a bump that doesn't hurt...MFBIII
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Thanks Matt and I know what you mean
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I'm all sad now =( It's a beautiful song, and a wonderful collab!
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I remember this one Glyn and that I posted my song about the couple who had the child in heaven with the angels.
Heather sang it well. Something that could sweeten it up would be a high vocal harmony - especially with the "angels will rock you tonight". I can hear it in my head. A lady who calls herself Cassandra Cloverleaf, sang some songs like this with just beautiful harmonies. Possibly it would be a source to check out. If I can find a post of that one I will send it to you.
Also, some strings here and there would augment the depth of the song, if you wanna do those.
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Oh, it is sad, without a doubt! But it is also so full of love! Nice work!
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Neil, thanks for listening to this one for me..glyn
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Thanks Stevie, once Heather gets settled at school I'll get her to change that..thanks glyn
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Andrew, yes it is a sad one and I see this alot at work, and never know what to say, just try and scrap my heart up off the floor and leave the room as soon as I can..or i'll be in the floor with the family...glyn
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Hi Doug, yeah couldn't wait to get Heather to sing it and give it some justice..and she did great...glyn
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Thanks Jen, I tried to make it what it is but to also put my heart into it and I feel I did the best I could..and thanks to checkig it out for me..
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I have two daughters and four grand daughters so what can I say? Very sad. Lovely vocal.
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Hi Glynda,
Heather does a wonderful job on your song. I remember it from before...a very sad and touching song.
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Very sad song. I had goosebumps while listening to it.
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Thanks Duncan for taking your time to listening..glyn
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Jen, yeah, I had my music and my vocals on it before, but thought it deserved Heathers touch to it...and It did..thanks
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Hey popsplanet...
yes this song can do that to you...but it's so real...just had to write one in honor of these babies, gone to soon, but never forgotten...
thanks glyn
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