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hey yall...its been a good while since I posted (or wrote a song ) but on break from school and worked on this one while I was home ..wanted to see what yall thought of it ...thanks ! http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=10894541&q=hi&newref=1Growin Pains v I watched it bubble up as she poured the peroxide on said if i told you once i told you twice girl you should've known that ole radio flyer it just ain't built for jumpin I said Mama ,they dont call it a tricycle for nothin chorus Growin pains,lifes little bruises and sprains they come in spurts ,some are lifelong hurts not just part of that childhood phase they say that scars make us who we are I guess I'll figure it out one day I'm still havin ,growin pains v friends don't come along every day ,but best friends do he followed me everywhere I went,God I sure miss Blue I'm still not ready for another,maybe someday I will but he's sure gonna have some big ole paws to fill chorus
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Hey Heather,
I thought this one was really nice. I was wondering about the second verse though. It seems like the logical next verse would be a lost love and maybe the dog idea would fit in a bridge or last verse? I like the music and your singing of course. Just my small two cent thought for the day.
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Good singing and playing -- are you doing both parts? Yea, verse 2 is totally disconnected from verse 1 and the chorus. Probably need to look at that.
Glad to see back again -- I hope school is going great!
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Heather--
Good vox and melody--
A PRE CH1 AND CH1 THEN PRE CH2 AND CH2 WOULD CONNECT IT ALL IN SEQUENCE--GREAT HOOK!
I LIKE!
Mackie
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Hi, Heather! Nice to meet you.. have enjoyed your singing on many of the posts here! You already got good feedback about the content, those were my thoughts too! But this one certainly has your beautiful sound... good luck with it! --Jen
The dictionary is the only place where success comes before work.--Mark Twain
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Hi Heather, I like the story line and of course your beautiful voice brings it all home...love it..
glyn
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thanks so much yall for listenin/commenting
I see 3 senarios for this song ..physical pain , lost love pain and of course the pain of loosing a beloved dog(one that haunts me the worse for some reason ! I could probably work verse 2 as lost love then bring it home with doggie in the bridge ...going to contemplate in this : ) thanks again
Kevin...yes I hate to say that is me doing the pitiful excuse for "lead" here..i cant quite lay it down the way i hear it : ) school is great ...i return in 2 weeks and its back to the grindstone again ..this time taking my stuff with me to record..i so missed it !
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