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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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That intimate moment between a couple when they hear 'their' song
"That old familiar song"
V1 Do I tell you, too infrequently, Exactly, what you mean to me? well I'm sorry, I'm just a man let me take you by the hand...
chorus 'coz I can hear that old familiar song, got me in the mood for dancing all night long, with my baby, just you and me more in love with each heartbeat... when I hear, that old familiar song.
V2 Did I tell you,how beautiful you look? Did you notice, how quick my breath you took? I'm so lucky, to have you here close your eyes I'll hold you near...
chorus
bridge while I'm holding you nothing else exists, There's no feelin' that feels as good as this. Dancing slowly, cheek to cheek my heart beats strong but my knees go weak...
chorus x2
copyright Gary Parr 2010 all rights reserved.
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I think this is a nice ballad, but I think it needs another verse. Two verses before the first chorus build up to it.
I'm not an expert, but in my opinion it could go better with...
Verse Verse Chorus Verse Chorus Solo Bridge Chorus Chorus
Cheers!
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This is full of great lines. Great write mate.
"while I'm holding you nothing else exists, There's no feelin' that feels as good as this"
Nice!
Work for hire Producer. I will also produce and master any old/new work tapes up to demo standards. :-) Just PM or email: Email -- mork1976@gmail.com
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Thanks Guys......
David......I never really thought about extra verses...it came about by tinkering with a few chords on my guitar. Sung with a few oohs and ahhs thrown in, it clocks in at about 3.5 to 4 mins - I was quite happy with that.
Andy....I just wanted to capture that private moment between a couple without being too descriptive or over elaborating. Ive just created backing music to this so I may be posting it soon
regards Gary
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Cool look forward to hearing the track. If you need any help with guitar parts I'm always available. Just drop me a line.
Rgds Andy
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Hey Gary, Andy is GREAT with a guitar too!! Dottie
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UK Gary--
I like this one--I think THE STORY LINE SAYS: a lot of what most of us feel ABOUT THE ONE WE LOVE (in a laidback easy way)--A LITTLE MUSIC WOULD BE ICING ON THE CAKE!
WRITE ON BRO'--
Mackie
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This would be the perfect song for such romantic occasions as Valentine's Day and anniversaries. Would not recommend going lively with this one; have it come out as a soft romantic ballad.
Peace, Brian
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Thanks everyone...was working on the music for this lasy night, its definitely not lively with this one the feel is just as important as the sound. Hope to get vocals done soon, will post the link. regards Gary
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