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A LOTTA O’ SOUL -- LIVES IN THE BLUZ.
© 2011 Mackie Humphries

V1
From Vicksburg up to Memphis
Lots of folks tappin’ their feet
Strumming guitars late at night
Singing the Bluz about their lives.

V2
On the porches of those shacks
Empty rail cars on side tracks
Those old songs float in the air
Drift down river for all to hear.

RISE
I close my eyes and hum along
With those haunting Delta songs.

CH
It’s their story about hard times
For little pay - nickels and dimes
Now looking back - in the rear view
A LOTTA O’ SOUL -- LIVES IN THE BLUZ.

BR
It’s like no one hears their pleadings
But through the years they’re sitll singing
Hoping someday to be in Glory
No more sadness no more worry.

CH
It’s their story about hard times
For little pay - nickels and dimes
Now looking back - in the rear view
A LOTTA O’ SOUL -- LIVES IN THE BLUZ.

TAG
I close my eyes and hum along
With those haunting Delta songs
A LOTTA O’ SOUL.......................
LIVES IN THE BLUZ...................
A LOTTA O’ SOUL.......................
LIVES IN THE BLUZ...................

Mackie

This one's full of soul, Mackie.

The vocals carry the song as much as the music.

Feels good... the perfect blend of haunting vocals, simple but soulful music and a great lyric.

Spot on

Nelson--

Thanks for your kind words and lending your ear--I always listen to my feedback and appreciate your time--I struggled with this one a bit, though.

Later,

Mackie

Really like this one Mackie great imagery in the lyric and I
like the melody too, one thing I would try if it was mine
would be to sing each line without pausing in the middle
and see how it sounds, just an idea and it maybe just me,

Tony.

HiDee T-Bro!

Nice Look-Back on a Great Genre, Amigo!

I'd sug "There's A WHOLE LOTTA SOUL/STILL LIVES IN THE BLUES" for your Hook.

V2 Sug:
"FROM the porches of those shacks/ SEE empty sidecars on RAILROAD tracks/OL' SOULFUL songs float in the air/HEADIN' down-river for all to hear"

RISE: "FEELIN' those haunting Delta songs"

CH: It's their SAD stories about hard times/
MOSTLY-Paid IN nickels & dimes/
Now Lookin'-Back in LIFE's rear-view/
There's a WHOLE LOTTA SOUL STILL LIVES IN THEM BLUES!

It's like no one HEARD their pleadings/
But thru the years their LIFE's still singing/

KOS the Sugs, Amigo/VERY Likeable Song ya gotcha Going Here!
Good Luck with it!

Best Wishes & a Big Guy-Hug,
Stan

ps: Sorry..No time YET to Hear It...I just peeked at your lyrics!

Hi Mackie,

Lovely song. You create just the right mood with the playing and singing...to tell this story. A lot of soul in there is right!

You take us on a quiet journey of hope. Nice!

Kristi

Mackie: This is one of your best efforts, and I've liked you other stuff. I think I would have liked to hear "rear view mirror" sung, even though the lyric implies "mirror". All of a sudden, I was thinking of "rear views", and the thought had nothing to do with mirrors.
Ott

Great lyrics Mackie. You set up a nice story. I really liked the musical feel of this one as well and your voice. I think the comment made above about not pausing in the middle of a line would be interesting to hear. Nice job.

Tracy

Hey Mackie,

You just keep getting better and better! I have to agree with the comments above, I do think this one would sound even better without that pause in the verses.

Take care,

Dottie

Tony--

I appreciate you taking time to listen and comment--That is a good suggestion--someone else had the same idea on another song--STILL TRYING TO LEARN TO WRITE A GOOD SONG!

Later,

Mackie

Stan the Man--

I do need some help with this one--I may just use some of your suggestions, when I make do the re-write.

I always appreciate your input.

Mackie

Kristi--

I appreciate your support and positive comments--I tried to keep the message simple--Sometimes as a writer, I may over-simplify, and the listener doesn't get the message--I keep learning from constructive feedback.

Mackie

Ott--

Thanks for your kind words and feedback--I originally had rear view mirror--but it sung hard--I MAY HAVE TO REVISIT THAT LINE TO IMPROVE IT--Thank you!

Later,

Mackie

Tracy--

I always listen to repeat ideas for improvement--I think the pause is more of a habit--a lot of old pop and jazz singers had this in their STYLE--I may try to change or shorten the pause--we'll see--OLD DOGS-NEW TRICKS--

THANKS!

Mackie

Dottie--

Thanks for tuning in on this BLUZ--I appreciate the thumbs up--though I do struggle with every SONG--Maybe one day I'll get one RIGHT!

Later,

Mackie

Hi Mackie,

There's a lotta soul in this song too. My only nit would be perhaps the aforementioned pauses (but you're right... a lot of the old blues singers did this too) and there were a few places where it seems like the chord changes jumped time a bit, but your delivery is soulful and I enjoyed it.

Cam

Mackie....I listened to this earlier....got side tracked....keep this in mind...."there are no rules when you do the blues".....that said....I like you and I like what you do....you always put feeling to your stuff when you sing....this is a trait you just can't teach....you just got it dude....your bud...Bobby Pickens 2.....

CAM--

I appreciate your taking time and your candor--I am LUCKY to get one laid down at all--NOT BEING A REAL MUSICIAN--I struggle to get the music to mesh with the lyric--I keep trying different things--this time I used a resonator acoustic--But, I am a little more comfortable with my TELE--

Later,

Mackie

Bobby Pickens 2--

I don't deserve as much praise--But I do appreciate this one appealing to you--

Thanks for your thumbs up on this one--I do feel some of the SOUL trying to sing the BLUZ--

Later,

Mackie

You're doing fine. Keep it up!

Cam

Cam--

I appreciate the encouragement--You have a lot to WRITE ABOUT IN ARIZONA--It's hot out there, but you have LOW HUMIDITY--Maybe some day I'll take a trip there.

Thought about an Amtrac round-robin from MEMPHIS southern and northern ROUTES--I haven't talked my wife into it yet--We have been doing CRUISES--

Mackie

Hey Mackie ... very haunting song! My kind of music, my kind of melody! I can hear this on the radio on a summer day!

Stan

The lyric paints a picture very well Mackie. Like the tune as well. You keep improving greatly.

Stevie

STAN--

I APPRECIATE YOUR INTEREST AND FEEDBACK--I thought this one had wound down--

I'm glad you liked it--

Later,

Mackie

STEVIE--

Thanks for the VISIT AND KIND WORDS--TRYING TO LEARN--YOU HELP, YOU KNOW--I appreciate my fellow song writers' help!

Mackie