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#878946 - 02/15/11 02:25 AM Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... *****  
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The goal of our "Song Challenges" is to write songs/lyrics on demand within set parameters. We don't critique each other's songs in this thread (but you can say you like someone's song if you want to.) Please post your original works. If you have already written a song/lyric that fits within the parameters, please feel free to post it.


For this challenge, you need verses and a chorus/refrain. You must use the hook "You weren't the ....." in the chorus. You may also use the hook in the present tense, "You aren't the ...".

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#878974 - 02/15/11 04:15 AM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: Jean Bullock]  
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Hi Jean,

Given it's Valentine's Day I thought love was an appropriate theme. This challenge was alittle different but I believe I have completed my assignment teacher. smile


"You Weren't The Man Mama Wanted"
Country/Female Vocal w/twang (needs melody) wink
(c)2011 Lynn Orloff

My mama started sayin' at a young age
"Now honey thereís boys and thereís men
You wantaí find someone respected
Whoíll treat you the best that he can
YouĎd do best to fetch you a someone
Whose got him a college degree
Whoíll buy you a house with a yard and a pool
And lots of your pretty girl things"

Lift
Well mama she sure tried to guide me, we all know our mamaís know best
But when I saw you in that pick up, felt my heart leap outside of my chest

You werenít the man mama wanted
But God seemed to have His own plans
You arenít the man mama prayed for
But baby youíre my kind of man


Every nite she would pray by her bedside
"Good Lord help her make the right choice
Not some cowboy who ainít got no future
Drivin' tractor and ridin' some horse
Sheís deserviní of somethiní much bigger
Then a riggety white picket fence
Round a tiny white house down some dirt road down south
Lord please help her use common sense"

Lift
I listened outside of her bedroom, knew by heart one by one every prayer
But when I saw you in those blue jeans, I just didnít seem much to care

You werenít the man mama wanted
But God surely had His own plans
You aren't the man mama prayed for
But baby you're my kind of man


Bridge
Oh it took alittle time to make my mama see
My country boy is just the thing her little darlin' needs

No you weren't the man mama prayed for
But I see how her heart took a turn
Though you aren't the man she expected
Seems she had her a lesson to learn


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#878977 - 02/15/11 04:26 AM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: Jean Bullock]  
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JEAN,

My first Challenge song--KIND OF A VALENTINE SONG, maybe you could SAY?


YOU ARENíT THE FIRST
©2011 Mackie Humphries

V1
Baby you got me
Breathiní hard again
Have me begginí for
Your sweet loviní
With one more touch
My heart will sing
Your warm kisses
Feel like a dream.

CH
You arenít the first - to pull me in
Then spin a web - so... inviting
Work your magic - close to perfect
Then soothe away - all my stress
You arenít the first - to pull me in

V2
Baby donít go yet
Take a little rest
Never felt like this
Girl you're the best
Canít help but smile
Laying in the dark
You are the one
Who owns my heart.

CH
You arenít the first - to pull me in
Then spin a web - so ...inviting
Work your magic - close to perfect
Then soothe away - all my stress
You arenít the first - to pull me in

BR
Under your spell still in a trance
Give me a call and another dance.

CH
You arenít the first - to pull me in
Then spin a web - so... inviting
Work your magic - close to perfect
Then soothe away - all my stress
You arenít the first - to pull me in.

TAG
You arenít the first - to pull me in.

Mackie

Last edited by Mackie H.; 02/15/11 04:40 AM.
#881610 - 02/26/11 07:07 AM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: Mackie H.]  
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You weren't the only one who loved me
But you were the only love I need
You weren't the only one to want me
But you were the only one for me

I don't have time to write more at the mo but I like these challenges. I shall revisit.


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#881930 - 02/27/11 04:30 PM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: JamesDF5]  
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Dear Lynn, Mackie and James, thanks for posting. Any more takers?


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#884013 - 03/08/11 11:16 PM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: Jean Bullock]  
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There should be more takers for this every week/month etc. Clearly we all think we're too good to need to do this. I love creative challenges.

How about you take it up a notch and we write some lyrics, decide on our favourite lyrics and then we all write our own melody to it.


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#885287 - 03/13/11 03:09 PM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: JamesDF5]  
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Hi, James. I don't know that people think they are too good to need it, although some may feel that way. Perhaps they just aren't interested in the hook. Also some people feel they have to let the "muse" move them and are unaware that challenges like these actually train the "muse" to come when she is called.

We have had some challenges in the past where people have posted lyrics and others wrote music to it. Wouldn't hurt to have another one. The only problem I have with that approach is knowing what to do if the lyricist doesn't like a particular melody and the composer would like to make it an "official" collaboration. Or perhaps the lyricist likes the melody but the composer doesn't want to go further with it. Any ideas to circumvent that?


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#886267 - 03/18/11 11:26 AM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: Lynn Orloff]  
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LOVE YOUR WRITING STYLE.


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#886826 - 03/21/11 12:18 PM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: Jean Bullock]  
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Dear Jean:

I am new here and read your post with interest. I see no one has answered/addressed this issue...maybe someone will soon, hopefully.

Petra



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#886829 - 03/21/11 12:28 PM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: Petra]  
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HiDee Mz Jeanie B!

JUST NOW read of This Challenge...& Yeah, I'm Up For It!

Already got several good hooks in a minute ago:

You Weren't The Sharpest Tool in The Shed

and

You Weren't The Pick of The Litter...

so maybe I'll pen ya a Couple...

Thanks!
Big Hugs,
Stan

#886834 - 03/21/11 12:38 PM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: Petra]  
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Thanks, Petra.

Looking forward to your contribution, Stan. grin


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#886973 - 03/21/11 10:52 PM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: Jean Bullock]  
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Hello Jean. Just came across this thread and if it is still open I will contribute. In fact since it is snowing and the satellite is down I will write it now. Here it goes: [7:14 to 7:50]

You Weren't The One (I Thought You Were)
(03.21.11)

(V)
Pulled into Caseyís just past eleven.
Had hit some other bars, some pretty hard.
Grabbed a stool the moment one was empty.
Spotted her in those tight black leotards.
Sauntered over with help from other patrons.
Tapped her lightly preparing my surprise.
But when she turned around I stumbled backwards.
Caught off guard by the death look in her eyes.

(Chorus)
You weren't the one I thought you were.
Now my cheeks are wet with tears.
Think I'll take that keg right there,
goiní to need a lot more beer.
Believed I had a betting chance,
but now itís all a blur.
You werenít the one, there goes my fun.
The one I thought you were.

(V)
Stood around and waited for another.
Another stool arrived surprisingly.
Took my seat, the beer the bar-keep gave me.
Sat back down and waited patiently.
A group of gals over in a corner
were laughing loud and haviní a great time.
Took my glass and act and tripped on over.
Back at the bar I sucked a sour lime.

(Chorus)
You weren't the one I thought you were.
Now my cheeks are wet with tears.
Think I'll take that keg right there,
goiní to need a lot more beer.
Believed I had a betting chance,
but now itís all a blur.
You werenít the one, there goes my fun.
The one I thought you were.

(Bridge)
Come closing time I had too climb
back up and out the door.
Headed home, all alone,
still donít know why for?
Caught a glimpse, of this handsome prince,
gave myself a gr-r-r!
ďYou werenít the one, there werenít none.
The one I thought you were.

(Chorus)
You weren't the one I thought you were.
Now my cheeks are wet with tears.
Think I'll take that keg right there,
goiní to need a lot more beer.
Believed I had a betting chance,
but now itís all a blur.
You werenít the one, there goes my fun.
The one I thought you were.


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#886976 - 03/21/11 10:57 PM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: Jean Bullock]  
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I'd say you just roll with it. If he, she, they don't like it then oh well. If it's meant to be then it will be. Let fear not hold us back. As Nike say: Just do it.


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#886999 - 03/22/11 12:13 AM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: JamesDF5]  
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Thank you kindly Petra. smile


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#887017 - 03/22/11 03:32 AM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: Lynn Orloff]  
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Thanks, for posting Doug. grin


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#887144 - 03/22/11 06:56 PM Re: Song Challenge #45 You Weren't the ... [Re: Jean Bullock]  
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My pleasure Jean.


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