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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/05/24 01:49 PM
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This is dedicated to a close family friend who lost her Ma this week.
"Carry me home"
V1 Move in close my dearest the night is growing cold and I need a friendly face, to gaze upon and hand to hold. There is nothing that I fear as I face my darkest eve, so I ask one final favour tonight before I leave...
Chorus Carry me home, carry me home lay me down upon the heather In the place that I call home. My travels took me far away but I never felt alone, so while the lonesome piper plays for me carry me home...
V2 Carry me to the Highlands to feel their breath once more, through the haven of the glen, to the old Loch peaceful shore. Should you stop to rest raise a whisky glass or two, toast me on my final journey is all I ask of you...
chorus
Bridge As the dark clouds gather and the sun sets in the west, place the flower of Scotland carefully upon my breast. Now I rest forever now my journey's through, 'til we meet some other day Guid cheerio the nou..
chorus x2
copyright Gary Parr 2011 all rights reserved
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Hi Gary.
This is really good Gary. I don't know why you don't have comments.
A good write. I will make a suggestion as use - loose - or abuse FREELY
everything is IMO and could be worth squat.
'as I face my darkest eve,' dosn't work for me as the well known saying is generally 'my darkest hour'. I see the reason for Eve though and think it's easily sorted. A slight change in the beginning of the line works. IMO.
Apart from that Gary. IMO the lyrics are so perfect.
The last line 'Guid cheerio the nou'.. should that be 'Guid cheerio for nou..
V1 Move in close my dearest the night is growing cold and I need a friendly face, to gaze upon and hand to hold. There is nothing that I fear On this my darkest eve so I ask one final favour tonight before I leave
I do think that with the right music and perhaps that lonesome bagpipe this could become a classic 'Danny Boy' type song.
I love the whole song...
----------- brill -------- and the sun sets in the west, place the flower of Scotland carefully upon my breast. -----------------------------
Your's is the first song I have ever rated Gary. 5 stars from me.
God Bless Roy and Helen
Last edited by Roy Cooper; 01/19/11 12:06 PM.
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I can't believe I am the only one who sees this as real good lyrics.
Am I loosing the plot folks.. lol
God Bless Roy and Helen
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Hi UK Gary!
I'll agree..it's a Very Good Job here...it's just got more appeal to a Euro Audience, methinks. (I confess to not easily-translating the Gaelic (?) Quote at the end, & Yanks aren't TOO nostalgic for references to Dear Old Scotland...alas.)
Only lyrical spot that bugged me was rhyming "home" with "home" in the Chorus. Try "Carry me home, & carry me STRONG" (K-O-S) for Line 1 there.
No Whiskey to raise..but Merlot'll do.. Good Luck with this'n', Amigo!
Best Wishes & a Big Caber-Tossin'-Guy-Hug, Stan
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LOL....Thanks guys. The close family friends Ma was Scottish, I haven't actually shown her this yet.
'Guid cheerio the nou'...is correct 'the' and 'for' used in the same context. (good bye for now)
The 'eve' reference refers to evening...my fault because I haven't punctuated it.
The repeat in the chorus is intended...the second carry me home is in a higher key.
Ideally I would like to get this finished but Im on a steep learning curve and no budget as far as home recording is concerned. Im trying to get to grips with anvil studio, audacity and band in a box though.....and guitar...
thank you all Gary
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GARY--
TIS A GOOD PIECE OF WORK--THIS TYPE OF SONG MAY SEEM HARD FOR SOME-- Anyway I like it.
I had one similar, some time back:
WALK BEFORE MIDNIGHT © 2010 Mackie Humphries V1 Won’t be no tears Shed here for me For all those lives That I set free Those two hookers Sisters in sin Both were beggin’ To save their skin.
CH1 I don’t want your prayers anymore Chaplin you can close that cell door Think I’ll just rest and close my eyes I’ll take that walk before midnight.
V1 Won’t be no news Released by me Those drug dealers Are history They’ve stopped dealing Coke to dopers My way of thinking For them it’s over.
CH2 I don’t need mercy where I’m going Fire and burning souls supply light I’ll satisfy debts that I’m oweing I’ll take that walk before midnight
BR I’ll say my prayers in my mind..... They’ll dim the lights one more time...
CH3 I don’t want your sympathy now I’ve made my peace somehow Think I’ll just rest and close my eyes I’ll take that walk before midnight.
TAG I’ll take that walk before midnight.
GOOD LUCK WITH YOUR LYRIC.
Mackie
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Hey Gary, Awesome lyric but you already knew I love it. It's full of emotion and images. If you're looking for a collaborator just ask on here, folks are quick to help out. Dottie
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That would be great...currently I dont have any midi setup so I'm using anvil studio to put together the melody and hopefully import that into band in a box. The bagpipes will be the challenge though.
Thats a great lyric there Mackie......unique angle on it too!!
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Hi Gary,
This is so expressive,
Great song!
Geneva
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Oh man, this is really a great song..would love to hear it when it's finished...great job, congts..glyn
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Gary, I thought this was really well written ,with some great imagery...for some reaon it brought to mind the song that we were taught in junior high chorus..I think it was called "Greensleeves"..It seems to me like it would be one of those tradition-type songs that would be passed down through the ages...I can imagine a bunch of men sitting in a Scottish bar,drinking beer,toasting ,and singing this song as a tribute to their Scottish heritage...I like it very much!! Michelle
*****You know I'm a dreamer,but my heart's of gold*****Motley Crue
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Very beautiful Gary. I would love to see more of your lyrics. Do you write melodies too?
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Thanks everyone!!
Glynda...Im going to post the link the the audio for this in two mins...its a bit rough because I dont really have home recording setup and Im only a karaoke singer at best!!
Michelle......you hit the nail on the head with your description, thats how I wanted it to feel (if that makes sense?)
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The subject of this song is obviously relating his dying wishes to his/her nearest and dearest. This is a profound lyric which reminds me a little bit of "The Green Green Grass of Home". This one does look promising if you are aiming to pursue. The ability to express one's self fluenty to the one you love is in presence here.
Peace, Brian
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Hi Gary,
powerful lyrics! Reading it I felt nearly as if I were in the Highlands of Scotland. Full of images making the reader/listener crave for this beautiful country...
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Thanks Petar & Brian.
The audio link to this is now in the mp3 feedback section if you would like to have a listen. It's a bit rough round the edges but you'll get the idea.
Gary
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