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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/05/24 01:49 PM
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Hey Ya'll, Since I didn't get to go home today from the hospital, Daniel is trying to help cheer me up with a collab we did,hope you all enjoy it..I really like what he did alot..thanks glyn http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=10207635Can't believe you left me here alone Made up my mind to bring you homE No matter what I have to do I don't care what I go through Get on my knees in front of you And beg you, baby, please Living a life of self dillusion The mirrors reflection was illusion Acting without a thought I realize it's all my fault Your love cannot be bought Come home, baby, please (chorus) Everything I ever wanted Was in the palm of my hand Everything I ever needed I was strong, my own man I don't like this feeling, no, I've never been afraid My mind won't stop racing, there's so much I have to say My heart's not through...loving you Thoughts seem to echo in this place No matter where I look, I see your face Can't take this fear and doubt You're what I can't live without You've shown me what loves about I'm begging, baby, please Chorus (bridge) We'll take it one step at a time The past is gone, so let's forget I always had someone next in line But I hadn't met you, I hadn't met you yet (chorus)
Last edited by glynda; 01/28/11 09:05 PM.
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oh and Rod Coleman has done a vocal on this too, and his will also be a cowrite between Rod and me, just need to find the music to his vocals...thanks glyn
Last edited by glynda; 01/28/11 09:01 PM.
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Hey Glynda and Coal,
Wow Glynda, you have been a busy girl! It's great to see you getting music for your lyrics...Keep it up.:)
Coal, nice work again!
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Dottie, isn't this just great, love his music and his singing, i'm really happy now, got some great songs while in here..and I love it...
thanks glyn
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I played in open-G on the guitfiddle. Gave it an airy, pop-type sound I thought (shrug). A lot of words and it still ended up kinda long I thought.
Though I'm very happy you like it. Straight from the bedroom-producer Dan Miner! lol
Last edited by coalminer; 01/28/11 09:35 PM.
I have music for all of my songs and they vary from rock to country to folk and everywhere in between. (except rap)
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lol, it turned out just perfect, thanks Daniel
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Hey Dan and Glyn.
JPF is like Songwriters City.
I like this raw sound. Reminds me of Steve Earle.
Voice maybe needs a little upping volume wise and maybe push another instrument into the mix around halfway. A winner anyhow.
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I think this is a pretty good lyric but the last two lines on the verses and the last two lines in the chorus before it goes into the hook line could be cut.
So it would look like this:
Can't believe you left me here alone
Made up my mind to bring you home
No matter what I have to do
I don't care what I go through
Living a life of self delusion
The mirrors reflection was illusion
Acting without a thought
It's all my fault, love can't be bought
(Chorus)
I don't like this feeling, no, I've never been afraid
My mind won't stop racing, there's so much I have to say
My heart's not through...loving you
Something like that (you get the idea).
It just seems like it takes a long time to get to the hook and also I think I hear Dan struggling to fit some of the words in. Vic said this reminds him of Steve Earle, but to me this sounds more like a ColdPlay kind of song. I like the Open G tuning for this, but I think using the open tunings on a longer, lyric driven song can be hard b/c there's a drone vibe working with all those strings tuned to D's and G's. For this one, I think if you added another instrument to the mix, some harmonies, etc. that would help.
It's a good start. Glynda - I'm praying for you, lady. Hope you can get out of that hospital soon.
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Hi Wendy,
Thank you so much for checking this out for us, and you do have some great suggs here...and thank you too, i'm so tired of being in the hospital all the time, sometimes i've not even told I was there, it's beginning to get embarrassing...thanks again
glyn
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Sounds good to me Glyn and Dan. Nice collaboration for the both of you. Hope you're feeling better Glyn.
Stevie
I'm the only person here who is not unique.
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Stevie, thanks, I love the music Dan has for this, and his singing to me really fits the song...thanks for liking it..and thanks i'm feeling a bit better now...glyn
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Vic, I must be slipping don't know how I missed your post, must have been typing the same time you were...thanks for listening to this one for us....glyn
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maybe be going home this AM and wanted to give this one a lil' bump, thanks glyn
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Yes Wendy...I had to kinda rush through some words and sections to keep it shorter and I still cruised by the 4 minute mark.
Maybe Glynda would like to do a rewrite. Or not. It's her song
I have music for all of my songs and they vary from rock to country to folk and everywhere in between. (except rap)
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I'll see what I can do...but mister, Coalminer, I feel this is one is OUR song now..and you're also free to d whatever you feel it needs...man, I love this...lol..
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Well it sure beats a 'get well soon'card.
Sounds spot on to me. Coalminer what a nice gesture.
God Bless Roy and Helen
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Thanks Roy,
I love Coal's music and vocals on this, he's made for this song...thanks for taking your time to listen to it..
glyn
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Hi, Coal did such a great job on this song of ours, I don't want it to get lost just yet, thanks glyn
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Hi Glynda & Coalminer,
This one is sounding really fine. Something about it was bugging me though, and I think Wendy hit on it. There needs to be something else introduced because the chorus starts out just like the verses. That tends to make it very repetitive and it's already a bit long. Either another instrument or some variation in the melody there. Maybe a snip or two off the lyrics as well?
Something else I noticed, the verses aren't sung alike. There's a pause after the first line in V1 but not in V2? Maybe just a matter of phrasing but there's something to be said for consistency, especially if you're thinking commercial.
Just some thoughts to take what is starting out pretty good and make it even better.
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Wow, is that Daniel's voice? I love that raspy sound, reminds me of Johnny Resnik of the Goo Goo Dolls!  The lyric is very heartfelt, and I especially love the line "My heart's not through loving you". I agree that maybe the melody should be a little more varied? Nice collab, you two!
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Hi, Ricki,
Thanks for checking this out for us, I love what Coal has done to it and love his vocals and music....thanks glyn
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Hey Polly,,
Yep that's Daniel singing,isn't he great...love his voice too...glyn
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Miss Polly?! Yay, it's good to see you back on the boards!
I have music for all of my songs and they vary from rock to country to folk and everywhere in between. (except rap)
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Dan and Glynda,
This is nice. Dan you always have an interesting guitar sound and it goes nicely with your voice. I like!
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Thanks Tracy,
I'm glad you liked it....and Dan is great...love it too. glyn
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Some nice change ups in there with the chords which create a pretty interesting mood that matches the lyrics and have a modern sound. Goodjob guys.
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Thanks Doug,
So happy you liked it, of course all those chord changes and singing was all Daniel...I have NO idea what he was doing, but i'm trying to learn....thanks again glyn
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Glyn and Coal--
Got a raw cool sound--that could be contagious--I DIG THIS ONE YOUALL--
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Hi Mackie
Thanks i'm so happy you like it and I like that contagious thing but that's all Dan doing his magic...
glyn
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