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#871855 - 01/17/11 08:32 AM Carry Me Home *****  
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This is dedicated to a close family friend who lost her Ma this week.

"Carry me home"


V1
Move in close my dearest
the night is growing cold
and I need a friendly face, to gaze upon
and hand to hold.
There is nothing that I fear
as I face my darkest eve,
so I ask one final favour
tonight before I leave...

Chorus
Carry me home, carry me home
lay me down upon the heather
In the place that I call home.
My travels took me far away
but I never felt alone,
so while the lonesome piper plays for me
carry me home...

V2
Carry me to the Highlands
to feel their breath once more,
through the haven of the glen,
to the old Loch peaceful shore.
Should you stop to rest
raise a whisky glass or two,
toast me on my final journey
is all I ask of you...


chorus

Bridge
As the dark clouds gather
and the sun sets in the west,
place the flower of Scotland
carefully upon my breast.
Now I rest forever
now my journey's through,
'til we meet some other day
Guid cheerio the nou..

chorus x2

copyright Gary Parr 2011 all rights reserved

#872344 - 01/19/11 11:54 AM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: Gary_UK]  
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Hi Gary.

This is really good Gary.
I don't know why you don't have comments.

A good write. I will make a suggestion as use - loose - or abuse FREELY

everything is IMO and could be worth squat.

'as I face my darkest eve,' dosn't work for me as the well known saying is generally 'my darkest hour'. I see the reason for Eve though and think it's easily sorted.
A slight change in the beginning of the line works. IMO.

Apart from that Gary. IMO the lyrics are so perfect.

The last line 'Guid cheerio the nou'.. should that be 'Guid cheerio for nou..



V1
Move in close my dearest
the night is growing cold
and I need a friendly face, to gaze upon
and hand to hold.
There is nothing that I fear
On this my darkest eve
so I ask one final favour
tonight before I leave

I do think that with the right music and perhaps that lonesome bagpipe this could become a classic 'Danny Boy' type song.

I love the whole song...

----------- brill --------
and the sun sets in the west,
place the flower of Scotland
carefully upon my breast.
-----------------------------

Your's is the first song I have ever rated Gary. 5 stars from me.

God Bless Roy and Helen


Last edited by Roy Cooper; 01/19/11 12:06 PM.

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#872526 - 01/20/11 11:30 AM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: Roy Cooper]  
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I can't believe I am the only one who sees this as real good lyrics.

Am I loosing the plot folks.. lol

God Bless Roy and Helen


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#872736 - 01/21/11 04:29 AM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: Gary_UK]  
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Hi UK Gary!

I'll agree..it's a Very Good Job here...it's just got more appeal to a Euro Audience, methinks. (I confess to not easily-translating the Gaelic (?) Quote at the end, & Yanks aren't TOO nostalgic for references to Dear Old Scotland...alas.)

Only lyrical spot that bugged me was rhyming "home" with "home" in the Chorus. Try "Carry me home, & carry me STRONG" (K-O-S) for Line 1 there.

No Whiskey to raise..but Merlot'll do.. Good Luck with this'n', Amigo!

Best Wishes & a Big Caber-Tossin'-Guy-Hug,
Stan

#873474 - 01/24/11 12:21 PM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: "Tampa Stan" Good (D)]  
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LOL....Thanks guys. The close family friends Ma was Scottish, I haven't actually shown her this yet.

'Guid cheerio the nou'...is correct 'the' and 'for' used in the same context. (good bye for now)

The 'eve' reference refers to evening...my fault because I haven't punctuated it.

The repeat in the chorus is intended...the second carry me home is in a higher key.

Ideally I would like to get this finished but Im on a steep learning curve and no budget as far as home recording is concerned. Im trying to get to grips with anvil studio, audacity and band in a box though.....and guitar...

thank you all
Gary

#873595 - 01/24/11 09:43 PM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: Gary_UK]  
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GARY--

TIS A GOOD PIECE OF WORK--THIS TYPE OF SONG MAY SEEM HARD FOR SOME-- Anyway I like it.

I had one similar, some time back:


WALK BEFORE MIDNIGHT
© 2010 Mackie Humphries
V1
Wonít be no tears
Shed here for me
For all those lives
That I set free
Those two hookers
Sisters in sin
Both were begginí
To save their skin.

CH1
I donít want your prayers anymore
Chaplin you can close that cell door
Think Iíll just rest and close my eyes
Iíll take that walk before midnight.

V1
Wonít be no news
Released by me
Those drug dealers
Are history
Theyíve stopped dealing
Coke to dopers
My way of thinking
For them itís over.

CH2
I donít need mercy where Iím going
Fire and burning souls supply light
Iíll satisfy debts that Iím oweing
Iíll take that walk before midnight

BR
Iíll say my prayers in my mind.....
Theyíll dim the lights one more time...

CH3
I donít want your sympathy now
Iíve made my peace somehow
Think Iíll just rest and close my eyes
Iíll take that walk before midnight.

TAG
Iíll take that walk before midnight
.





GOOD LUCK WITH YOUR LYRIC.

Mackie

#873601 - 01/24/11 10:36 PM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: Mackie H.]  
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Hey Gary,

Awesome lyric but you already knew I love it. It's full of emotion and images. If you're looking for a collaborator just ask on here, folks are quick to help out. smile

Dottie

#874026 - 01/26/11 12:40 PM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: Dottie]  
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That would be great...currently I dont have any midi setup so I'm using anvil studio to put together the melody and hopefully import that into band in a box. The bagpipes will be the challenge though.

Thats a great lyric there Mackie......unique angle on it too!!

#874125 - 01/26/11 09:43 PM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: Gary_UK]  
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Hi Gary,

This is so expressive,

Great song!

Geneva

#874134 - 01/26/11 10:22 PM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: nightengale]  
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Oh man, this is really a great song..would love to hear it when it's finished...great job, congts..glyn

#874225 - 01/27/11 05:03 AM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: glynda]  
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Gary,
I thought this was really well written ,with some great imagery...for some reaon it brought to mind the song that we were taught in junior high chorus..I think it was called "Greensleeves"..It seems to me like it would be one of those tradition-type songs that would be passed down through the ages...I can imagine a bunch of men sitting in a Scottish bar,drinking beer,toasting ,and singing this song as a tribute to their Scottish heritage...I like it very much!!
Michelle


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#875858 - 02/03/11 01:23 AM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: Gary_UK]  
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Very beautiful Gary. I would love to see more of your lyrics. Do you write melodies too?

#876166 - 02/04/11 01:07 PM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: Tracy Harris]  
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Thanks everyone!!

Glynda...Im going to post the link the the audio for this in two mins...its a bit rough because I dont really have home recording setup and Im only a karaoke singer at best!!

Michelle......you hit the nail on the head with your description, thats how I wanted it to feel (if that makes sense?)

#876212 - 02/04/11 04:08 PM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: Gary_UK]  
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The subject of this song is obviously relating his dying wishes to his/her nearest and dearest. This is a profound lyric which reminds me a little bit of "The Green Green Grass of Home". This one does look promising if you are aiming to pursue. The ability to express one's self fluenty to the one you love is in presence here.

Peace,
Brian

#876701 - 02/06/11 11:21 AM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: beechnut79]  
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Hi Gary,

powerful lyrics! Reading it I felt nearly as if I were in the Highlands of Scotland. Full of images making the reader/listener crave for this beautiful country...

#876894 - 02/07/11 06:22 AM Re: Carry Me Home [Re: Plavi Mesec]  
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Thanks Petar & Brian.

The audio link to this is now in the mp3 feedback section if you would like to have a listen. It's a bit rough round the edges but you'll get the idea.

Gary


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