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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/05/24 01:49 PM
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The Hall Of Mirrors / Written By Andrew Shields I’ve Found Myself Lost In The Hall Of Mirrors Trapped In This Hell , I’m Surrounded By Sinners This Self Reflection , Builds Hate Inside In My Own Evil , True Darkness Confides I’ve Got Myself Stuck And Now I’m In Grave Danger As My Own Reflection Looks Like A Stranger I’m Face To Face With The Demon That’s Me It Seems The Darkness Ate What I used To Be I’ve Found Myself Lost In The Hall Of Mirrors Trapped In This Hell , I’m Surrounded By Sinners This Self Reflection , Builds Hate Inside In My Own Evil , True Darkness Confides I’ve Come To Realise The Darkness Behind My Eyes Its Cause By My Anger , My Hate And My Lust For The Person I Look At , I Feel Nothing But Disgust I’ve Found Myself Trapped In A Maze Of Mirrors Lost In My Own Hell , I’m Surrounded By Sinners I’m Forced To Face My Demons Inside In This God Forsaken Place It Seems I Can’t Hide This was a cryptic idea I had about self hatred , so I thought I would give this my full attention for a few weeks and I came out with this , I’m quite happy about it . Also this is the 11th song I have finished for a planned upcoming album which is hopefully going to be titled The Hall Of Mirrors under the artistic name of HellOHell (Hello Hell) . I have acquired the help of some good friends of mine who are all talented musicians , they are hopefully going to help me with the writing and recording and hopefully I can get all of this rapped up during June / July. But I’m in doubts about my courage , I’m still s**ting myself at the idea of me singing , but I hope it all works out in the end , oh and comments please
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......Andy S =) .x
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This is a great lyric and you have written it really well..and hey, i'd love to hear you singing......love this Andy...glyn
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Andy, you've written from a very introspective POV and raw emotion, both good things in my book. Good luck with your cd, and it would be great to hear you sing!
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lol thanks girls means a lot
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HiYa Young Andy~!
No Need to fear singing...it's Ideally just like havin' a chat..into a microphone. If you can talk, you can sing...just have the Autotune nearby.
On to The Song: Methinks there's an Overabundance of "I's". You don't NORMALLY mention-yourself in daily conversation, & such should be the case here too. There's also more'n one spot here where Pruning Syls & Words would help, too, JMO.
That-in-Mind, V1 might look more like this:
Found Myself Lost in the Hall of Mirrors Trapped in This Hell (&) Surrounded by Sinners Self-Reflection Builds Hate Inside In My Own Evil, Darkness COLLIDES...
Got Myself Stuck Now..In Grave Danger As My Reflection SHOWS ME a Stranger...
Face-to-Face with The Demon That's Me Seems Darkness HIDES What I Used To Be...
KOS, Amigo...but I like your Concept & Hook &...It's Getting There~
Good Luck & Best Wishes, Big Guy-Hug too, Stan
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okay thanks a tun stan , but , big BUT here
you used the word "collides" , i used "confides" for a reason , to show how the darkness has bestoed itself onto me , and then you used "hides" , i used "ate" to show that it has engulfed my soul , im not literally talking about myself btw , its fro some ones point of view , and tbh you cant not have a song about yourself with out "I" in it , it'll just seem stupid
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......Andy S =) .x
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Hi Andy. I really like this one. Very introspective but universal in it's appeal. Lots of folks should be able to relate to it me thinks. Great job of communicating your feelings
Steve
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thanks stevie , its muchly appreciated
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Hey Andy, MY only comment is you better let me know when I can buy this cd!!!! Oh and really like the lyric: nice gothic feel, and really like the whole Hall of Mirrors idea, love the line about your own reflection looks like a stranger. Gives me that Dorian Grey vibe which is cool. I know you say it is about self hatred, but there is also that very scary idea of facing your own truth as well, at least that is what I get out of it. Well done Andy Cheers Alan
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thanks alot alan , the means alot
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