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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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[size:14pt][u]New Micheline Thread with mp3[/u][/size] Micheline Copyright © 2010 Colin Ward V1 I met Micheline in a beach bar, The sun was beating down, We were sitting underneath a tiki hut, letting some drinks slide down V2 Hers had a pink umbrella, Mine was a Mexican brew, I said hey there baby, May I come and sit with you Ch The day wore on and the drinks were strong, Micheline started to smile, I said hey baby, what d'ya want to do Would you come with me for a while V3 Micheline liked the beach bar, But I took her for a stroll on the sand, We didn't get far before I stole a kiss, and soon we walking hand in hand V4 Somehow we found my hotel Stumbled into my room, Things got hot then I got a shock, She shouldn't be a bride but a groom CH Br Micheline began as a Michael, But he thought he was really a girl, He was really convincing until I started thinking, 'bout that Adam's apple north of his pearls CH
Last edited by Colin Ward; 02/07/10 10:53 PM.
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Nice little twist, Colin. I was surprised! But not sure the bride and groom line works...since no one was getting married. Don't know what to put there instead but I'm sure you can come up with something...that is, if others have problems with it. Cute little song.
Betty J. Holt
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Ha ha!!!! An unexpected twist. I didn't really see it as an issue to say 'not a bride but a groom'.
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Thanks for checking it out, all.....
After FAWM, I might change the last choruses to reflect the discovery. Hope to record a draft this weekend.
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Hey Colin..
You put a nice twist on this sister. Great last line on the bridge.
Larry
Can't find the stairway to 'heaven'...but I know where the elevator is.
Each of us has cause to think with deep gratitude of those who have lighted the flame within us" - Albert Schweitzer.
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Larry,
Thanks for checking in. I'll polish it up after FAWM!
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Even though Lola did this first, I enjoyed it when you made it happen again Colin...
Have a suggestion for the pick up line...
Can I spend some time with you
Leads nicely into the day you describe
If writing ever becomes work I think I'm going to have to stop
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I didn't care for the gender-bender twist (been done too well in that other popular song already) so I came up with a new twist for you--keep or sweep:
Micheline Copyright © 2010 Colin Ward
VERSE 1 Met Micheline at tiki bar Sun was beating all around Sittin’ underneath a canopy lettin’ them ice-cold drinks slide down Hers had a pink umbrella Mine was a blueish green We touched glasses to her pretty smile Prettiest I’d ever seen
CHORUS 1 The daylight faded but the drinks were strong, As Micheline’s inviting smile Said hey baby, whadd’ya wanna do Will you walk with me for a while
VERSE 2 Took Micheline by her soft little hand Strolled with her on that cool beach sand Didn't get far before I stole a kiss Swayin’ to the steel drum band We shared a taxi to my hotel Laughin’ we stumbled into my room, Talked awhile and I pulled her close She tripped and broke her nose
BRIDGE Blood everywhere Gave us a pretty good scare Couldn’t wait to get outta there Looked like a damn crime scene
CHORUS 2 The daylight gone but the drinks were strong, As Micheline’s inverted smile Said hey baby let’s get you to a doctor I’ll call a taxi for another ride
OUTRO That’s the story of Micheline It could only happen to me Mighta got laid If not for the stumbling Micheline
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Stunt Brain,
Thanks for taking the time to work on this. Lola is 40 years old and anybody under 45 or so has probably never heard it. So I thought I would revisit the subject.
Anyway, I will wait until February Album Writing Month is over to do a rewrite and I will keep yours in mind,
Thanks again
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Colin,
You dirty rat...LMAO! You had me til the bridge....you crack me up! Seriously, I can see a great song here but you went off the wall lol. Heck I know what you're capable of so I'm not gonna suggest a thing. I figure you'll change it if you want to. Thanks for the laughs!
Regards,
Wes
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Colin, this looks real good though I don't know how many times I'd want to do the chorus after the twist in v4. If you could save that for a bridge to end on, filling in with more build up, it might hit even stronger. But it works pretty well as is.
have fun, John
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Bahahhaa...this is too funny Colin!!! I like it!! I listened to the mp3 as well. Good stuff...that name...too funny!!
Kim
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