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Hi Guys No this is not a publishing or record label deal offer This is for fun and learning But....... Are you serious about your music? Do you you really believe in the work you have put into your material and feel it's ready to compete with the top people in the industry? Do you have something that they can't say no too? Would make an artist take there own song off the CD and put yours there instead? "Hey wait nobody does that,not fair" lol Based on a conversation on another thread about current hit songs I wanted to give a trial taste of making a submission for a consideration. So weather you want to pitch a song for getting a cut or you yourself are the artist or band. Place your song here. Lot of folks feel they have what it takes and don't see any reason they should be denied a piece of the pie. So lets do it, responses will be similar to what and how busy labels respond. I'll give more input but in most cases the bigger the place the less response/feedback you'll get. Submissions open till December 15th Any Billboard Popular GenreDon't be afraid to get into character as well, when submitting. How would you submit? What do you want to put in your submission letter? How can you say it in short? It's okay to practice that here... Oh and the But? ...... Drop me a hit here and we'll talk about it from there!
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What genre? All of my "demos" suffer because I sing on them (LOL). Here's a rockish tune that I think would go over well with a great dynamic singer and band. Clap of Thunder: http://soundclick.com/share?songid=5196787Kevin **************************** Clap of Thunder© Emmrich/Leach 2009(v1) Rolling down this road just trying to make myself feel whole It hits me when I least expect it Like a shockwave to my soul (v2) Something big, something mysterious Not to be mistaken or explored It’s a feeling that can not be talked about But never will it be ignored (ch) Like a Clap of Thunder Echoing in my Head Like a Clap of Thunder Making its presence felt (v3) Sometimes we need to get out To see what we can see It’s a path with no comforts When all that’s left is debris (v4) I went down to the place That I had dreamed about It was not what I expected But it hit me beyond any doubt (ch) Like a Clap of Thunder Echoing in my Head Like a Clap of Thunder Making its presence felt (v5) Rolling down this road just wondering how my life will unfold and I know something’s gonna rise up and hit me Like a shockwave to my soul (ch) Like a Clap of Thunder Echoing in my Head Like a Clap of Thunder Making its presence felt
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To Kevin Emmrich JPF MP3 Boards
Thanks for your submission. The demo had a solid sound. Unfortunately were not able to use "Clap Of Thunder" Our bands have no need for outside material at this time.
On a constructive note I just wanted to add, that you have a nice arrangement here. The chorus could have been more effective and the message could have related more on a personal level. The mystery of what hit you may have been more effective revealing itself at some point to the listener perhaps. So the subject matter would be more relate-able.
Also saxophone gave a dated feeling to the song right off the bat.
Thanks for considering us and all the best in the future.
Mike Knowitall Sublevel Music NYC
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Mr. Knowitall,
Thank you for taking time to review my song and responding back with helpful comments. If other opportunities arise, please keep me in mind. A full list of my musical offerings in listed below on my soundclick.com link.
Sincerly,
Kevin
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Hi Mike you can always use any of mine...here's one Polly likes of mine Step To The Side http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8168231Step To The Side I've been tied down way too long In this loveless thing you call a marriage Lived My life the way You told me to Lost myself somewhere along the way It's time I toughened up and moved on I need to find myself again I miss that sassy, funny, carefree girl If I mess up, I'll have myself to blame But life's too short to live Your way I'm ready for My life to begin Step to the side Get out of my way Best not try to stop me I've a lifetime Of catching up to do Bringing this girl Back out that's trapped Inside of me And tonight I'm gonna ride Tonight I'm gonna ride Step To The Side You'd introduce me as Your wife Never mentioned my first name Treated my as Your property I'm through playing your selfish games Tonight I'm taking back My life I've prayed until my knees are bruised Should I leave or should I stay I tried to think of four good reasons And I couldn't even think of one Leaving you is what I choose Step To The Side Get out of my way Best not try to stop me I've got a lifetime Of catching up to do Bringing this girl Back out that's trapped Inside of me And tonight I'm gonna ride Tonight I'm gonna ride Step To The Side I need to find a reason to smile A reason to wake up I'm going to find how to Love Me again Step To The Side Get out of my way Best not try to stop me I've a lifetime Of catching up to do Bringing this girl Back out that's trapped Inside of Me And tonight I'm gonna ride Tonight I'm gonna ride Step To The Side Step To The Side Step To The Side written: by glyn Edited by glynda (10/02/09 04:06 AM) _________________________
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Mike...I posted an in-depth reply to your comments about "I Found Me A Hero" and I'd like for you to read that, please. Thanks,
JD
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Here's one I co-wrote with a guy in NY. It's a real country song http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=100639&songID=5483050"This Old Quilt" 3:35 (Twinn/Caro) This Old Quilt was made by Granny, Momma gave it to me. When she passed it down she passed along a piece of history. And though it's old and ragged now, and looks a little rough. It reminds me of those good old days, they talked about so much. One patch came from the overalls that Grandpa used to wear. Another one from a flour sack, sewn with tender care. But the one the I'll always love the most though faded and brown. Is the satin patch that came from Granny's wedding gown. This old Quilt sure comes in handy when it's cold outside. It's like Granny's there to tuck me in when I lay down at night. I remember how she told me that on my wedding day. Be sure to save a memory in some special way. One patch came from the overalls that Grandpa used to wear. Another one from a flour sack, sewn with tender care. But the one the I'll always love the most though faded and brown. Is the satin patch that came from Granny's wedding gown. She must've looked so beautiful in that long satin gown. And the only memory I have is This Old Quilt handed down. One patch came from the overalls that Grandpa used to wear. Another one from a flour sack, sewn with tender care. But the one the I'll always love the most though faded and brown. Is the satin patch that came from Granny's wedding gown.
http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
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Hi Mike, I've posted this here before, and it is probably the first one I am really going to push. I am changing the Title to "Mommy Needs A Miracle" http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=593806&songID=8281483Mommy Needs A Miracle I was in the chapel Down on bended knee I heard a tiny little voice From the pew in front of me Her voice was like a whisper In between her cries I listened to every word As tears fell from her eyes My mommy needs a miracle------------------------ {Chorus I heard the doctor say She might not make it through the night Please teach me how to pray My mommy needs a miracle Would you help me today I know you’re out there Jesus Please teach me how to pray I know I lay me down to sleep And thank you for this food And please bring lots of presents Cause I’ve been very good But this is more important Than any of that stuff I need the words to ask you To make it mean enough My mommy needs a miracle------------------------ {Chorus I heard the doctor say She might not make it through the night Please teach me how to pray My mommy needs a miracle Would you help me today I know you’re out there Jesus Please teach me how to pray Turnaround 4 Bars Modulation from V &C chords I saw her in the chapel------------------------- {Bridge On the coming morn She didn't look as tearful Or sound so quite forlorn Mommy made it through the night------------------------ {Chorus I heard the doctor say It really is a miracle That she is here today Thank you Lord for teaching And helping me to pray I know you’re out there Jesus I only had to pray I know you’re out there Jesus I only had to pray Copyright 2008 John W. Selleck BMI
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Good idea for a thread Mike! Maybe a reality check thread. Here's one of my favorite jazz ballads that Cal and I wrote. Not mainstream though. Kind of a Diana Krall tune. Best, John "Bluer Than This"Lyrics: Cal Francis DiFalco Music: John Lawrence Schick Sung by Teresa http://schicksville.com/Music/Bluer%20Than%20This.mp3I was hurt When love took a twist Now I can't get Much bluer than this I dropped my guard Invited you in I'm torn between, The end and begin I know I can't get, much bluer than this I fell to my knees, I tried to resist But you had your ways, that wonderful kiss And I cannot get, much bluer than this I loss control Surrendered to bliss Gave you my soul Each thing on your list There's too many things I already miss No I cannot get Much bluer than this Ah……………………………………………… I fell to my knees, I tried to resist But you had your ways, that wonderful kiss And I cannot get, much bluer than this Ooh………………………………………………
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Dear Mr. Publisher, Please review my song [color:#660000][size:14pt]Naked In The Rain[/size][/color]. It would be perfect for someone in the singer/songwriter vein. Naked In The Rain Copyright ©2009 Colin Ward V1 I was happy before I met you, But then you came along, Now I worry constantly, That one day you'll be gone On your way Leaving me naked in the rain V2 All the time you're in my brain, You've pushed the rest aside, I'm not thinking clearly now, Your face has fogged my mind, To shades of gray, Don't leave me naked in the rain Ch So now my life is full of joy, I should not worry so, I'm taking risks and might fall down, I'll go crazy if you go, Don't leave me naked in the rain Instrumental Br I don't know what you think of me, Whether I can capture your heart, You had a life when you came my way, But I thought I saw a sparkle, In your eyes, Don't leave me naked in the rain V3 I was happy before I met you, But you spun my world around, I'll fall right off the edge, If we're on shaky ground, So you've gotta stay, Don't leave me naked in the rain Chorus Tag Don't leave me naked in the rain repeat
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Hey Mike....I haven't been around lately....just was surfin' and saw this.....thought I would add another NY guy/Georgia dude song......Dennis will probably sue me...lol.....I hope to get back here again shortly.....probably know what you'll say.....happy holidays......T-Bob CLOSER TO YOU....PICKENS/CARO http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8402751
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Thanks, Mike, for doing this. Dear Mr. Know-It-All: In response to your announcement, I have attached lyrics and a recording of "Un-Easy Street," co-written with "TampaStan" Good. It's a moderately fast two-step. Our band has ended up performing this every concert, because it seems to get people up and dancing. Thanks in advance for your attention and consideration. Joe URL is www.soundclick.com/share?songid=75364861. [4/4, a little bouncy] UN-EASY STREET --Stan Good (lyrics), J. Wrabek (music) 1. Robert was an administrator Till he got the pink slip that said “See you later” Now he’s sleepin’ in the back of his Escalade; A couple spaces down, you might find Donna She and her kid are living out of that Honda When you ain’t got nothing, you don’t need a lot of space… CHORUS: Livin’ on UN-EASY STREET Eatin’ out underneath the tree Reclinin’ back in our bucket seats Reminiscin’ how things used to be When we all had jobs and stuff And mortgages we all kept up Now it all fits in a pickup truck On Un-Easy Street. 2. Don and his camper come from way off East Chasin’ a job that went off overseas Parked it here when he ran out of money and gas; The kids like Don and his wife a lot They got the only workin’ bathroom on this whole block And we’ll keep supplyin’ ‘em toilet paper when we can… CHORUS: Livin’ on UN-EASY STREET Eatin’ out underneath the tree Reclinin’ back in our bucket seats Reminiscin’ how things used to be When we all had jobs and stuff And mortgages we all kept up Now it all fits in a pickup truck On Un-Easy Street. BRIDGE: Mobile homes ain’t the same today This one’s a four-door Chevrolet Tags are expired and the engine’s froze But I don’t really have any place to go I meet folks from all over the U.S.A. Lookin’ for something that just went away An’ I learn a lot about the shape we’re in When I hear them talking about where they’ve been 4. At night, we can listen to the radio If someone’s got a battery that ain’t run low Or maybe swap stories of the good old days gone by; It’s a reg’lar resort community Of folks that got nothin’ and nowhere to be On vacation from the necessities of life. CHORUS: Livin’ on UN-EASY STREET Eatin’ out underneath the tree Reclinin’ back in our bucket seats Reminiscin’ how things used to be When we all had jobs and stuff And mortgages we all kept up Now it all fits in a pickup truck On Un-Easy Street. REPEAT LAST 2 LINES OF CHORUS TO END © 2009 Stan Good, BMI
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Mike this is a great idea. http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8080410"GOOD LUCK WITH THAT" this is the first collab for Janice Hopkins & I, lyrics are on the soundclick page
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Dear Mr. Knowital Mike, I will only waste our time in your reading this thank you, for I know I don't have any hit songs for today's market in any genre, but only songs that some general baby boomers would perhaps like to hear. But, with saying that, they may not spend anything to get them if not available for free online. Also, being 56,, (even older than you!), I doubt I or our band would look right on camera or video for selling to anyone who can otherwise see someone in their twenties or early thirties, playing similar, yet even more updated baby boomer like music. So really, just a note to say thanks anyway! Thanks! John PS, Besides, I really "Don't Want To Be Famous", haven't your heard already?! LOL
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Thanks, John. You are probably right. I have seen way too many ads on Craigslist that say "Seeking older musicians--20s or 30s." On the other hand, one of the better music videos I have seen was done by Porter Wagoner just before he died. Us older dudes may not be very good eye candy, but we're tolerably good Ear Polident.
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Dang young whippersnappers!
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Mr. Knowitall,
Thank you for taking time to review my song and responding back with helpful comments. If other opportunities arise, please keep me in mind. A full list of my musical offerings in listed below on my soundclick.com link.
Sincerly,
Kevin Hi Kev Thanks for being first and always jumping right in around here. There's that enthusiasm I'm always talking about. Okay I'll try not to step out of character again. Hey usually they don't even tell you nearly that much as I did lol. Thanks Mr Knowitall LOL PS - Don't be afraid to get in character as well, when submitting. How would you submit? What do you want to put in your submission letter? How can you say it in short? It's okay to practice that here...
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Joe, Ear Polident..sounds like there's a song in that!
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I beg your pardon, Mr. Daubert. You're never too old to die. And speaking of living, I wrote a song back in the "seventies" that should have been a hit and created a new genre. Genre! Where did this politically correct word come from. Hell, didn't we used to call it "style" The song goes something like this; We're gonna do it too it. Oh, I can see We're gonna do it to. Just you and me We're gonna do it to. We're puttin it down We're gonna do it to it. Get on your knees. I don't want to reveal the other fantastic verses full of deep meaning like the above. I am afraid this quality writing will be stolen. But it includes insightful words such as ho, female dog, cop killer and other heavy words to relay a truly deep meaning. I wanted to name this "genre", "Jive" but I think in the future they ended up calling it "Rap". Oh well, same thing. Now don't steal my verse, you hear! Up Yours Truly, Peanut M n M Oh, and yeah. What's this thread about, Sub?
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PS - Don't be afraid to get in character as well, when submitting. How would you submit? What do you want to put in your submission letter? How can you say it in short? It's okay to practice that here... My submission letter was pretty poor and I am noticing that the other submitters are not taking the opportunity to be serious. Tighten it up folks! Kevin
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Dear joe knowitall, I recently saw your request for top notch material. I know the deadline is 12-15, but i wanted mine delivered before you are inundated by all those last minute arrivals I'm sure you will find the enclosed, fresh, inovative & with some uncommon sassatude for your enjoyment Thank you for your time, & consideration Respectfully, Gus & Hopkins & Mags
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To Glynda JPF Mp3 Boards
Glynda,
Thanks for considering us and submitting your song. While the vocal here was terrific,very heartfelt and passionate I'm sorry to say this is not a hit song.
The lyric is well written and has the potential but the music,the song itself, is where the trouble really lies. There are some nice melody lines and phrases here and there and again the singer really delivers. However it never puts two of them together anywhere, it simply lacks hooks. I can truly appreciate that it has lots of changes chord wise and melodically but that is also part of the reason it's not sticking and I can't keep the song in my head.
For example this line" Lost myself somewhere along the way
This was the first really flowing catchy melody, and it fit the lyric the smoothest, more so that the "marriage" line. Now the line after it: It's time I toughened up and moved on
Would have benefited much more having been similar to the previous line. In other words your best hook is used so little in the song, Why?
Then again later the singer does a beautiful kinda lift on the "Step To The Side" line, in the resolving part, then I don't recall ever hearing it again. The song feels a bit too long and this is due to too many phrase changes and melody changes. It simply does not carry itself so it loses the listener.
I appreciate the work done hear and think you have enough going on to keep punching away and really hit home with one.
All the best,keep at this.
Mr. Mike Knowitall Sublevel Music NYC
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Louis
I'll have to come back to you later on this one.
Thankyou
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John, Thanks for the submission. This was the kind of song where I listened once and didn't make notes or respond,then I went away from it for a few hours and came back to it again. The chorus didn't burn itself into my head permanently but it did stay in there enough to make me think about the song and where I'd heard it. Meaning, it could have been the radio or TV. I may need to come out of character here and be less of the person who does not care about you or your songs as all I do for a job is listen to songs... This will be a less professional letter so please bare with that. I feel your very close here, the song is well crafted and has a good story. You developed that first verse very nicely. The story was clearer to me on the second listen, that could be just me and my lack of sleep lol. But on the first listen I could feel and share your struggle with which title to choose. I do like the one you chose but yes the center focus of the song did a have a slight pull back & forth between "Teach Me To Pray" and "Mommy Needs A Miracle" Also at first I lost you on the image of - And please bring lots of presents Cause I’ve been very good
I was thinking, why is he talking about Santa now instead of Jesus. Pretty shallow of me I know, but I can't help wonder if that might confuse the average listener as well. But on the second listen I completely got it. I think the listeners will get it and relate, and this is due to your chorus. It is always the hook that brings people in that's why it's called a hook I'm not sure that last chorus with the changing of the words worked for me, I think the story resolved but the melody and the musical moment just didn't deliver. I almost wanted to get a little corny (that's fine it's Country Music) And at the end of the bridge have that nice deep voice speak this line - "Mommy made it through the night"Then leap in with the same chorus melody with a slightly different line. That is very tough spot to figure out. I could be wrong but what I heard and felt wasn't right. On the bridge - On the coming morn She didn't look as tearful Or sound so quite forlorn Not sure, I have a hard time with words that sound poem orientated. Morn is tough but I can live with that, FORLORN eats at me. it's like STRIFE, words one should not put in popular song today. I think this song is well worth more time and work invested into it. I like the demo presentation overall it could use a bit more punch. The singer had a nice tone for this style and song. I would invest in at least auto tuning a few notes and lines. Off hand these lines - In between her cries I listened to every word As tears fell from her eyesAlso play with that chorus vocally, maybe even stronger backing vox or a touch higher/hotter lead note. You can feel it coming as the song moves and it does come but it can deliver even more and make it really hard for me to say No! In conclusion this song flies with an already established artist. In other words if it were THERE song. It is better than songs I have heard from Alan Jackson that were written by himself or some relative or friend. But may be a slightly tough bet for a breakthrough song. Very very close John. 1- Be solid on the last look draft of the overall lyric decide on the main focus, Teach Me How To Pray or Mommy's Miracle" angle I like these lines But this is more important Than any of that stuff I need the words to ask you To make it mean enoughBut right there is one of those small spots where you want to leave no doubt, or weakness, what is this song going for message wise. I lose sight of the struggle this little girl is having. I even lose sight that it is a little girl, it could only be me though, but focus gets shifted here perhaps. 2- That bridge, and it's set up of the last chorus. I lost the emotional impact of the song there. even lyrically it was layed out so that it seemed "Mommy got the miracle" so we can't sing "mommy needs a miracle" anymore, which makes sense. Then it later says "mommy needs a miracle" So we altered and used the last chorus to help resolve the story line and lost some musical hook. But for what, if the lines revert back anyway. Not sure there. If your stuck this could be even really nailed down if you considered getting a collaborator of good caliber to come in and help you nail this to the wall. Work out a deal or something, with another good writer like yourself who has a handle on this style and genre. 3- Make the presentation even stronger, this is a good sounding demo but hey let the presentation help the song more. Professionals/ Artists are getting over that way on a daily basis lol. Make the vocal even better! Make tears fill the eyes of the listener musically... This way no matter what happens in the end you'll have a great product. Great sound and singing and playing are a HUGE persuasion when a song is close and hangs in the balance of being considered or placed on hol. Despite what ANYONE tells you. You can't mess much with human nature! Feel free to re-submit this at anytime below is my personal code for submissions so when they arrive here they don't get lost or thrown directly into the garbage like 75% of what we get. (Now that's real deal talk right there) LOL Thanks John Mr. Knowitall Sublevel Music NYC
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Hi Mike,
Thank you for not only starting this thread, but for taking so much of your time and effort with your critique and suggestions. Thank you also for your compliments. I can't address the musical issues with any real knowledge.I used to play everything brass and a tiny bit of bass guitar a lot of years ago. My playing and knowledge was adequate for a high school band. Then I went to Viet Nam and came back with cracked and scarred eardrums and couldn't hear what I was playing anymore. That dashed any of my hopes for music for a lot of years until I started songwriting. When we get to the level I want this song to be I am lost. I had a pro listen to a couple of my early demos and he said the music was nowhere near the level of the lyric and if I wanted to ever make it I would have to find a way to get better music. I found a musician and studio guy named Jim Heffernan. He played for Joe Diffie on the road and in the studio for 8 years and Tracy Byrd for 2 years. He had his own studio and worked for one of the top publishers in Nashville choosing songs to publish. He still has pro musicians coming to him for lessons on lead guitar, steel guitar, dobro and mandolin. I'm just telling you this so you will see I was serious about finding someone great to help with the music. If this one ever gets to the level where a publisher says "Needs better music" I will definitely find a way to get it. Right now I am still building a library of as many different style and content songs as I can. You know how much money this takes for someone who has to farm it all out to someone else. Right now I have over 200 writes and cowrites to music and about 120 at this level. when I finally get to the place where I can afford to really push them I will have to choose which I can push and which really need more work. I definitely get what you mean about the bridge. This was a very tough place for me to get anywhere close to "Right". I had to find a way to work into "Mommy made it through the night, and this was the best I could come up with. I have revisited it a number of times and it still is. On the last chorus, I never went back to "Mommy needs a miracle". From the bridge on is all after she got her miracle. I made sure of that. You are right, if it did go back to her needing one, the bridge and the chorus wouldn't make any sense. I have also thought about having this done by a baritone with the little girl parts being sung by a little girl to avoid any confusion. Josh Turner is going to be at a very small nightclub in the beginning of Dec. and I am putting together a package to pitch this one to him. He not only does country but he is very religious and always includes at least one Christian country song on his CD's. I think he would be a perfect fit for this. Thank you again for all the time and thought you put into this. I really do appreciate it.
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bump, elevator up so more can see it, great idea Mike
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Dear Mike, Thank you very much for the opportunity to submit our song for your consideration. Please find the enclosed song "A Soldier's Call". A Soldier's Call 2009 Becky Monnier (lyrics) and Nadia Cripps (music). Gemma Louise Edwards (vocals), Nadia Cripps (piano). The link to our song on Soundclick is http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=936270&songID=7627025and to the slide show on YouTube: http://www.youtube.com/user/NadiaComposer#p/u/2/aETJMTLo--8V1 My eyes filled up with tears When I heard them on the phone They said he was a hero But he won't be coming home I'm sorry for my selfish need To want him here with me I'm sure that where he is now Is a better place to be Chorus: In the midst of heavy fighting, someone called his name It must have been an angel; he's feeling no more pain His spirit drifts above the clouds, no more need to fight The angels came to lead him into the shining light V2 His life had much more meaning With pride in his uniform He saved the broken and bleeding And braved the enemy storm This group of men like brothers Came against a fire wall He had to save the others It was a soldier's call Chorus In the midst of heavy fighting, someone called his name It must have been an angel; he's feeling no more pain His spirit drifts above the clouds, no more need to fight The angels came to lead him into the shining light The heavens opened for him, to wait there for us all Because the angels answered this fallen soldier's call. I'm looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Nadia Cripps
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John
Your very welcome. Your right you didn't go back to the regular chorus at the end, my mistake I read it wrong on the computer scrolling up and down.
I can tell this song had a lot invested in it already I know what it's like to invest in music so I completely understand. I invested so much I had to but my own studio and I have done that on different levels three times placing me in around the $75,000 ballbark plus.
Yes Christian Country is even a more bulls eye target for this song,good thinking there. The sound I was referring to was just a bit more current radio now Country. That way it works no matter where or who you pitch it too.
Thanks for the great response, you have lots too be proud of with your songs.
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As the spouse of a "mafia daughter" I would simply submit the following..."I can't write a tune but I know where you live"...lol.
Fun one...
Lawrence Gambini-Westfall (Hey... you didn't think she was gonna take on my last name....)
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Can't find the stairway to 'heaven'...but I know where the elevator is.
Each of us has cause to think with deep gratitude of those who have lighted the flame within us" - Albert Schweitzer.
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Hi Mike,
I don't know how much new country you listen to but there are more than a few country acts out there today who put at least one Christian song on their CD's. Carrie Underwood had one called "Jesus Take The Wheel", Josh Turners last CD had one called "Long Black Train" and Randy Travis had a nice comeback hit with "Three Wooden Crosses". All of them made it into at least the top ten. It also sems like a lot of the newer country acts are going back to more of a traditional country sound, not as simple musically as it was, just in general feel. I'm glad you understand about the investment, I knew you would. The old saying about nothing ventured nothing gained is very true. I'll let you know what happens if I can get it to Josh Turner. Thanks again for your kind words.
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Mr. Knowitall Sublevel Music NYC
Dear Mr. Knowitall,
I am writing to ask permission to submit one of my songs for your review. However, before doing so, I have a question. Do you only accept material that is in the "radio quality" range, or are you open to less than professional demos? I know that you are very busy and don't want to waste your time.
Thank you and looking forward to hearing from you.
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Dear Starmaker: Enclosed please find my songwriter's demo submission. Looking forward to receiving big bag-o-money. http://www.archive.org/download/Angels_2/Angels.mp3
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Mr. Knowitall Sublevel Music NYC
Dear Mr. Knowitall,
I am writing to ask permission to submit one of my songs for your review. However, before doing so, I have a question. Do you only accept material that is in the "radio quality" range, or are you open to less than professional demos? I know that you are very busy and don't want to waste your time.
Thank you and looking forward to hearing from you.
Ricki E. Bellos Nowheresville, WI
Dear Ricki We are accepting un-solicted material until December 15th 2009 So anything you send will be accepted and listened to. The material does not have to sound radio quality to be heard it just has to be radio quality to be considered. The nerve of me too say that with 80% of what is being played on the radio today,shame on me and all my peers, "Ooops did I just say that out loud and write it?" Feel free to submit. Sincerely Mr. Knowitall Music Biz Guy
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To John Schick JPF Mp3 Boards
Dear John,
Thanks for the submission, It is regretful to me personally that jazz and instrumental music has fallen so far away from the general public. It's too bad because there missing some great music and real talent. However there still is a chart for it. Your song while wonderfully played & performed doesn't quite hit the mark and I feel wouldn't do well next to some of today's contemporary stuff.
Thanks for considering us Mr. Knowitall Jazz Guy Sublevel Music
PS- You did however mention that it wasn't mainstream, so I'm not sure why you submitted this one. Perhaps you have another you would like to submit that is. Just a bit more hook, musically,lyrically to draw us in.
Thanks again
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Example of what I would say! Michele Bolton Address, private (Can't publicize my address) Ph .............. (Private) Email: elliza1@bigpond.com.au 29th November 2009 Mike Caro Publisher Dear Mike I've pasted the lyrics, and the recorded version of "Don't push my button" on my soundclick site, for you too listen, and peruse. If you have any queries regarding this submission, please contact me on the above phone number or email address. I look forward to hearing from you, regarding my submission. Yours Faithfully Aussie girl Michele Bolton http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6211972Don't push my button Hey, don't push my button I can't take it any more Anger, tears, the sadness inside I know now I've got my pride So hey, don't push my button I won't take it any more Stronger, wiser, than ever before I won't play the victim no more.... Verse There was a time and a place I was lost and confused Young and trusting Nothing to lose Had a dream I held on for many a year Never thought I'd be shedding these tears Everyone around me seemed to move away Only feels like yesterday Weeks have turned to years It's time to put it away...... Chorus Hey, don't push my button I can't take it any more Anger, tears, the sadness inside I know now I've got my pride So hey, don't push my button I won't take it any more Stronger, wiser, than ever before I won't play the victim no more..... Verse I found a man He's here today Made me stronger in every way Helped me take some steps Enough to walk away He understands He holds me tight Helps me through the day and night Never turns away Thank God for him today.... Chorus Hey, don't push my button I can't take it any more Anger, tears, the sadness inside I know now I've got my pride So hey, don't push my button I won't take it any more Stronger, wiser than ever before And I won't play the victim no more.... Music Verse Nows the time I mean today Get up and fight Fight all the way All your anger, sadness inside I want you to take it in stride All the tears that you will cry The pain will heal it just takes time And when some one tries to hurt you I want you all to say..........Hey.......... Chorus Hey don't push my button I can't take it any more Anger, tears, the sadness inside I know now I've got my pride So, hey don't push my button I won't take it any more Stronger, wiser than ever before And I won't play the victim no more So hey...Repeat the chorus Copyrights: Lyrics/Michele Bolton Music/Paul Nunns Looks like you have a lot of work to do MIKE! You just keep this Aussie girl smiling hah. What a Treasure you are MIKE! Only one song Mike??? I have others!
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To Colin Ward JPF Mp3 Boards
Colin
Thanks for considering us, I listened to the song and I recall having heard this song submitted once before as while back. So I guess having the "Naked" in the title worked! While it is very heartfelt song and performance I feel the song would need more substance to be effective. Both lyrically and musically. Straight of the bat the first verse felt a bit awkward and the phrasing was not solid or confident. Even if something has very few words or many it needs to command some attention or emotion from the listener. It just didn't sing well. The chorus was pretty much the same, and the lyric really didn't offer to much. There simply not strong enough.
Singer/songwriters usually write there own songs, but even looking passed that here the more successful ones incorporate more depth in the song. Much more imagery and colorful words. Also they get you thinking, and get you feeling a lot musically. A word or a line, actually more than one needs to jump out and off the page. It doesn't mean it has to be a very serious song but it does have to be very effective. And even if they lack the best lyrics ever, they draw you in just as much musically.
Wish I could have been more helpful, all the best and thanks again for submitting.
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Hey Mike! You sure you weren't one of the publishers I sent to last year. Seems like I heard this reply before. I was thinking possibly an old timer like Sreisand would make a fit. Especially since Diana Krall helped produce her current CD. I'll see if I can dig up something more current; though being an old fart washed-up songwriter, probably still be forty years behind the times. Thanks Mike! Best, John
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To Joe Wrabek JPF Boards
Dear Joe.
Thanks for submitting "Un Easy Street" I enjoyed the lyrics,there were some great very fresh lines in the song. Even though personally I like the guitar and layed back feeling of the music and song I regret to say I don't think the music buying public and kids will take to it as well.
I wish I had better news, but we;ll have to pass on this one. On a quick note in any future submissions to anyone try to edit out the 30 second talking introduction.
All the best
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Hey Mike! You sure you weren't one of the publishers I sent to last year. Seems like I heard this reply before. I was thinking possibly an old timer like Sreisand would make a fit. Especially since Diana Krall helped produce her current CD. I'll see if I can dig up something more current; though being an old fart washed-up songwriter, probably still be forty years behind the times. Thanks Mike! Best, John Hi John Thanks for being a great sport. And your instrumental stuff is TOTALLY rockin! You should be getting forwards from Taxi and or someplace else, there should definitely be work for you and more stuff to smile about and be proud of. If i ever get healthy again and have money again I'm gonna reconnect with someone who I feel get get me some placements in some film things... I will NOT forget you! And if I should please feel free to remind me, really Man - 7:27 AM, time to close my eyes and try to get sleep....
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Mr. Knowitall Sublevel Music NYC Dear Mr. Knowitall, Thanks for your quick response. I appreciate your time and effort to listen to my submission. Looking forward to your reply. http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8355111NO FEAR ©Ricki E. Bellos A long lonely highway Through a desert, if I had my way I would ride out of here Soon as I could with no fear Sun's up Mercury rises Winds come Water dries Contrails appear Spell your name Then disappear The sky’s the same Blue, sky blue Your eyes blue You were a long lonely highway Pierced my desert heart, if I had my way I would’ve rode along out of here You know I would with no fear Sun's down Temperatures fall Coyotes drown The sound of all Stars align To show the way They are a sign To leave by day Blue, when the sky is blue Your eyes blue A long lonely highway Through a desert If I had my way I would ride out of here If I only could With no fear
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Dear Mr. Knowitall,
Thank you for reviewing my song and I am sorry you did not like it. It was an attempt at a more modern sounding guitar strum, but my wife does not like it either. Fortunately the dog and the teddy bear (my biggest fans) really enjoy it but alas, they do not buy CDs or even download. I guarantee you will like my next submission which I have not written yet but I know it is in there.
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Mike Knowitall Sublevel Studios New York City, N.Y.
Dear Mr. Knowitall:
Thanks you very much for your review of "Un-Easy Street," and your comments. I will take your suggestions under advisement.
I have to warn you you are probably not going to change the way I write. However, if and as I produce something that may more closely fit the parameters you described, may I send it to you? I do consider your input important, even when I'm rejecting it.
Thank you again for your insight and your help. I hope we will be able to do business in the future.
Joe Wrabek
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Hey Mike, great thread, due to the response to this song, I went and got a pro-demo done, I may have wasted my money, donno, my pitch letter would go as follows, Dear Mr Knowitall, thank you for the opportunity to submit material, enclosed are a cd and lyric sheet for the song "You Said You Love Me" for a female vocalist, thanks in advance for your time, Tony Atkinson. http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8152850You Said You Loved Me V1 Life can change on a dime And some moments seem to stretch in time Like the echo through my mind Ch When you said you love me You said you loved me Oh you love me V2 Never thought I’d be here again Where one sided love leads to pain Because I didn’t feel the same Ch When you said you love me You said you loved me Oh you love me You said you love me Said you loved me Oh you love me Br Can’t speak them anymore Been unrequited in love before For me those words are dead The words you said….. V3 The world can pass on by For those who wait on a reply So (was) it was kinder to tell a lie Ch When you said you love me You said you loved me Oh you love me You said you love me Said you loved me Oh you love me Br Words/Music by Tony Atkinson ©
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Mr Kowitall SubStudio Publishers NY, NY Mr. Knowitall, I read recently where you might have connections to the Film and TV industry regarding their musical requirements. I would like to submit the following track for your/their consideration. Any suggestions, comments, or other input you may have will be gladly accepted. I see this as a main theme for a drama movie or television show. It tries to capture the emotions of anticipation, caution and unexpected revelation. My primary history in this arena is having scored two college films in their entirety as well as more than forty years in the music business as a musician, composer and lyricist. Additional references available upon request. I also have an extensive catalogue of nearly seven-hundred original compositions in many genres, many of which are oriented to Film and Television projects. I've also had numerous Top 10 songs on the Soundclick Charts as well as a Number 1. In fact, this very composition reached #9. Thank you very much in advance. Looking forward to your reply. Wishing you continued success. Respectfully, Alan D. David, BMI dba Al David http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=276329&songID=5012149
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Nov. 29, 2009 Mike Knowitall Sublevel Music, NYC Mr. Knowitall, I am submitting this lyric and mp3 in response to your recent listing: "Publisher, Label Accepting Songs; Post Your Hit Song Submission Here" on the Just Plain Folks web site. You asked both for songs to be submitted to other artists and those that showcase the performer on the recording. I believe this singer-guitar version, while not in the proper format for mainstream commercial radio, could be submitted for movie and television performance. I also have performed the song as a mid-tempo bluegrass song, and I believe it could be adapted to a variety of styles. I would be happy to work with you to develop a different style of demo if you are interested in pitching the song to other artists. Thank you in advance for considering "Just Gotta Be Here." Richard Myers ASCAP joyboymt@lycos.com 406-555-5555 http://www.gatheringwave.com/richmyers.htmlJUST GOTTA BE HERE © 2008 Rich Myers Verse The dark fell soft like linen On the city, on the night I don't have to wait no more. I've been the bullet in the gun. I have been the dog at the door. Measured out my life in miles. I've got one eye on the ramps, One on the sky for signs. I find myself counting nickels. Find myself waiting for the dimes. (Spoken) But not tonight... (Prechorus) I don't have to answer messages On my telephone. Or call up the devil and say, "Son, won't you leave me alone?" (Chorus) I JUST GOTTA BE HERE with you tonight. Just gotta be here tonight with my baby. (Verse 2) There are lovers in their cars, In the shelter of The radios and the rolling tires. They see each other in the stars, and They think "Maybe I can, maybe I can rise higher." I don't have to trust my fate. I don't have to lie in wait or reincarnate As some beautiful, holy man. There's nothing left to contemplate, Baby, why hesitate, take my hand. (Prechorus) I won't have to chop no wood In case I grow cold. Or check on my mutual fund In case I grow old. (Chorus) I JUST GOTTA BE HERE with you tonight. Just gotta be here tonight with my baby. Chorus reprise) JUST GOTTA BE HERE with you tonight. Just gotta be here tonight with my baby.
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Hey Mike....I haven't been around lately....just was surfin' and saw this.....thought I would add another NY guy/Georgia dude song......Dennis will probably sue me...lol.....I hope to get back here again shortly.....probably know what you'll say.....happy holidays......T-Bob CLOSER TO YOU....PICKENS/CARO http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8402751 To Bob Pickens CO of Dennis Pickens JPF Mp3 Boards
Hi Robert Thanks for submitting "Closer To You" I feel I must approach this song from the "artist" aspect as well as the song aspect as Dennis is the artist and is submitting not only a song but himself in this case. First I wanted to mention that the song and whole package was very well put in place, in other words it sounded and felt exactly has is should for the genre/genre's it's targeted for. Great match of vocal, sound and style with music, playing performance and overall production. As a matter of fact the demo is very near Broadcast Quality, with a bit more tweaking mix & mastering wise it is BQ. Within five seconds I could tell Dennis had made a serious commitment to his music and career. The song is good, there are hooks and emotion in both the words and the melody and also hooks in the music, music, bass lines and rhythm section. You would not believe how many writers do not give much attention to the rhythms of there songs. It is easy to sing, memorable, emotional and well arranged. That is where the strengths of the song lied, I did notice that it didn't really have a lot of zip or substance lyrically, not that is wasn't well written but it's content. It was relying heavy on personal emotions more than a unique way of saying something common or use of imagery,more interesting. More a mixed bag of lyrics so to speak. Allow me to use other artists as an example to explain the level and place for this song. I have heard and seen Hootie & The Blowfish a few years ago. They had top charted hits with songs that did not have anything lyrically or musically better than this song has. Now this is not what your gonna ever hear someone you submit songs to from a high end company talk about. They'll say NO to your song but won't say "yeah I know a song we did say yes to wasn't any greater than this one we're saying No too" That is what many writers,artist's,bands, etc... who reach a certain level of quality have the hardest time dealing with. Back to the song, if this was Hootie this song becomes a hit or semi successful song, depending on what they decide to push of the CD and in what order. The lyrics here aren't saying anything very new or fresh but neither was "It's crazy but it's true "I Only Wanna Be With You" But that's partly a case of who get's lucky and the breaks and who doesn't. This song like many of there's would do well in concert with the fans as well. I still don't feel it is a "Break Through Song" really but can see it doing fine after the artist broke through. Certainly an album cut with a possibility of a late single release. The Artist - Again the tone and style Dennis has is very contemporary and soft and pleasant to the ears. My main nit would be, lack of dynamics vocally, While he sang with heart there was very little dynamic here or range. The double bass powerful bridge and final chorus flowed and built up musically fine but the vocal didn't quite deliver. He seems to stay at the same level and intensity from the first line until the last pretty much. As with any artist I would like to hear a 3 song package of Dennis to see if what I just said is a constant throughout his material and what other songs he might have. I feel Dennis is definitely good enough to be given the chance to play some other songs for us and see what we think from there. Please submit another song at your earliest convenience. Use the code 1864 when submitting this way it will come straight to me and put on top of the pile. Very close guys! Keep at this! Thanks Mr Knowitall Sublevel Music NYC
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To Steven Rieck JPF Mp3 Boards
Steven, Thanks for considering us, I listened to "Good Luck With That" and thought it had some very clever and unique lyrics. I also enjoyed it's laid back feel and style. I can certainly here beyond production,performance of a song in a demo and hear "the song" However I would never count on anybody else to. Not that it was bad, but the vocal was a bit too shaky and didn't aid in the songs appeal. Always try to get the best performance and sound available to you when submitting. I apologize for seeming so direct but perception and first impression is huge in pretty much anything. While there were great lines to this story, I never really caught an impact from it. This was probably mostly to do with the music overall, never really got deeply hooked in anywhere including the chorus. While the lyric was very well crafted it never really nailed the "yes I feel like that, or that happened to me" or gave the oh yeah" kind of response. It may have been a bit too smart, if you can see what I mean, and all the clever lines didn't pay off by the chorus or by the end. But still overall the final snag is the musical direction would not fair well with the current market. I really can appreciate the crafting and work that went into this though. Thank you Mr Knowitall Sublevel Music NYC
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Dear Mr. Knowital Mike, I will only waste our time in your reading this thank you, for I know I don't have any hit songs for today's market in any genre, but only songs that some general baby boomers would perhaps like to hear. But, with saying that, they may not spend anything to get them if not available for free online. Also, being 56,, (even older than you!), I doubt I or our band would look right on camera or video for selling to anyone who can otherwise see someone in their twenties or early thirties, playing similar, yet even more updated baby boomer like music. So really, just a note to say thanks anyway! Thanks! John PS, Besides, I really "Don't Want To Be Famous", haven't your heard already?! LOL Dear John I understand the band thing. There is no age limit for a songwriter unless a songwriter writes his age. Mr Master Poe Sublevel Music NYC & Shaolin
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Mr. Knowitall....I'm Dennis Picken's Dad....so of course everything he does is great to me...lol....he will tell you I will tell him when I think something he does "sucks".....lol ...true...so your outside opinion means more to me then you know...especially do to your "pro" background and talent.......
Everything you said is so right on the money, about Dennis and the song....
His songs are simple lyric wise....two that come to mind..."Baby It's You" and "Make Me Say"....are so simple....but yet to me would be hits....they are always well recieved by the public.....
We were sitting around Saturday...listening to some guy from New York....Staten Island I believe....he has a video on there called something about "Brookyln".....WOW.... the guy is great...we were in awe of the guy.....our first thoughts were Why isn't this a hit record?.....He needs a "break"...this guy can't get that song published?....what's wrong with the music industry?....just not connected enough?....although your Italian ancestory, I know your connected in other ways....lol.....my Aunt is too....lol....man can she cook....lol....maybe that's it.....we take up cooking....lol...Italian food....bring down South....
Didn't mean to get foolish....lol...thanks for the review....I've told you before that our family....Dennis, Steve and I think the world of you...one day we will show up at your door....we really would like to meet you in person....and jam out....My Sis still lives near by you....it'll happen.....
What really enhances this song and other songs is the music...the music takes it to another level....Dennis was telling me a story about you playing this killer bass line over the phone to him...he said it was awesome.....
Take care my friend....we are always thinking about you....T-Bob
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