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Hi All,

Been a bit lax for August. Here is something I have had for a while, see what you think of it.

Cheers

Alan

I'll Be Here

Don't say another word
I understand the scene
Don't think I won't be down
Or wonder where you'll be

You said you needed time
To find out who you are
You don't know how long you'll be
How near or how far

Always remember nothing is ever lost
Always know that whatever, whatever the cost

ch
I'll Be Here
No matter how much time goes by
When you've gone full circle
I'll be at the finish line

When you're coming back
Back to the start
Know that there's always been
A space for you right here in my heart
I'll be here


I know why you're going
Hope it's what you need
Send me emails
You know I love to read

About what you're doing
Makes me feel I'm there
But I'll keep on hoping
That you know I really care

I'll look at the sky and know you're some place else
Maybe wishing on the same star don't think you're by yourself

ch
I'll Be Here
No matter how much time goes by
When you've gone full circle
I'll be at the finish line

When you're coming back
Back to the start
Know that there's always been
A space for you right here in my heart
I'll be here

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Your thoughts have been distant
Your heart's telling you to go
I know it's not easy
That's why I want you to know

ch
I'll Be Here
No matter how much time goes by
When you've gone full circle
I'll be at the finish line

When you're coming back
Back to the start
Know that there's always been
A space for you right here in my heart
I'll be here

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Nice thought here, but in the majority of cases the person who is left behind when the other decides that he/she needs space usually moves on and finds another.

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I like this :-)

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Hi beech and hi Sparrow,

Thanks for taking the time to read it.

Understand what you mean, and is true. I was maybe thinking of that time when that person is leaving when we think we will wait for them, rather than down the road, if that makes sense. Maybe it is not so clear as to the moment, that of before or during the planning of leaving.

Am I complicating this more? wink

But thanks for taking the time

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This was my take on the meaning of the particular lyric. Most of the time when one posts a lyric the feedback they desire is what the meaning should interpret, at least that is my take on it. In writing I believe there are no real right or wrong answers, just what comes from the heart and soul.

Peace,
Brian

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Hi Brian

Thanks for taking the time to look, and for your thoughts. I am always grateful for people's views and thoughts and to see if it is all clear or could be improved in anyway. I am thinking now maybe somewhere it is good to point out that it is that moment before someone goes, make it clear, cos you are right when you ask do people really wait. Might even be a song idea in that: the person who thought they would wait and isn't.

Cheers

Alan

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hi Alan..this is a good write, I`ve always believed in setting things free..thats a tough thing to do sometimes. and I think there are a few who will wait, or save that little space for someone no matter what. have a great night..Lane



"Blessed are the words of truth and fiction,
one might save you from the other...Vincent
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Thanks for taking a look Lane and for the comments. I think in the end people will always save that space for someone. Or maybe thats just the romantic in me.

Cheers

Alan

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I have a hard time getting the Jackson Five melody out of my head when trying to read this. smile

It's a bit long with maybe too much repetition. You seem to be saying the same thing over and over, only changing the wording. The bridge especially, should bring something unique to a song, not only musically but lyrically as well.

I'd go through this and see where you can trim. Less can sometimes yield more.

Good luck with this.

Jonie

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hi spidey
how about

"Don't think I won't feel down"

"This space for you in my heart"

and perhaps your "difference" in the second half is to write about people who don't wait, and just move on regardless, but when it Love, as the singer is feeling, he WILL wait!

(I wrote a song with the same title-ha! about 20 years ago, and the singer is still waiting--gad!)

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Hi Jonie, Annie,

Thank you both for taking the time to look and comment on the lyric. I am re-thinking this song, maybe look at the structure and ideas in it, and will get back on with mark 2 once I have looked at it.

Cheers

Alan


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