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This is just one that I've been playing around with for a few days.I know that it needs much work.This hook just seemed go great to me that I'm almost certain that it has to have been used many times before,but nothing shows up when I google it.Please let me know if any of you have seen this hook used before in a popular song.....I really dont want to continue to put much more into it if it has,as it would seem that any song using this hook would have to be similar in content...


My Miss Everything (C)2009 Michelle Chapman

vs
first thing in the morning
a tangled bed head mess
she's pretty as a picture
in that old blue cotton dress
smiles while flipping burgers
makes me feel like i'm a king
a former Miss Kentucky
She's my Miss Everything

chorus
she's my miss america
she heads up our pta
she makes our house a home
teaches our children how to pray
i love to watch her work,
i dont want to miss a thing
i wanna shower her with roses....
my miss everything....my miss everything

vs
faithful to a fool like me
that woman deserves a crown
she's perfect in that bikini
or a flowing ballroom gown
She's the one I chose,
to wear my wedding ring
prettier than any picture
she's my miss everything

chorus
she's my miss america
she heads up our pta
she makes our house a home
teaches our children how to pray
i love to watch her work,
i dont want to miss a thing
i wanna shower her with roses....
my miss everything....my miss everything


Bridge
She is my very universe,I could never live without her
If Miss everything was to go away,I'd miss everything about her


chorus
she's my miss america
she heads up our pta
she makes our house a home
teaches our children how to pray
i love to watch her work,
i dont want to miss a thing
i wanna shower her with roses....
my miss everything....my miss everything

Michelle,
I especially likes the bridge.

It sings traditional country to me,for sure!

Geneva

Thanks for reading this Geneva.They usually start out a different genre but somehow they all end up country....Thanks for the the compliment.
Michelle

Michelle, Hi girl. I like this, and the use of pagentry throughout.. maybe, not sure, you may have used Miss Everything a bit too often, being in every verse, chorus and bridge.. other than that, very nice:) Kimberly

Michelle,
I too loved that bridge, the whole lyric was written quite well. Take care and keep writing.
Patti

Hi Kimberly,
Thanks for reading it and I always appreciate your compliments.I was wondering that too( about using the hook too much,i'm not sure)...but thanks for the help.
Michelle

Hi Patti,
Thank you so much.I'm really curious about this hook though?It seems vaguely familiar to me,or something.I hope someone might know if its been used in the same way before....
Michelle

Hey Michelle,
The hook didn't ring any bells for me as having been used and I didn't bring it up either
I don't really find much to nit
The only place I would question the use of the hook in the bridge
The hook is seldom used in the bridge though I'm sure people will come up with cases where it has been Especially in this case I think it might be overkill.
Possibility
Bridge
She is my very universe,I could never live without her
If SHE was to go away,I'd miss everything about her

That way you'd be PLAYING OFF the hook but not using it as such.
KOS though
A good write
Wy

Michelle,
It sounds familiar in a way but I can't say I've heard it before. I think I've said that to my daughter (once or twice)lol.
I believe in originality, but the melody and lyrics can change everything. Can't wait to see your final product. It should be what you imagined it to be. Good Luck
Patti

Hi Wy,
Thanks for the help.I will consider your suggestions for changing the bridge a bit......I appreciate you taking time to read this.
Michelle

Hi Patti,
It still seems very familiar to me also.I really want to investigate further before trying to add music.I have a feeling that if this hook has been used in this way before,that it would almost have to be very similar to this...maybe not,but it seems very possible.Thanks for the commenting Patti.It means alot to me.
Michelle

Hi there Michelle,

I just had to come by to tell you that I really love this title and you have done a great job with the concept and the lyrics!

I had never heard it before.....and noticed you asked....so I too "googled" it...(I typed in "Miss Everything").....and here is what I found:

http://www.lyrics007.com/Alex%20Lyrics/Miss%20Everything%20(Dear%20Mother)%20Lyrics.html

If you do decide to run with this... I do agree with Wymans' suggestion for the bridge....I love what he came up with! ( He is so smart and helpful, isn't he?!)

Michelle, in my opinion, the other area that I would work on....is in your first verse...where you have her "getting up"...and a couple of lines later mention she's "flipping burgers"....I just feel it would be better to say she's "flipping pancakes"......or "making breakfast". Hope this helps.....

Good luck with this song Michelle.

Kind wishes,
Gail

Michelle,
I went to the website above and read it. I don't personally think you should change it as long as it's original and different. Some may disagree though. Someone could also write a lyric saying "I miss everything". Completely different concept but similar title.
Patti

Hi again Michelle,

Yes.....I totally agree.....while it's always best if you can come up with an original title.....sometimes you write a lyric, and then find there are others out there with the same or similar titles.....and while that's o.k......(I do feel it is always better if you can come up with a really unique title and hook).....but the main thing you have to make sure of ..... is that your lyric content is not the same!

Michelle you came up with a great idea, and you have written a great lyric around that and I feel it has lots of potential.

Like I said, to the best of my knowledge I had not heard it used in a song before....but, I saw that you wanted to make sure before you worked on this further, and I know I would be the same way. When I come up with a title idea.....I know I always google it too. So.........as far as I can tell Michelle....I think you're safe(!).....because even though this title is close....the content is not.... you might want to check a little further, that is all I could find for 'ya though.

Gail

There are NO titles out there that haven't been taken. I wouldn't worry about it, as long as the lyrics are different.

Of course, I wouldn't write a song with the title "A Hard Day's Night", but as long as the title is rather unknown, it doesn't matter.

Kevin

http://repertoire.bmi.com/TitleSear...p;blnArtist=False&blnAltTitles=False

Hi Michele

bmi has 5 listings of a published 'miss everything' none on ascap

very small number - really

Some titles have hundreds of songs by that title.
I've had several titles that I didn't find on BMI or ASCAP or even by Googling it. But that doesn't mean that someone, somewhere hasn't written a song by that name.
Like Kevin said, if it's not a "Well known" title, don't worry about it. Titles aren't copyrightable.
Wy

Hi Gail and Patti,
I just wanted to thank you both again for taking the time to check into this for me.I was hoping that it hadnt been a hit for Brad Paisley or something like that,and it doesnt appear that it has.Thank you both for looking out for me and being so helpful.
Michelle

Hi Kevin,
Thanks for checking in on this.It does seem to appear that their havent been any major hits using this hook so I'm gonna go ahead with it and see what happens.
Michelle

Joice Marie,

Thanks for checking into that for me Joice.I really appreciate it.I recieved a pm from JMSocia and he's going to work on some music for me.I'm very excited.I've heard some of his collabs here and he is very talented.I cant wait to see what he does with it.....
Michelle