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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Well, here is another one that Charles Kirkland has his name on. Thats what happens when you've good the goods. lol. http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7237318Blue Collar Land By Roy Harris and Charles Kirkland Vocal: Charles Kirkland Well the market is going crazy They’re bailing out the banks Talking about the economy How it is going down the tank Corporate has their hand out Wanting some of that government money They spend it like it grows on trees Let me tell you now this ain’t funny Chorus Cause out here in blue collar land….. I’m trying to make ends meet Working all the overtime I can My wife works as a waitress Trying to lend a helping hand To this middle class working man Out here…… In blue collar land Jobs are falling by the wayside They’re being sent overseas They’re eating prime rib in Washington While they knock us to our knees They think they know all the answers But I don’t think they understand This country would go down the tube If it weren’t for blue collar land Repeat chorus Bridge When the well runs dry and the money’s all gone They’ll be marching to a different band Maybe they’ll be joining us soon Out here in blue collar land Repeat chorus
Last edited by Roy Harris; 01/16/09 04:29 PM.
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Roy you did a really good job on that song. It is a very catchy tune with a nice hook.
wonderful job, a pleasure to listen
Dan
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Hey Roy, You beat me to it...lol. I just coppied the url to this song and was about to post it. Glad you got it posted. Thanks for another great set of lyrics and letting me help with this one.
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Oops, sorry Charles. If I had known I would have waited. Anyway, thanks for doing this. If it gets any worse, this may be our national anthem. Now, if we could just get George Strait to record it. lol.
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Good one Roy/Charles.. timely too
http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
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Hi Roy,
I thought your lyric was very good, maybe a little edgy for Nashville, but that's good, imo...
Your demo is pretty rough to my ears (vocals a bit pitchy in spots, when the guitarist plays a G Major chord, it sounds out of tune to me), but the song itself is fine. Add some harmonies in the chorus , maybe a nice Hammond organ sound, and we're talkin'...
--Mike
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon) from the song "Songs of Love" from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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Mike, Thanks for taking a listen and the comments. I don't think Nashville would give this one a chance. A shame, because the message needs to be put out there. I don't know what your hearing on the tuning. That is one of my pet peeves. I tune before ever recording and then again afterwards to make sure it is still in tune. If it goes up or down even a few cents, I re-record that track. I also make sure every guitar used is tuned with the same tuner. This is somewhat still a work in progress, and we are thinking of re-doing the chorus to give it a more general approach to the situation instead of a personal one. I agree it needs some harmonies, but I don't have the resources or the ability to do it myself. Hammond organ would be nice too. I tried some different leads, but was not happy with any of them, so decided to leave them out. I may try something else though. Thanks again for the input.
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Hi Roy,
Great workingman's anthem. Nobody does these song over here anymore, as the unions have failed, and people were getting way too rich after some golden years. So nobody seem to care anymore.
At the moment we loose 1000s of jobs monthly in Denmark too (thats a lot with only 5 million people), and we don't know where they are going either?? I think China is the 'winner' in the 'globalization' this time, as they are producing crappy plastic toys that are about to kill our kids with foul chemistry, like never before!
While listening I thought the first verse did not sing as easily as the rest of the song, mainly because of the words 'economy' and 'government' - don't know if you can find any alternatives that sings better, but thats the only nits I'd found.
We want these songs back on the radio!
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Magne, Thanks for the listen and the comments. Very much appreciated. We did a re-write on the chorus. Trying to improve the song. http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7237318 Blue Collar Land By Roy Harris and Charles Kirkland Vocal: Charles Kirkland Well the market is going crazy They’re bailing out the banks Talking about the economy How it is going down the tank Corporate has their hand out Wanting some of that government money They spend it like it grows on trees Let me tell you now this ain’t funny Chorus Cause out here in blue collar land….. I’m trying to make ends meet Working all the overtime I can Why can’t they see the pain it’s causing When will they understand We sure could use a helping hand Out here…… In blue collar land Jobs are falling by the wayside They’re being sent overseas They’re eating prime rib in Washington While they knock us to our knees They think they know all the answers But I don’t think they understand This country would go down the tube If it weren’t for blue collar land Repeat chorus Bridge When the well runs dry and the money’s all gone They’ll be marching to a different band Maybe they’ll be joining us soon Out here in blue collar land Repeat chorus
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Hi Charles,
I think it works even better in the rewrite. I hear you've tightened the meter up a little, and it works great.
Just a few clean up suggestions to make it sing better:
Blue Collar Land By Roy Harris and Charles Kirkland Vocal: Charles Kirkland
* Well the market is acting crazy They’re bailing out the banks * Talking about economy How it is going down the tank Corporate has their hand out Wanting some of that government money They spend it like it grows on trees Let me tell you now this ain’t funny
Chorus Cause out here in blue collar land….. I’m trying to make ends meet Working all the overtime I can Why can’t they see the pain it’s causing * Will they understand We sure could use a helping hand Out here…… In blue collar land
Jobs are falling by the wayside They’re being sent overseas * They’re eating prime rib in Washington (You could make this more global, by finding a synonym for 'Washington') While they knock us to our knees They think they know all the answers But I don’t think they understand This country would go down the tube * If not for blue collar land
Repeat chorus
Bridge When the well runs dry and the money’s all gone * They’ll be marching to a different band (This line is an opportunity to make a good point – I think you can make it stronger) Maybe they’ll be joining us soon Out here in blue collar land
Just some thoughts. Best of luck with this. I think a lot of families will relate to this in the States and elsewhere in the world.
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