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#574008 - 01/09/08 06:37 PM Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title  
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I'm a little afraid the title might put some people off - but I can't think what else to call it.


Bring A Leash
©2007 MIKE PARRISH

Verse 1
Since I couldnít find a boyfriend
I gave Match Mate Dot Com a try
Didnít like the macho photoís
And all the ďIím an awesome guyĒ
Then I saw your simple picture
You made it clear that you werenít proud
As I viewed your modest profile
It got me laughing right out loud

Chorus Ė It Read
ďBring a leash, and drag this dog out of here
I donít smoke, but sometimes Iíll have a beer
Iím not dumb, but Iím not a college man
Got a farm, where Iíve learned to work the land
Hair is blonde, but itís kind of mostly gone
In my truck, itís Country when the musicís on
Iím not old, but Iím getting on in years
Bring a leash, and drag this dog out of hereĒ

Verse 2
So I sent my plain old profile
And Said ď I think you are like meĒ
In what seemed like only seconds
You wrote me back that you agreed
When I met you for our first date
I pulled a leash out of my coat
Said ď Iím gonna drag you out of here
And hold you to these words you wroteĒ

Repeat chorus

Bridge
And now Iím getting married to the most flawless man I know
I donít need a kennel club to tell me whoís the ďBest In ShowĒ

Repeat chorus

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Bring A Leash


#574009 - 01/09/08 06:46 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Mike Parrish]  
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Hi Py,

You got me giggling here. And I think this is gonna be good. Although I did wonder about the "dragging" part. Can you make him a little more spunky? How about...

Pull this puppy outta here? Give him a young spirit so he'll really hook 'em.

Oh, and for the hair part---I like it that he's losing his hair. But this is what seemed to flow smoother to me

Hair is blonde, but itís mostly kinda gone

Gotta go tend to something.

Good to 'see' you.

Vanessa


#574010 - 01/09/08 06:47 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Mike Parrish]  
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Py,

This is some awesome country writing....like it so much. The name of this one should be....OUT OF HERE for sure. If that one hit the airways...it would hit the charts and be OUT OF HERE.

Love it...Jan

#574017 - 01/09/08 07:14 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Janice Hopkins]  
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Py,

That's good! Great alternate angle lyric, and a killer of a bridge. Excellent work.

Keep writing.

Skip

P.S. Your hook/title is "Bring a Leash". That is both the repeated line at the beginning and end of your chorus, and also a vivid enough image that it will stick in the listener's mind. I think you're right going with that.

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#574019 - 01/09/08 07:22 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Skip Johnson]  
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#574022 - 01/09/08 07:26 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Skip Johnson]  
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Thanks Vanessa - I like your blonde hair change - I treid different ways to say that - but couldn't get it right.

Thanks Janice - Out of Here is good - I was afraid Bring a Leash might give the wrong idea.

Thanks skip - I stuggled with the bridge and thought this one up on the way to work today.


#574024 - 01/09/08 07:29 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Mike Parrish]  
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Oh, and Py, I should have also made sure to tell you that my giggling meant I REALLY liked this one. It's a charmer for sure.

Vanessa

#574025 - 01/09/08 07:29 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Mike Parrish]  
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Thanks for stopping by Kenny

#574034 - 01/09/08 08:04 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Mike Parrish]  
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Thanks Vanessa - always like to charm those Mississippi girls - seems like you are from there - if I haven't gotten you confused with someone else. Congrats on the National Championship - Alabama is coming back - with the help of your old coach.

#574053 - 01/09/08 08:53 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Mike Parrish]  
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Hey Py, I couldn't help messin' with this to see what it would sound like from the guy's POV. If it's from the guy's POV I think the "dragging" part works.

Bring A Leash
©2007 MIKE PARRISH

Verse 1
Since SHE DIDN'T HAVE a boyfriend
SHE gave Match Mate Dot Com a try
BUT SHE Didnít like the macho photos
And all the ďIím YOUR/OH SO awesome guySĒ
Then SHE saw MY simple picture
Made it clear I werenít TOO proud
As SHE viewed MY modest profile
It HAD HER laughing right out loud

Chorus Ė It Read
ďBring a leash, and drag this dog ON out of here
I donít smoke, but sometimes Iíll have a beer
Iím not dumb, but Iím not a college man
Got a farm, where Iíve learned to work the land
Hair is blonde, but itís kind of mostly gone
In my truck, itís Country when the musicís on
Iím not old, but Iím getting on in years
Bring a leash, and drag this dog out of hereĒ

Verse 2
So SHE sent HER SIMPLE profile
Said ďI think you'RE JUST FOR meĒ
I DIDN'T WASTE a MIN---UTE
Wrote RIGHT back that I agreed
When SHE met ME for our first date
SHE pulled a leash out of HER coat
Said ď Iím gonna drag you out of here
And hold you to these words you wroteĒ

Repeat chorus

Bridge
SHE SAID, Iím IN LOVE WITH the most flawless man I know
I donít need a kennel club to tell me whoís the ďBest In ShowĒ

Repeat chorus

Tag
Bring A Leash

#574299 - 01/10/08 11:22 AM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: bailey bridges]  
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Thanks Vanessa - I'll have to study this some. It's hard for me to hear a guy singing it - but changing it like this does open it up to be uni-sexed. There is something self serving if a guy sings it though.

#574300 - 01/10/08 11:42 AM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Mike Parrish]  
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Hi Py,

Thanks for the kind words for LSU. That's my husbands stomping grounds over there. And I've just begun to start learning about football (for the sake of my family) so I think you're saying that Alabama has got a former coach of LSU? Or Mississipi State? Seems I do recall Steve mentioning that Alabama had one of LSU's former coaches. I guess LSU helps soften the blow left each year by the Saints. grin But it's dem Coyboys that I know more about than any of 'em. (course that ain't much <g>)

Ok, back to the song. I figured you didn't want the singer to sound like he's bragging. And usually I detest any form of that but in this case, it works. The chorus is the longest part and is repeated a couple times at least. That's the part I don't hear a gal being able to pull off. I'd rather hear that part coming from the main character. She's the narrator still I think even if it's from the male POV. She still gets to put her slant to it so he's not bragging on himself. And if there is any doubt about that the chorus would certainly redeem that imo.

It's your song though. Thanks for letting me practice some with POVs. It was fun.

I'll post a song later about all the places I'm from. Gotta find it first. But, yes I was born in Mississippi and my roots are still there. But Texas got my heart and I don't know what Alabama has yet---but I've been here 20 years.

Keep writing and posting,
Vanessa

#574302 - 01/10/08 12:00 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: bailey bridges]  
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I think it can work - I'm up for it. After I write the lyrics I'm done though - I can't do music. I'm a Dallas Songwriter Association member - remote - GA/AL. Good luck to the Cowboys this weekend.

#574463 - 01/10/08 09:18 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Mike Parrish]  
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Howdy Mike!

You made me laugh! A good one! smile

Ok, off the topic... I once saw an add in the personals (back when there was a thing called a newspaper)that read something like:
Vile, disgruntled ogre seeks ugly, toothless shrew for bitter daytime arguments

Also made me laugh...

Best o' luck with it!

"Uncle" Chuck

#574758 - 01/11/08 04:36 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Chuck Crowe]  
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Chuck thanks - that's funny because I got the idea from a classified add in the Tuscaloosa News back in the late seventies - it was for something like a 1967 cadillac - it said - power windows - don't work - power locks - don't work - Ac - doesn't work - bring a leash and drag this dog out of here. I hadn't thought of it in years until the other day and this idea popped in my head. The newspapar is a great source for ideas I think - even if there is a 30 year delay.

#574791 - 01/11/08 07:07 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Mike Parrish]  
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Hi Mike,

I think this is the first of yours I've commented on, I'm not sure. This is great. There ain't many men out there would admit their supposed failings like this. I can see how a woman would really go for the truth in it. This one deserves music and a decent demo. Good luck with it.


Have a goodun,

John W. Selleck BMI Songwriter
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#574970 - 01/12/08 12:02 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: John W. Selleck]  
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Thanks John - I'd love for you to write the music. It's on a different the spectrium from Assisted Living Chior.

#574973 - 01/12/08 12:18 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: Mike Parrish]  
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Hi Mike,

I'm terrible with names, I didn't even pick it up after I had written it. Let's see how the first one goes. And yes, a whole different kind of song, but both well written.


Have a goodun,

John W. Selleck BMI Songwriter
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#575115 - 01/12/08 10:31 PM Re: Light hearted girls country song - not sure about title [Re: John W. Selleck]  
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john that's ok i was prouder you like it and didn't realize it was me.

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