Verse 1 Since I couldnít find a boyfriend I gave Match Mate Dot Com a try Didnít like the macho photoís And all the ďIím an awesome guyĒ Then I saw your simple picture You made it clear that you werenít proud As I viewed your modest profile It got me laughing right out loud
Chorus Ė It Read ďBring a leash, and drag this dog out of here I donít smoke, but sometimes Iíll have a beer Iím not dumb, but Iím not a college man Got a farm, where Iíve learned to work the land Hair is blonde, but itís kind of mostly gone In my truck, itís Country when the musicís on Iím not old, but Iím getting on in years Bring a leash, and drag this dog out of hereĒ
Verse 2 So I sent my plain old profile And Said ď I think you are like meĒ In what seemed like only seconds You wrote me back that you agreed When I met you for our first date I pulled a leash out of my coat Said ď Iím gonna drag you out of here And hold you to these words you wroteĒ
Bridge And now Iím getting married to the most flawless man I know I donít need a kennel club to tell me whoís the ďBest In ShowĒ
That's good! Great alternate angle lyric, and a killer of a bridge. Excellent work.
P.S. Your hook/title is "Bring a Leash". That is both the repeated line at the beginning and end of your chorus, and also a vivid enough image that it will stick in the listener's mind. I think you're right going with that.
Thanks Vanessa - always like to charm those Mississippi girls - seems like you are from there - if I haven't gotten you confused with someone else. Congrats on the National Championship - Alabama is coming back - with the help of your old coach.
Verse 1 Since SHE DIDN'T HAVE a boyfriend SHE gave Match Mate Dot Com a try BUT SHE Didnít like the macho photos And all the ďIím YOUR/OH SO awesome guySĒ Then SHE saw MY simple picture Made it clear I werenít TOO proud As SHE viewed MY modest profile It HAD HER laughing right out loud
Chorus Ė It Read ďBring a leash, and drag this dog ON out of here I donít smoke, but sometimes Iíll have a beer Iím not dumb, but Iím not a college man Got a farm, where Iíve learned to work the land Hair is blonde, but itís kind of mostly gone In my truck, itís Country when the musicís on Iím not old, but Iím getting on in years Bring a leash, and drag this dog out of hereĒ
Verse 2 So SHE sent HER SIMPLE profile Said ďI think you'RE JUST FOR meĒ I DIDN'T WASTE a MIN---UTE Wrote RIGHT back that I agreed When SHE met ME for our first date SHE pulled a leash out of HER coat Said ď Iím gonna drag you out of here And hold you to these words you wroteĒ
Bridge SHE SAID, Iím IN LOVE WITH the most flawless man I know I donít need a kennel club to tell me whoís the ďBest In ShowĒ
Thanks Vanessa - I'll have to study this some. It's hard for me to hear a guy singing it - but changing it like this does open it up to be uni-sexed. There is something self serving if a guy sings it though.
Thanks for the kind words for LSU. That's my husbands stomping grounds over there. And I've just begun to start learning about football (for the sake of my family) so I think you're saying that Alabama has got a former coach of LSU? Or Mississipi State? Seems I do recall Steve mentioning that Alabama had one of LSU's former coaches. I guess LSU helps soften the blow left each year by the Saints. But it's dem Coyboys that I know more about than any of 'em. (course that ain't much <g>)
Ok, back to the song. I figured you didn't want the singer to sound like he's bragging. And usually I detest any form of that but in this case, it works. The chorus is the longest part and is repeated a couple times at least. That's the part I don't hear a gal being able to pull off. I'd rather hear that part coming from the main character. She's the narrator still I think even if it's from the male POV. She still gets to put her slant to it so he's not bragging on himself. And if there is any doubt about that the chorus would certainly redeem that imo.
It's your song though. Thanks for letting me practice some with POVs. It was fun.
I'll post a song later about all the places I'm from. Gotta find it first. But, yes I was born in Mississippi and my roots are still there. But Texas got my heart and I don't know what Alabama has yet---but I've been here 20 years.
Ok, off the topic... I once saw an add in the personals (back when there was a thing called a newspaper)that read something like: Vile, disgruntled ogre seeks ugly, toothless shrew for bitter daytime arguments
Chuck thanks - that's funny because I got the idea from a classified add in the Tuscaloosa News back in the late seventies - it was for something like a 1967 cadillac - it said - power windows - don't work - power locks - don't work - Ac - doesn't work - bring a leash and drag this dog out of here. I hadn't thought of it in years until the other day and this idea popped in my head. The newspapar is a great source for ideas I think - even if there is a 30 year delay.
I think this is the first of yours I've commented on, I'm not sure. This is great. There ain't many men out there would admit their supposed failings like this. I can see how a woman would really go for the truth in it. This one deserves music and a decent demo. Good luck with it.
Have a goodun,
John W. Selleck BMI Songwriter A day without learning is a day lost forever.