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Here's another very rough scratch demo. I'd appreciate alot of feedback...and please ignore the "bump bump" in the song. Just directing the horns smile I'm still working on it. Thanks.

ACTING CRAZY
Copyright Roxy Cain
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(verse)
You don't need me to explain nothing
You act like you never understood
Well you did me wrong, left me alone and the thrill is gone baby
I took that long as I could

Get back, back, don't need you to hold me now
I use to want you bad but that't all in the past
See I gave you all of me and tried to make you see without r-e-s-p-e-c-t
What I felt, it just couldn't last

(chorus)
So, why are you acting crazy
Keep doing what you always did before
I'm not important baby
Remember you said so
Why are you acting crazy
You said if I don't like it hit the door
I thought I was your baby
But now you reap what you sow

(verse)
I ain't discussing nothing
Now you wanna talk and you say your love is oh so strong
You wanna reminisce, you say it's me you miss, well
I'll leave you with this, you had my love for years
But now it's gone, gone, love is…

You're acting crazy baby

(bridge)
Baby ain't this crazy
Remember how I cried and you walked away
I didn't understand that
Why do your baby that way

(back to verse 2)



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Like this a lot Roxy. Read your bio and liked that too.
Good to see you got the sound happening.
It is a sound that should be heard.
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Thank you Graham. Love that harmonica!

Roxy
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Hi smile

Not my thing but great voice nice sound.

Cheers





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I appreciate you listening Noel. Thanks.

Roxy
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Roxy.....I'm old time country, but I absolutely love this sound. I'm dancin' all over the bedroom here.
That Barry White ghost in there melts my heart.
Do it again, Girl.

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LOL !!! That is so funny. That Barry White ghost is my brother. smile Thanks for listening.

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I'm bumping this cause it needs some more attention. Bump.

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I've had a few people that listened but not many comments. I need more feedback on this one.

Roxy
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Roxy,
Very funky, I liked it. You have a nice voice too, perfect for this sort of song. The only suggestion that I have is to accentuate the hook. I'm not completely sure how, but maybe you could stretch it out longer. Just something a little more pronounced on "Why you keep acting crazy" to get it stuck in people's heads. Well done.

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Thanks for your feedback JD. I was thinking the same thing about the hook. I'm glad you like it.

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Dig it, Roxy smile

Can't offer any suggestions as it is too removed from what I know - but I dig it!

I even liked the talking at the beginning and end. And your brother adds a very nice touch.

Very cool.....

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Thank you Scott for listening. Music is music. If you liked it even though it's not your thing I must be going in the right direction for that genre atleast smile

Roxy
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Hi Roxy,

You can tell by what I write that it's mostly country, and some gospel. But, I really apreciate any music that isn't about hate. I really like this one. I think you tried your wings, and it works. Keep pushing the envelope. Get this one out there.


Have a goodun,

John W. Selleck BMI Songwriter
A day without learning is a day lost forever.

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John, you are so encouraging. smile Thanks for your feedback. I'll keep on pushing.

Roxy
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Hey Roxy

Really like the sound of this and it is no way my style. Your vocals were great and the guitar was nice and funky liked that a lot. what a Fun song very pitchable in my opinion to the right people.
Sincerely
Derek


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Derek I'm glad you like this one. Music is music to me...regardless of the genre. I like any kind, just kind of lean toward 3 or 4 specific ones. Thanks for your comments.

Roxy
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Roxy, this is the kind of music I grew up on. Love it. You've got some cliches in the lyrics.....like reap what you sow, that could be changed lyrically to something different. The sound needs to stay just like it is. You have a great voice. Welcome to the boards. You rock.


"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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By the way, we are having the Red River Revel Music Conference in Shreveport, LA that begins Sept 29th and runs through Oct 6th. There is an open mic/songwriter session from 7:30 PM to 9 PM onstage behind the Barnwell Center. Come on over and perform a couple of your Soundclick songs!!


"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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Thanks for the information Tricia! Really appreciate your feedback and suggestions. I'll try to get to Louisiana for the conference, sounds like fun.

Roxy
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Bump. smile


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Roxy....Great voice....really, really good the whole deal here....you have a real pro sound going.....the music was good also...enjoyed this....Bob

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Hey Bob!

Thanks for listening and your comments.

Roxy
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I need a little more feedback on this one before I make the final cut. Bump. smile


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Move over Erykah Badu. Can't find anything I don't like about this. Cut it!

Wicked good stuff.

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lol...Lyle, thanks for the feedback. I'm glad that you like it.

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Hi Roxy

Just want to stop in and say I enjoyed the listen. You have a great voice, band and very dancable sound. I'm sure you have a nice following.

As far as the song goes, you've tapped into so many of the sounds that make your genre and done this well. This is where though, for me as a writer and listener, it falls a little short. I'd like to see you reach for something new and different as you go forward and write. Make your own cliches, if you will. You have talent. Be brave. smile jm


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Joice thanks for listening. You're right...in my recent writings I am focusing on that "something new and different". Thanks so much for the feedback.

Roxy
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Roxy,
Are you sure that you're not related to Billy Withers? You have that Funky sound down to a sience and I loved it. Brought back my youthful days in North Minneapolis listening and dancing to many funk fusion type bands. And heck, I even played this style for many years as a basist, imagine that. You definately have a great groove going on. It's the heart of the city that makes your song so good. Like I said, Billy would be proud of you and as I recall his back up band played much your style which I truly enjoy. It's alive with activity and takes the negatives of society away. I can only hope that you're playing out in the clubs with your music my dear,, and I mean that!! It's that good.
Good luck!
BOB


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Well... Bob thank you so much. I haven't played any of my own music on my gigs yet, but when I do I hope to get the same reaction that you just had. smile Thanks again.

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Man, Roxy, play this one OUT! This is great stuff!
What I love most (besides that it's just plain wicked awesome funk-which I love) is how the hook plays off that saying that "Insanity is doing the same thing over and over again expecting different results." I also LOVE that she's calling him on it. Hey, you said if I don't like it I should leave, so I'm leaving, hello? what's the problem?? smile I love that whole attitude!!

LOVED your brother's voice in there trying to talk at her, and the responses. Very fun and funny. That all is working very well. Loved the nod to Aretha too (RESPECT). I wonder though if you'll need to pay a sampling fee/licensing thingy to use it--be sure and figure that out before you go forward with it on a CD or something. Don't want it to burn you. IMO it's worth paying a little to keep it in there, because it adds to the fun of the song.

I also really liked the instrument build at the beginning. That's really working well.

Lyrically you're pretty much there too. There's a few small suggestions I might make. But they're small--go with YOUR gut not mine! LOL.
Changes in CAPS:
(verse)
You don't need me to explain nothing
AS IF you never understood
-------------
(chorus)
NOW YOU'RE acting crazy
Doing what you always did before
I'm not important baby
Remember you said so
SO WHY'RE you acting crazy
You said if I don't like it hit the door
SO THERE I GO
DON'T BE SO SURPRISED
WHEN YOU reap what you sow

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On the BRIDGE it would be fun to use your brother's talking, from his perspective, saying something here instead of these lines maybe. And she gets to just diss whatever lame excuses he's using.
Otherwise... try maybe this?
(bridge)
Baby ain't this crazy
Remember how I cried and you walked away
SO DO IT AGAIN NOW JUST WALK AWAY
ONLY I AIN'T CRYING NO MORE, NO WAY

Or something like that. ???

I get what you're saying with the other 2 lines--but inviting that you didn't understand, asking WHY is sort of an invitation to discuss with him--and you're CLEAR that you're past the discussion point. So by this point trying to figure him out is past her, she's moved on, and he needs to get with it.

So for me, those 2 lines I would rework a little, at least, because it doesn't pick apart to be consistent with the rest of the song. My lines up there have too many syllables! But you could draw out that trumpet/brass da da da da da da DUM a little more for a stronger effect-- IF you wanted to, there's room to. I just feel, that right there, you want a good "OOOMPH" line lyrically that suits that musical hook, with that "Oh yeah?" attitude at its peak. It would make cool even cooler. grin

I added another line to your chorus--that might mess it up musically, I'm not sure--but I sorta liked having that thought in there ('hit the door? OK, I'm outta here'), better than saying "I thought I was your baby" (which could also imply a touch of regret--which isn't what this song is all about).

Man, I hope you make it big.
Your voice and sound is just SO cool.

I'm honored to get to know you!

Linda


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Hey Linda, thanks so much for all of your feedback. I've been away from the computer for a few days. My mother's still in the hospital very ill and I've been spending most of my time with her. Thought I'd check in and see what was going on here. yeah...I've been thinking about that r-e-s-p-e-c-t line and a few other lines in this song. I'm really glad that you like the song. Hopefully I'll be able to get back to my music and concentrate soon.

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It has a great little groove going. Nice vocals, great feel. The R-e-s-p-e-c-t obviously brings Aretha to mind. If you want that connection, then it is OK. If not, then change it.

Good one.

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I hope your mom begins to recover soon, and gets fully well.
Bless you for spending your time with her... it's those things that are truly the most important in life!
I've had this that and the other pulling me away from my recording time lately so I understand...
Hold on tight, and keep on taking good care of yourself and her.
Sing to her! smile
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Thanks so much Linda. I have been singing to my mother. She opened her eyes last night after being unconscious for 3 days when I started singing. I'm hopeful.

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I like this Roxy ...good idea putting the "respect " shout from the other song in there! I like that ..vocals are p-e-r-f-e-c-t for this song..you've got it girl ..I'm diggin the funk groove with the what i am thiking is a waa waa petal on a guitar ...good stuff here ! I listen to all styles of music ..anything from screamo (believe it or not ; ) some Rap ,60's 70's 80's pop and rock ....just anything that gives me a feeling ..i enjoyed this ..your vocals have a bit of Tina Turner tone/style to them ..and thats very sweet singing to your mom ...sending a prayer out for her and your family ..Heather

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Thank you Heather. I appreciate the prayer. Glad you like my groove. smile I listen to all styles of music too. Yeah...that's a waa-waa petal in there. It's what I heard in my head (hehehe) when I wrote the song.

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That's a sweet groove you and the band got goin' there. I heard ya tippin' your hat to B.B.(the thrill is gone), and Aretha. Best of luck - but you shouldn't need it cause you got the goods. Love the horns in there.

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Thanks PeteG for your feedback...and welcome. smile

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Thanks Roxy!

I'm a big blues fan, more blues than soul but I like it all!! When I went to college in 1965 my roommate was a brother and he laid a James, the Godfather, Brown record on me and changed my life forever. Another friend had tapes of JB Hutto and some of the Chicago brothers taped from clubs on the Southside. Later in life I met Willie Dixon and his family in Cali and I met Whoopi before she was Whoopi and I knew Alfre Woodard before she was famous. You can't predict who's gonna make it and who isn't, but personality, energy and positive attitude - and dedication - with some luck is a great recipe. Just keep putting yourself out there and good things will start to happen for you - I'm sure!

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Roxy, great news about your mom. Keep on singing to her.
I'll keep praying for her over here.
Hey if you want I will put her name on the temple prayer roll here in Seattle. PM me if you'd like that.
There's an LDS temple right there in Houston... you can call them at 281-376-6804 and they will be glad to put your mom's name on the prayer roll there too. She will be prayed for several times a day by the people who go there to worship.
Just, whatever small thing I can do over here to help ease the burden, is all I'm trying to do, no pressure. smile I care, and I know it's hard what you're going through.

Oh--and Pete has met some cool people... wow, Pete!
I remember Whoopi saying in an interview on the Actors' Studio I think it was, that she was just plain lucky to be where she was--since there are so many talented people out there trying to make it.

Still... man, you're 'da bomb' baby. Praying for things to happen for you in your music too. You deserve it!

Linda

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Roxy,

I missed this the first time around, and I'm glad it got bumped so I could hear it. If you didn't include the stuff at the start and end, it'd be hard to figure out this was a scratch demo.

I love the "sampling" of The Thrill Is Gone and RESPECT.

I even enjoyed the bump bump bump along with the horns.

The groove was perfect.

The only line that didn't work for me was "I took that as long as I could". Something about the word "that", kinda weak and it' wasn't clear what it was referring to. I felt what you really wanted to say was "I took your sh** as long as I could". Maybe you should say "I took your.." then have that guitar twang come in smile

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Linda, hi!

Hey I'm a old guy, just wait when you get older your gonna look back and say that person I knew way back did THAT. People I'd lost track of turn up having done the most amazing things. And there are many who accomplish great things by just living ordinary lives - raising children, being educators, and secretaries. I wish you happiness which is the greatest gift of all.

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Guys thanks so much for your comments.

Linda, I'm touched by your offer to add my mother's name to the temple prayer roll. Please do. It's hard to remain sane while I'm going through this. Thank you.

Ant, glad you're diggin' my stuff. You're right...I did want to say "I took your sh**long as I could". smile

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good potential here Roxy, you threw me a little curve when I heard the thrill is gone, I said damn didn'tt BB have like the biggest hit ever with that line, and then came the r-e-s-p-e-c-t and then I got it that you were injecting pop culture lines into your lyric, fine for an artist, but most publishers will shy away from it when they are actual lines from a song. I was hoping the music would change a little more at the chorus, but other than that it's on it's way to being a tune with a good groove. Keep going with the horn work, I think those lines could give it that feeling of change it needs added in the right spots. Good luck with it, Moker

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Thanks for listening Moker. I appreciate your comments.

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Roxy,

Love it...some of everybody in there...the wah and bass line (Poppa was a rollin stone) BB, Aretha, Barry and more. I like it as is...even with the stage direction...grrooves..it does.

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Thanks Tom! smile


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