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I write this today and as of yet haven't made any changes. Your thoughts are welcome.


In The Hands of Time
© 2007 Teddie Cochran

Tick tock goes the clock
Father Time opens shop
And the sun begins to rise
Ding dong goes the chimes
Mother Nature wipes her eyes
And the birds begin to fly

Thump, thump moves the mark
To the rhythm of the heart
As the sun extend his rays
Click, click drops the weights
As wheels slowly race
And the dipper fades away

In the hands of time
All things live and die
Who are we to question why
As the pendulum sways
This is how it is
As we live our masquerade
And the sand sifts away
In the hands of time
Hay… hay… hay

Fragile are the moments of our lives
In the hands of time

Swish, swish is the rate
The universe dictated
Our passage in time
Tick Tock goes the clock
Father Time closes shop
As shadows turn to night

In the hands of time
All things live and die
Who are we to question why
As the pendulum sways
This is how it is
As we live our masquerade
And the sand sifts away
In the hands of time
Hay… hay… hay

Even the best of us can lose or gain
In the hands of time


Best Regards,

Teddie Cochran
www.teddiecochran-music.com

You have light thoughts with deep overtones. I first thought this would be a kid's song. But, it is intense. Is this a rock tune? It could work well for those leaving childhood moving to adulthood.

Hi Monica, This would problably work best as a rock tune. The melody running through my head has that feel. I'll have to see how it all works out. It does have a childs atmosphere, the thought did come into mind as a tune for a kids animated move like the "HOBIT". I hope this has the message I intended. I guess I'll have to see how others view this then make changes accordingly. I'm afraid it may be over a lot of peoples heads.

Best Regards,

Teddie Cochran

Hi Teddie

There is certain form of poetry that goes with what your verses have with the sounds. I can't remember the name right now but there is a creative writing challenge on the creative writing board that gives more details. I'm not sure how well this one will sing. It's possible in the rock genre it would be just fine but I am thinking it is more a kids song and in a movie score would be a great place for it. The imagery is nice the only thing really bothers me is the spoken sounds other than that it a really sound lyric (no pun intended)
Sincere Blessings
Derek

Thanks Derek I just hope it isn't too deep for the average listener.

Regards,

Teddie