Who's Online Now
10 members (couchgrouch, Fdemetrio, VNORTH2, Gary E. Andrews, Perry Neal Crawford, Sunset Poet, Guy E. Trepanier, bennash, Bill Draper, David Gill), 4,251 guests, and 265 robots.
Key: Admin, Global Mod, Mod
Register Today!
Welcome to the Just Plain Folks forums! You are currently viewing our forums as a Guest which gives you limited access to most of our discussions and to other features.

By joining our free community you will have access to post and respond to topics, communicate privately with our users (PM), respond to polls, upload content, and access many other features. Registration is fast, simple, and absolutely free; so please join our community today!
ShoutChat
Comment Guidelines: Do post respectful and insightful comments. Don't flame, hate, spam.
What's Going On
Does Billy Joel belong in top 10?
by Fdemetrio - 03/28/24 11:10 PM
It Is Done
by Sunset Poet - 03/28/24 07:44 PM
Music Industry Summit, Athens Ohio
by Gary E. Andrews - 03/28/24 06:14 PM
Can you save me from me
by VNORTH2 - 03/28/24 03:11 PM
As human as yo
by ckiphen - 03/28/24 09:55 AM
Fox News Reports Stunning Archeological Discovery.
by couchgrouch - 03/27/24 08:02 PM
Wasting My Time
by David Gill - 03/27/24 07:42 AM
Song available
by JAPOV - 03/26/24 03:38 PM
YELLIN AT CLOUDS
by David Gill - 03/26/24 03:20 PM
"Reliving" the great Lou Rawls!
by Brian Austin Whitney - 03/26/24 01:49 PM
::: The Best In My Life :::
by Bill Draper - 03/26/24 01:32 PM
The show must go on
by ckiphen - 03/26/24 09:06 AM
NYC Motel 1972
by rpirone - 03/26/24 12:43 AM
usic Industry Summitt
by Gary E. Andrews - 03/25/24 11:32 PM
The Rant Arena
by JAPOV - 03/25/24 07:39 PM
Song available
by Raymond Byabazaire - 03/25/24 11:55 AM
Song available
by Raymond Byabazaire - 03/25/24 11:55 AM
Lancaster Festival, Lancaster, Ohio
by Gary E. Andrews - 03/25/24 10:51 AM
Wasting my time
by Rob B. - 03/25/24 03:45 AM
Tom Waits.. What's he building
by Fdemetrio - 03/25/24 12:09 AM
Rick Beato, bad lyrics
by Fdemetrio - 03/24/24 11:23 PM
Inspirational Videos Post Them Here
by Sunset Poet - 03/24/24 11:27 AM
Used to take a Genius to Mix
by Fdemetrio - 03/23/24 11:00 AM
"Broken Places"
by Gary E. Andrews - 03/22/24 07:45 PM
All You Are Is A Lie
by Sunset Poet - 03/22/24 06:55 PM
Pour Choices
by Gavin Sinclair - 03/22/24 05:29 PM
Billy's 30 year overdue song.
by Fdemetrio - 03/22/24 01:30 PM
Make my dreams come true
by ckiphen - 03/22/24 10:51 AM
Top Posters
Calvin 19,857
Travis david 12,264
Kevin Emmrich 10,941
Jean Bullock 10,330
Kaley Willow 10,240
Two Singers 9,649
Joice Marie 9,186
Mackie H. 9,003
glynda 8,683
Mike Dunbar 8,574
Tricia Baker 8,318
couchgrouch 8,160
Colin Ward 7,911
Corey 7,357
Vicarn 6,916
Mark Kaufman 6,589
ben willis 6,114
Lynn Orloff 5,788
Louis 5,725
Linda Sings 5,608
KimberlyinNC 5,210
Fdemetrio 4,990
Neil Cotton 4,909
Derek Hines 4,893
DonnaMarilyn 4,670
Blake Hill 4,528
Bob Cushing 4,389
Roy Cooper 4,271
Bill Osofsky 4,199
Tom Shea 4,195
Cindy Miller 4,178
TamsNumber4 4,171
MFB III 4,143
Sunset Poet 4,126
nightengale 4,096
E Swartz 3,985
JAPOV 3,973
beechnut79 3,878
Caroline 3,865
Kolstad 3,845
Dan Sullivan 3,710
Dottie 3,427
joewatt 3,411
Bill Cooper 3,279
John Hoffman 3,199
Skip Johnson 3,027
Pam Hurley 3,007
Terry G 3,005
Nigel Quin 2,891
PopTodd 2,890
Harriet Ames 2,870
MidniteBob 2,761
Nelson 2,616
Tom Tracy 2,558
Jerry Jakala 2,524
Al Alvarez 2,499
Eric Thome 2,448
Hummingbird 2,401
Stan Loh 2,263
Sam Wilson 2,246
Wendy D 2,235
Judy Hollier 2,232
Erica Ellis 2,202
maccharles 2,134
TrumanCoyote 2,096
Marty Helly 2,041
DukeWill 2,002
floyd jane 1,985
Clint Anglin 1,904
cindyrella 1,888
David Wright 1,866
Clairejeanne 1,851
Cindy LaRosa 1,824
Ronald Boyt 1,675
Iggy 1,652
Noel Downs 1,633
Rick Heenan 1,608
Cal 1,574
GocartMoz 1,559
Jack Swain 1,554
Pete Larsen 1,537
Ann Tygart 1,529
Tom Breshers 1,487
RogerS 1,481
Tom Franz 1,473
Chuck Crowe 1,441
Ralph Blight 1,440
Rick Norton 1,429
Kenneth Cade 1,429
bholt 1,411
Letha Allen 1,409
in2piano 1,404
Stan Simons 1,402
Deej56 1,385
mattbanx 1,384
Jen Shaner 1,373
Charlie Wong 1,347
KevinP 1,324
Vondelle 1,316
Tom W. 1,313
Jan Petter 1,301
scottandrew 1,294
lane1777 1,280
Gerry 1,280
DakLander 1,265
IronKnee 1,262
PeteG 1,242
Ian Ferrin 1,235
Glen King 1,214
VNORTH2 1,212
IdeaGuy 1,209
AaronAuthier 1,177
summeoyo 1,174
Diane Ewing 1,162
ckiphen 1,120
joro 1,082
BobbyJoe 1,075
S.DEE 1,040
yann 1,037
9ne 1,035
David Gill 1,032
Tony A 1,016
argo 986
peaden 984
90 dB 964
Wolvman 960
Jak Kelly 912
krtinberg 890
Drifter 886
Petra 883
RJC 845
Brenda152 840
Nadia 829
ant 798
Juan 797
TKO 784
Dayson 781
frahmes 781
bennash 763
teletwang 762
Andy K 750
Andy Kemp 749
tbryson 737
Jackie444 731
Irwin 720
3daveyO3 704
Dixie 701
Joy Boy 695
Pat Hardy 692
Knute 686
Lee Arten 678
Moosesong 668
Katziis 652
R.T.MOORE 638
quality 637
CG King 622
douglas 621
R&M 614
Mel 614
NaomiSue 601
Shandy 590
Ria 587
TAMERA64 583
qbaum 570
nitepiano 566
pRISCILLA 556
Tink2 553
musica 539
deanbell 528
RobertK 527
BonzaiWag 523
Roderic 522
BB Wilbur 513
goodfolks 499
Zeek 487
Stu 486
Steve P. 481
KathyW 462
allenb 459
MaxG 458
Philjo 454
fanito 448
trush48 448
dmk 442
Rob L 439
arealrush 437
DGR 436
avweek 435
Stephen D 433
Emmy 431
marquez 422
kit 419
Softkrome 417
kyrksongs 415
RRon 408
Laura G. 407
VNORTH 407
Debra 407
eb 406
cuebald 399
EdPerrone 399
Dannyk1 395
Hobart 395
Davyboy49 393
Smile 389
GJShades 387
Alek 386
Ezt 384
tone 380
Marla 380
Ann_F 379
iggyiggy 378
coalminer 377
java 374
ddreuter 371
spidey 371
sweetsong 370
danny 367
Rob B. 364
Jim Ryan 360
papaG 353
Z - man 350
JamesDF5 348
John K 348
Jaden 344
TheBaz 340
Steggy 339
leif 339
tonedeaf 336
rickwork 334
Eddie Ray 332
Johnboy 328
Bob Lever 328
Helicon1 327
lucian 326
Muskie 321
kc 319
Z. Mulls 318
ptondreau 313
ONOFFON 312
Chris B. 310
trush 304
ed323 297
Ellen M 294
markus-ky 293
lizzorn 291
nicnac49 290
Char 286
ktunes 285
Top Likes Received
JAPOV 86
VNORTH2 45
bennash 38
Previous Thread
Next Thread
Print Thread
Rate Thread
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
This one has been through rewrite and we've just completed a new demo. Melissa Evans from Lyric 3 is my co-writer on this one...got the demo yesterday, pitched it today. I have this as the first song on my music page at this link...

www.soundclick.com/mokerjarrett

here's the lyric, thanks for listening. Moker

TRAILER PARK SEXY
1.
She's got Gretchen Wilson hair
long, soft, and flowin'
tight little shirts are what she wears
don't matter where she's goin'
bedroom eyes and red lipstick
wiggles into some Daisy Dukes
to complete her little outfit

she may not have Hollywood Fashion sense,
but she's got curves that just don't quit

She's Trailer Park Sexy
her house on wheels is her retreat
perfect body, from her head to her feet
got her own taste, and a gorgeous face
somethin' about her gets to me...
She's Trailer Park Sexy

2.
She's the life of the party showin' her tattoo
in the small of her back
She's Southern Proof the Lord makes beauties
on both sides of the track
always drinks her beer, straight from a can
tips her Earnhardt hat,when she sees a military man

around the edges she may be just a little bit rough
but there ain't nothin' wrong with bein' a little bit tough

She's Trailer Park Sexy
her house on wheels is her retreat
Perfect body from her head to her feet
got her own taste, and a gorgeous face
somethin' about her gets to me...
She's Trailer Park Sexy


bridge:
She’s had a few boyfriends
But the relationships always end
Cos she’s feisty and hot
And they can’t handle what she’s got

She's Trailer Park Sexy
her house on wheels is her retreat
I may not take her home to mama
but I'd sure like to get her off her feet
somethin' about her gets to me...
She's Trailer Park Sexy
Ohh She’s Trailer Park Sexy
Trailer Park Sexy
Ohh She's Trailer Park Sexy

© 2007 all rights reserved Moker Jarrett ASCAP/Melissa Evans
mjbmusic@comcast.net

Joined: Jul 2003
Posts: 8,318
Top 20 Poster
Offline
Top 20 Poster
Joined: Jul 2003
Posts: 8,318
Moker and Melissa, this is excellent. Wish you all the best with it. Sounds reallllllllly nice. I don't know who the vocalist is but he's got it going on.


"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
Joined: Mar 2002
Posts: 4,297
Top 100 Poster
Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: Mar 2002
Posts: 4,297
Moker,
Clever bridge on this, a short bio of this gal's life.
High class production about a "low life" character. wink

Excellent demo!
Michael


There's nothing remarkable about it. All one has to do is hit the right keys at the right time and the instrument plays itself. -- Johann Sebastian Bach

MichaelBorges.com
LicenseQuote.com
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Tricia,
We wrote this song about two or three months ago, demo'd it, sent it to a hit writer, he made some observations and comments , rewrote it, and what is here is the retake. The singer is Dennis Parker, he is the singer on all my male country demos, he really is quite a talented guy. Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment, and for the luck...like I said I'm already pitching it, and that luck is just what we need now...Moker

Joined: Apr 2006
Posts: 5,788
Top 40 Poster
Offline
Top 40 Poster
Joined: Apr 2006
Posts: 5,788
Looks like Moker smelled a good lyric and took it for a ride. I've noticed that Melissa has an ability to write well in the contemporary country genre. Hope the pitching pays off for the both of you. Commerical demo. Good luck you two!!!!

Best,
Lynn


My Music at Soundclick
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_music.cfm?bandID=788266

~call it a blessing or call it a curse, but I see all of life in verse~

Always open to collaborations smile

God Bless Our Military!!!
Joined: Feb 2001
Posts: 9,649
Top 20 Poster
Offline
Top 20 Poster
Joined: Feb 2001
Posts: 9,649
Oh yeah! This is sooooo commercial and so nicely done. And you are right about Dennis. I have heard quite a few of his demos and he is always right on the money. Didn't he travel with Tracey Lawrence for a while? Back-up singer, maybe?

I really like these two lines:


"She's Southern Proof the Lord makes beauties
on both sides of the track"

And your bridge really pulls it all together. Of course, that's what a bridge is supposed to do. But most folks don't do it this well! Super song! Best of luck with it.

I was wandering if you had run this one by Rebecca Dale. I know that you and she collab from time to time. She would probasbly like the heck out this one. Heck...most people would!

Al

Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Michael,
thanks for checking this one out, the bridge makes it all gel for me too...Moker

Joined: Dec 2006
Posts: 489
Serious Contributor
Offline
Serious Contributor
Joined: Dec 2006
Posts: 489
I just wanted to say thanks to everybody that took a listen and commented. I had a lot of fun doing this one. Moker is a great person to work with!

Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Lynn,
You are exactly right, well mostly, what I felt at first was a very unique and strong hook, I really don't think songs have a prayer with out that going for them...we worked and reworked this and here's what we came up with. We've taken the advice of #1 hit songwriters and here's what we've come up with, if this makes it or not it's not because of lack of effort or desire. I've felt like this lyric, although it's been massaged, could be commercial from day 1. You are right about Melissa, I think her strongest efforts to date are right in this realm of Contemporary Country stuff with a provocative edge. I am fortunate to have worked with her on this...thanks for the listen...Moker

Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Al,
Thanks for the listen, You always encourage me to keep doing what I'm doing, I appreciate the listen and I'm just gonna keep pluggin' away at what I do until I get there...and yes, I believe Dennis is still backin' up Tracey and he's more than talented enough to be the artist himself, Nashville is certainly not always fair is it.?! The Southern proof line, I'll say I came up with that, while the bridge is all Melissa, that's why we're a good team...ha...and of course I ran it by Dale, she's my main one I co-write with so her opinion is invaluable to me along the way...Moker

Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Melissa,
Thanks for the great lines, storyline, fantastic hook, and for stickin' it through. I think we've got a pitchable song here, in fact I know it's pitchable cos I'm already pitchin' it, let's just hope somebody steps up to the plate and smacks it...ha...thanks again...Moker

Joined: Nov 2006
Posts: 433
S
Serious Contributor
Offline
Serious Contributor
S
Joined: Nov 2006
Posts: 433
Moker & Melissa,
Very nice. Modern and unique beat. Great lyrics. If that's your band playing, you guys sound great. Good job to the both of you! Steve

Woops! Just noticed Dennis parker was the singer. Didn't read the other posts first. Take care

Last edited by Stephen D; 07/29/07 05:42 PM.
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Stephen,
Thanks for the listen, Trailer Park Sexy was such a cool hook it just drew me in and I knew I had to write a contemporary Country song to bring it out with...you're right Dennis Parker on vox, and Jason Roller ran the session for us...it's great to write and have those guys there to help us get them ready to compete...thanks again...Moker

Joined: Jun 2003
Posts: 1,652
Top 200 Poster
Offline
Top 200 Poster
Joined: Jun 2003
Posts: 1,652
Hey Moker and Melissa,

Cool song you guys have here, got that Jeffrey Steele vibe going on. Love the hook. Love hearing an organ!

Would have liked to hear the chorus kicked up a notch, a little more energy, other than that, great song.

Good luck with it.

Joined: Sep 2004
Posts: 5,725
Top 50 Poster
Offline
Top 50 Poster
Joined: Sep 2004
Posts: 5,725
Kindof sounds a little bluesey.. Hey what if on this part "She's Southern Proof the Lord makes beauties" You changed it to "Angels instead of beauties" smile


http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn

"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Iggy,
thanks for the ear and the comments bro, I'm pitching this now, we'll see what happens, I'll mention the chorus and see if we can't bump it a bit, by the way Jeffrey Steele is my favorite contemporary country writer, I've met him a couple times, wish I had his job, his boss is a cool guy too...ha...thanks again...Moker

Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Louis,
I happen to wish this was a little more straight forward country myself, it is a genre straddling song, which is great for an established artist to cut, but new or even sophomore artists hold tight to a sound until their fan base is established. so while it's real fun to listen to, I wish it was a little more Nashvilleized so the pitching would receive more green lights. I just started to pitch it so, ya neva know, right? The Beauties to Angels line, I'll have to wait and see if an artist wants to make that change, this is demo round two on this song and I've got to pitch this and move on creatively. Thanks for the listen...Moker

Joined: Dec 2006
Posts: 5,827
Top 50 Poster
Offline
Top 50 Poster
Joined: Dec 2006
Posts: 5,827
Hey Moker,

Cool song. Can be done either as a southern blues/rock, or countrified, both would work. Can even hear a few NY jazz licks in there. Really versatile song, and easily convertable to a number of genres. Good luck with it.

cheers, niteshift

Joined: Jul 2006
Posts: 5,711
Likes: 18
Top 50 Poster
Offline
Top 50 Poster
Joined: Jul 2006
Posts: 5,711
Likes: 18
Hi Melissa, Hi Moker,

This is fantastic all the way around. I love the jazzy soulful kinda Lyle Lovett style to the music and vocal, , all those great licks in between lyrics--but the lyrics bring the song to life, they form instantaneous crystal clear images, images I welcome, btw smile

Good luck and best wishes,
Mike


Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice

-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Niteshift,
that's what I'm kinda hoping for, that since country has basically swallowed and incorporated the southern rock genre, that one of those guys might pick this up and go with it. We'll have to wait and see if we can get it cut...one thing for sure, I'll be tryin. thanks for listening and commenting...see ya around...Moker

Joined: Jul 2007
Posts: 77
L
Serious Contributor
Offline
Serious Contributor
L
Joined: Jul 2007
Posts: 77
Moker,

This is my first real critique on JPF. I dont' claim to be good at it nor can say I'm very comfortable at it. But here's my honest take:

I read the lyrics first and thought they were great. Very well written, clever, great imagery. However, I was expecting to hear a more rockin' melody. Something in line with J. Steel's "Something In The Water." or "I'm Here For The Party." The lyrics scream "attitude." What I heard wasn't bad, but I think that the melody seems to be in genre "purgatory" and would like to hear it with and "attitude."

ljw

Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
LJW,
I actually do Somethin' in the Water live with my band...ha...to be honest the demo guys I use kinda took this in that jazzy groove direction and I've had them add some country licks to try and fix it. It's a good observation you've made and one I kinda knew the first time I got this back. He does sing it very well, maybe someone will pick it up and fix it when they cut it,or maybe I'll redo it at some point myself....Thanks...Moker

Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Mike,
Thanks for taking a listen and commenting. I love the song's imagery as well, that's what we're trying to do is conjure up a picture of a girl that is friggin' hot to a redneck and a Senator or businessman. I mean when she's got it goin on, she's got it goin' on right?! The genre straddling issue is one where it will take the right artist to use this, or a great producer who can see the potential of the lyric...Thanks...Moker

Joined: Feb 2007
Posts: 10,941
Likes: 3
Top 10 Poster
Offline
Top 10 Poster
Joined: Feb 2007
Posts: 10,941
Likes: 3
Moker,

Cool song and well done demo. I think the music has got that 'tude you want and the vocals do reflect some of that. Using LJW's comments, I think the vocalist might have too much of a "clean" voice for a song like this. However, I think the vocals are still excellent and you have a very pitchable tune there. Great job all the way around and good luck with this one.

I see you used "Magicshack" for a lot of your demos and they seem to do a very good job. I see they charge $350 for a "full-band" demo (or $250 if you mix it yourself) and then $50 per additional instruments. That seems like a pretty good deal -- is this sort of a standard price?

Again, happy hunting with pitching this one.

Kevin


"Good science comes in peer reviewed journals. Conspiracy theories come in YouTube videos. "
Kevin @ bandcamp: Crows Say Vee-Eh (and Kevin @50/90 2019)
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Kevin,
Thanks, some are less, some are more, there's a wait factor with these guys when they're on the road, but they're on the road with name acts, so the quality of the work is something I've been real happy with. I think if anything the vocal might be a little too soulful on this. I find it hard to pick at Dennis' singing though , some of the publishers I pitch to have even made a point to tell me he's way talented. I met these guys through Dale, my main co-writer. I've always had them mix.

Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Hey, a little good news on this today, it was nominated for best of songU. Which means a publisher and perhaps a songplugger will have it in their group of elite songU songs for filling pitch opps from. Dale and I have two of those together, this is Melissa and I's first one together...thanks for listening everyone...MJ

Joined: Apr 2005
Posts: 7,997
Top 20 Poster
Offline
Top 20 Poster
Joined: Apr 2005
Posts: 7,997
Great Work Moker & Melissa

Very well crafted and clever... And Moker I'm just so impressed and inspired but your hard work, commiment and ability to adapt and get it done... smile

I liked the demo and have always liked Magic's work.
Can't really add much except I thought maybe the song (production wise) could have been rougher, harder and heavier. I love the vibe but these lyrics have words that feel like they want to jump out at you and bite you. The vocal (good sound) was so mellow and lacked dynamics.
I just think this track needs to kick ass to get the attention it deserves.. where was the guitars? smile More dynamics...

Good song! and again I'm so happy you are on stride and getting so much accomplished.


Thanks!
Peace Mike
Sub

Music & Video's & Photo's
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=482602

Demo/Production & Music Services
http://www.substudiomusic.com







Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Mike,
Thanks for the kind words and advice. I wish this was a little more in your face also. I'm going to pitch it as is, already am, but I just wish the production was a bit more with a punchier edge like the lyric. Next time I write a punchy one maybe I should try substudio...ha...Time will tell how it flies, already had one publisher tell me it was too redneck for him, and he's on Music Row...when Country music has to have the redneck taken out of the lyric, there has been a shift in the genre, which won't hurt me in the long run, I was raised on southern and hard rock...thanks for the encouragement...Moker

Joined: Dec 2005
Posts: 227
Serious Contributor
Offline
Serious Contributor
Joined: Dec 2005
Posts: 227
moker and melissa

i dont know what to say as i am not an expert when it comes to crits, but i DO know what i like to listen to and this is it! it sounds great and i found myself listening to it a few times...just couldnt get enough...even made my wife listen to it...more than once...you guys are amazing!
good luck with it and i hope this finds you well

nick


If you give them the tools, you give them a chance.
ngb
Joined: Oct 2006
Posts: 1,041
Top 500 Poster
Offline
Top 500 Poster
Joined: Oct 2006
Posts: 1,041
Moke & Lissa

Good job guys. I think the only nit I have has already been mentioned. I'd like to hear it have a more kick ass feel to it. I like the bluesy sound but I think it would better suit the lyric with more "attitude".... I know, I know...did you expect any less from me? Attitude is my middle name..lol. At least that's what I've been told. of course, I've also been told it's Michelle....but who knows what to believe anymore. wink

Good luck with it & Moke, if we are takin' numbers...I'm next...lol. smile

Bree


The ideal poet has a genius for making the things we see every day seem new. ~ Samuel Johnson

I write because I breathe, I breathe because I write. ~ Me

www.soundclick.com/breeg
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Nick,
really good to hear from you and glad that you enjoyed the music. I think this has potential to be something folks would like on the radio. Not this actual version, but this song, I'm gonna keep tryin' to get it in front of, I dunno, Trace Adkins, Dierks Bentley, who else?...How are things up in Maine? had one of my carpet installers move up there a month or so ago...Thanks again for your support...Moker

Joined: Jul 2007
Posts: 77
L
Serious Contributor
Offline
Serious Contributor
L
Joined: Jul 2007
Posts: 77
Moker, Congrats on the song nomination! You have alot of exciting things going on right now with good reason. Sounds like SongU has been a good avenue for you. Would you say that SongU has been instrumental (no pun intended:)) in getting your songs heard? I think I remember in another thread that your single song deal with "Candles" was obtained through Song U. Is that right? I'm seriously considering myself. Still haven't got critiques back from TAXI yet. I'm just starting, but realize that I don't have the connections or wherewithal to persistently pitch my music directly to publishers, so I believe I'm going to have to utilize other methods like TAXI and Song U.

ljw

Joined: May 2004
Posts: 2,246
Top 200 Poster
Offline
Top 200 Poster
Joined: May 2004
Posts: 2,246
Wonder, have you heard this one?

What do you get when you combine all of the women who live in a trailer park into one woman?

A very angry woman with a full set of teeth.

Yes, the lyric is killer, I'll update when I hear it....


Co-Write Friendly.....Look at my blog on My Space.

http://www.cherokee46x@yahoo.com
http://www.myspace.com/ronnievanzantfan
http://www.facebook.com/sambwilson

Ronnie Van Zant fan
Joined: Feb 2006
Posts: 55
Serious Contributor
Offline
Serious Contributor
Joined: Feb 2006
Posts: 55
Great song!!

I agree that the overall production would need to be punched up more for a final recording - but it's a fantastic demo! It's a winner... just needs a bit of 'umph'...

Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Bree,
you disappeared , now you're back, thanks for the listen. Congrats on your deal with Lynman. I'm swamped with studying for a contractor's exam and about 8 deep on co-writes, but eventually I'll get caught up. Thanks again...Moker

Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
LJW,
songU has been a good avenue. Like Taxi, I don't think that they can claim a bunch of major artist cuts, but there are alot of single song contracts ( I know 4 or 5 who've gotten them as a direct result of pitching there) and the whole idea of raising the bar on the level of music you produce stays on your mind constantly. I use a coach there who is a hit writer and he will absolutely rip me when I'm off base thinking a song is worth spending money on as is, and then let you know when you have something viable as well. Thanks for the listen. I can't wait 'til I have a little more time to get into the FTP thing we started, see ya...Moker

Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Snake,
that's funny...but this girl is Trailer Park Hot...and she represents about 5 million girls in this country who fall in that category, and then there's 50 million guys who like any girl that's hot...I got one line to change, the one where I may not take her home to mama, I think I should take her home to mama, and still like to get her off her feet...ha...thanks for checkin' in...Moker

Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Top 100 Poster
OP Offline
Top 100 Poster
Joined: May 2006
Posts: 4,507
Mikey,
I appreciate you takin' the time away from life in Texas to listen to this one. Hopefully the song is catchy enough as is to get someone's attention. I'll just have to pitch it, cos they can't hit it if I don't pitch it...ha...Moker


Link Copied to Clipboard
Support Just Plain Folks

We would like to keep the membership in Just Plain Folks FREE! Your donation helps support the many programs we offer including Road Trips and the Music Awards.


Newest Members
chriscastle, yasir252, cathennashira, Samwise, HappySousa
21,470 Registered Users
Forum Statistics
Forums117
Topics125,717
Posts1,160,950
Members21,470
Most Online37,523
Jan 25th, 2020
Just Plain Quotes
"If one man can do it, any man can do it. It is true. But the real question is, if one man did it, are you willing to do what it takes to do it as well?" –Brian Austin Whitney
Today's Birthdays
warriorgirl (2024)
Popular Topics(Views)
Powered by UBB.threads™ PHP Forum Software 7.7.5