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Bad Little Boys
© 2007/Tim Keesee

(Verse 1)
Been a good guy my whole life
Tried to treat women right
But, I met a woman who changed all that in just one night
Little did I know, she’d show me
The best night of my life
Til I drove her home, and she plum drove me wild

(Chorus)
Well, mama raised me to be
A southern gentleman
But, the only thing gentle last night
Were her caressin’ hands
The deeper and sweeter she kissed me
The less my lips were coy
Lord, it’s women like that
Who turn good guys into bad little boys

(Verse 2)
She poured me a drink and winked
As she slipped out of her heels
She was playin’ it smooth, but I knew she had other ideas
With her arms wrapped around my shoulders
I told her how good, holdin’ her felt
Her sweet breath on my flesh, made every inch of my body melt

(Repeat Chorus)

(Bridge)
Ain’t been in so much trouble since I was eleven or twelve
But damn, her body’s smokin’ and smokin’s bad for my health

(Final Chorus)
Yeah, I tried to respect her
Guess, I didn’t try hard enough
Respect went out the window
When our eyes first made love
The deeper and sweeter she kissed me
The more she enjoyed
Lord, it’s women like that
Who turn good guys into bad little boys
Yeah, it’s women like that
Who turn good guys into bad little boys

This is the second excellent song about loose women I've had the pleasure of listening to tonite. Fun song, I enjoyed it a lot. It has an old timey feel to it that kept my foot tapping. Cool.

Hey Tim:

Like Dan, I thought this was a good toe-tapper. And I love the hook line. Great delivery too, in my opinion.

Only thing I'm not sure about is the rhyme of gentleman with hands. When I hear the phrase "southern gentleman" spoken, the last syllable has a "mun" sound. You have to sing it with the "man" sound to make the rhyme work - which, to me, works against the common phrase. It comes across as southern gentle man.

Anyway, the nits always take longer to talk about that what I think worked - which was pretty much everything else

Nice one,

Scott

Hey Tim

I've used EastCraft on quite a few economy demos , and that sure sounds like Dave's vocals ..... but whoever it is , they did a pretty good job on the vibe for ya .


This is just my opinion , but I thought the lyrics were playing it way too safe (conservative) for the vibe and subject of the song . The theme suggests you were seduced by a wild woman , but there wasn't the mature lyric imagery to make us believe it was hot .

for example , instead of -
"Her sweet breath on my flesh, made every inch of my body melt"
try -
"Her sweet breath on my flesh, had me reaching for my belt"

This song sounded like a good live show sort of song that a crowd would really want to get right into -- and todays live shows can be quite accepting of using some mature imagery .

Either way , I did enjoy the song -
and appreciate you granting the listen .


Don
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I disagree with the need to "spice" the lyrics anymore. The word are suggestive enough that we already know what's happened. Don't need to use a sledgehammer.

Hey Tim: This is really good. I really love that last line of the bridge. That's some good ironic country writing. /Glen

Hi Dan...nice to meet you! I appreciate you taking the time to listen. Glad you enjoyed the tune!


Hey Scott...nice to meet you too! I hear what you are saying about the "gentleman"/"hands" rhyme. Think it has to do more with the way the demo is sung there, but I don't feel it really detracts from the song or meaning, though I understand what you are saying. Glad you liked the rest of it. Appreciate you telling me so.


Hey Don...how are you sir? Good ears...yep, that is Dave singing. True, there's lots of ways I could have taken this thing if I wanted to push the envelope a bit more. As someone who tends to write a lot of, for lack of a better term, "rowdy, redneck women/men" songs, I don't mind pushing the envelope. For me though, it's always somewhat of a fine line because I also learned very early on, that as a writer, you don't ever want to portray females in too negative of a light, especially considering the percentage of country music sales, that the female population buys. However, those guidelines have probably loosened, I'm sure, over the past few years, but I do understand what you mean. Thank you again for taking a few minutes to listen and offer your feedback, as I appreciate that very much!


Howdy Kevin...thank you for chiming in too! So that's one vote for more suggestive overtones, and one vote for "don't cram it down my throat, I got the picture"! LOL! You're vote is duly noted. Thanks so much for taking the time to listen and comment!


Hi there, Glen...I appreciate your comments very much, as I have a lot of respect for you, not that I don't respect the other's that have commented too. I've just happend to have followed a lot of your work over the years, and you are very good at the craft of songwriting, obviously. So it means alot to me when you've got something to positive to say, though I am just as appreciative of any contructive criticism as well. I have to agree with you, the last line of the bridge is my favorite part of the song as well. Thanks for mentioning it, and I'm glad you enjoyed the song!

You have a good hook and the music is is working pretty good. You have a few lines that just are not strong enough yet. I hope you have a mix minus the vocal on the CD so that you can tinker with the lyrics.

Here are some of the lines ahd phrases that could have been used to add imagery or interest or "spice" but were just taking up space.

"Little did I know"
"her carressing hands"
"Respect went out the window"
"I told her how good holding her felt"

All thoses lines were show stoppers for me and were clues that it isn't radio ready.

and I think you should say it this way:

It's women like that
who turn good men like me
into Bad little Boys