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Wow! What a site! I was invited to visit and join by A great writer here, Jody Thank you for this place!! It's incredible! May take me a year or two to go through this huge place! Look ya'll I'm a wanna be writer or lyricist or what ever you call me. I've got a couple of demos so far, one of which one the summer of 05 songwriting contest at Paramount group in Nashville (lyrics only) The grand prize was $550.00 and a full seven piece band demo of "Tumbleweed heart" Made free for me by some great players in Nashville. Now I don't know if it's appropriate to join and just start posting lyrics here the first rattle out of the box. So I've read a few on here and am blown away by the talent found here. Just AWESOME STUFF! Well I've decided to put one here and hope it doesn't offend anybody that I just start posting. I guess I might as well start with the other one I have a demo of, so here goes, I hope ya'll enjoy it!

Freedom rings once more

She went to her knees that day But she wasn't knocked there
She had only kneeled to pray
For all her children everywhere
Crying tears of great sorrow
for the futures that were lost
She rose again on the morrow
vowing justice at any cost

Chorus

The eleventh of september
the day we faced our fears
A day the world will remember
As the Eagle sheds her tears
Suddenly out of the ashes rose
Great heroes by the score
And even as the ill wind blows
Freedom rings once more

A sleeping giant has awakened
To unwanted war and grief
Her pride had not been taken
By this dark and deadly thief
much to the evil ones surprise
He missed the desired effect
Tears of rage fill the Eagles eyes
She now stands fully errect

Repeat chorus

Thousands of her children died
In this most demonic way
Yet millions more show their pride
It gets stronger everyday
Stars and bars the red white and blue
A nations battle cry
Terrorists she hunts for you
And you're bound to die

repeat chorus

Freedom rings once more
Freedom rings once more Fade


© 2002 Jody Willman


OK lay it on me folks! (I ain't skeered) much!

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JodyWillman

"Plaaay me a little"

Hi Jody!
And welcome to JPF! I'm new myself (a couple of weeks) and I found a new home here myself..
Your song looks great to me, so keep on writing!
Mark

Hi Jody Welcome
You know it feels kind of weird saying that r typing it, folks might think im talkin to myself, well nothin new !!!
Love your song, have a fondness for Eagles as you know, it's got a great story line speaks the truth, good flow good hook, have nothin to really nic or sugest looks great to me, look fdw to hearing it

Hugs Dear Friend
Eagle/Jody
www.soundclick.com/jodydickey

Hi Jody,

Nice Lyric

Not sure this will fly right now, cut and run is in the air.

Most people just don’t have the intestinal fortitude for a war like the one we have on our hands right now. They need a quick clear cut victory they can put away and get back to the ball game or down to the beach.

Keep it handy for the next time we're awakened. JMO

Good Luck
Bill

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Drop by and listen to.. My Music ..when you have a chance.

Jody, welcome. Who is "she"? You need to be specific. I know who you mean but a great lyric is crystal clear as to the meaning.

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"Experience teaches us that silence terrifies people the most."~~Bob Dylan

www.giddygirlmusicpublishing.com

Hi Jody,

Welcome!

I've only had time to read the chorus but it blew me away!
It is flawlessly effective, rhymes beautifully, isn't too long and has great lines like:

The Day the Eagle Shed Her Tears

Funny, but as I wrote your line I went back to look at yours and realized I had re-worded it slightly.
What do you think of my revision?

"And even as the ill wind blows"
is a great line too.

You're smokin right outta the chute!

Terry

Thanks Mark, Jody and Bill you are probably right, but it looked good in 02 when I wrote it! LOL And Tricia I only wish all lyrics WERE crystal clear in their meanings! I was talking to George MCcorkle from the Marshall Tucker band the other day and asked him what "Fire on the mountain" was about and he said it was "About life on the road in a southern rock band" Who'da thunk it? I've also heard that "Hotel California" Is about cancer?? That is a pet peeve of mine tho, making a song understandable to more than the people who were there when it was written, no matter how "Deep" it was at the time, maybe some of them are just too deep? Ya know? Thanks for the idea tho, maybe I could say America went to her knees? Man I have a feeling I'm gonna love this place!

Thanks Pete for your feedback, I think flying a couple of jets into a civilian population is a little demonic tho, at least the idea to do so is.. in my eyes.
As for revenge or justice? Well when it happened I'll be honest I wanted revenge on the animals that masterminded this thing. I know it's not politically correct and all but, it made me that mad, ya know? Justice is by it's very nature revenge in a way I think. This is a reduced version of the poem I wrote called "Eagle tears" (Made into song form)for the demo I was pressured by family and friends to have made! It's not my heart under normal times, but 9-11-01 was anything but a normal day. I will never forget the feelings I had that day and the weeks that followed. Also it's more about the American spirit than it is the government... Man there were some HEROES that showed up after that day. And if you'll recall, this country was really UNITED there for awhile. If you'd like to read the entire poem go to www.poetrypoem.com/jody and look for it there. Your thoughts are right on tho, and thanks again!

Hey, Jody
Nice to meet you. I like your lyric alot and I feel EXACTLY the way you've portrayed it!!
Ben

HiDee Mz Jody & "Welcome to Da Board!"

Off to a Nice Patriotic Start! My having just watched "World Trade Center" at the flicks a week ago, it definitely touched all the Right Nerves here. "KUDOS" for your Effort.

I penned one on 9-11..think it's back at Board 1..."Nothing's Goin' Back to Before"...which I think was a bit Meaner-Spirited..heh!

Good Job, & Lookin' Forwards to more from ya here!

Best of Luck with this Good'n'
& a Big "Welcome Aboard" Hug,
Stan

You're Welcome Jody
Hi'ya Buddy, Stan this Jody a fella, nice one at that, tho got laugh when he first connected to me in a friends on myspace I was a guy. Now i'm just 108 yr old gal !!
Big Hugs

[This message has been edited by EaglesDreams2 (edited 08-27-2006).]

Welcome Jody.

Well formed and laid out lyric.

No 'nits' from me.

Douglas

Hi Jody

Welcome to jpf. Nice writing here. Congratulations on the award. jm : )

Thanks ya'll and Joice the award was cool and all, but the people I've met through it and a tribute to Ronnie VanZant I wrote is really the greatest reward I could get! Shoot Mrs. Jane VanZant (Ronnies aunt)has my "Tribute to Ronnie" on her wall and has called me and thanked me for it in tears! Now touching people, making them think, feel, smile, cry, now that's why I love to write!

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JodyWillman

"Plaaay me a little"

Welcome Jody Willman from Texas I see.

I can offwer this alternative

((Thank God that)) out of the ashes rose
Great heroes by the score
And even as the ill wind blows
Freedom rings once more

and

A sleeping giant has awakened
To unwanted war and grief
Her pride had not been ((shaken))
by this dark and deadly thief


v3 I'm not convinced by, and the "erect" ending errrrr doesn't stand up I think it's a weak ending but salvagable as "standing vigilant erect".


Still not sure of what leads to it

how's about??

much to the evil ones surprise
the strength of Pearl shed her effect
Tears of rage fill the Eagles eyes
standing vigilant erect


.... it IS nice welcome you and see such a good work. There are a lots of good words and thoughts and ideas and pictures in your verse

I mean I offered alternatives but what you have certainly works.

So lets see some more.

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[This message has been edited by John Voorpostel (edited 08-27-2006).]

Hey John thanks man! Yea I never have liked the "effect" To "errect" part myself, I just wanted to show she didn't stay on her knees, she rose up and well you know? Great suggestions Thanks I'll see what I can do with that.

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JodyWillman

"Plaaay me a little"