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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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This one is still a work in progress....... -------------------------------------
“Five Card Draw”
Everyday feels like a game; Never wanted to join the round. But I guess it’ll always be the same. Being dealt the losing hand Day after Day.
The game of love is too hard Always making the wrong move. Please just give me a different card. Not knowing which way to go, Day after day.
CHORUS It’s hard to keep a poker face, When your hand is full of jokers. Not knowing how to react When you see the cards you lack. Every time I make a draw, It’s the same thing I just saw.
There is no way to place a bet The loss is guaranteed. Because, in the end all I get Is five smirking jokers. Day after day.
repeat CHORUS
It seems like I’ll never win Don’t want the mess I always get in Time for me to change the way I play this game today
repeat CHORUS
Love is the best, yet worst thing that can happen to a person...
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Kassie, Even if your jokers aren't wild , five of a kind is still a winning hand.
Never wanting to join in the round covering already covered ground That way they'd rhyme. I know you mentioned that this was a work in progress , figured I'd throw in. Pete
Here we are wracking our brains today to write lyrics that rhyme and if we succeed, they'll end up in time as tommorrow's cliche's... Pete
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Pete-
It's ironic becuase a deck doesn't come with five jokers, so the hand is seeminly impossible. And the jokers are a metaphor for guys that aren't worth it, that don't stand out from the rest of the bunch. (Thus a hand full of jokers). I'm still working on it though. Thanks for the advice!!
~~Kassie~~
Love is the best, yet worst thing that can happen to a person...
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Kassie, So, you're looking for the one-eyed Jacks when they are wild...LOL Pete
Here we are wracking our brains today to write lyrics that rhyme and if we succeed, they'll end up in time as tommorrow's cliche's... Pete
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hey Kassie I like the comparison you got happening got alot of good lines just got to measure them up and work on some of the rhyme. anyhow I think it's there ,good luck with it.
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Thanks java! Have a great weekend!!
~~Kassie~~
Love is the best, yet worst thing that can happen to a person...
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Hi Kassie,only advice I have is take a look at this lyric,from the outside,as if it were someone elses.Are there changes you would make.I think you have a nice song in the making.Have a great weekend.
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Thanks Cody, I'm still working on adding some more lyrics to this song. All comments are helpful. Thanks again, and have a great weekend!!
~~Kassie~~
Love is the best, yet worst thing that can happen to a person...
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